[Report This]Date: April 20 2022 4:59 AM Title: Dangers of Voyeur
This was a great chapter!
I love the sneaking around aspect as well as them using the spaces in the floor to their advantage.
It was also a nice touch having multiple women there, as well as the mother, aunt and grandmother. Not a lot of people include grandparents in such hands on (or feet on in this case XD) scenarios, and I think that is a real shame.
It was a nice touch adding her in :D
And that ending! Damn he would be traversing his mother's toe like an environment of lavender scented atmosphere.
Great work on this chapter, loved reading it.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I never normally write in much older women (In this case, the grandmother was only in her 50's or she's not exactly ancient) but in a scenario when a much older family member plays a part to obliviously killing her grandson was a story to tell.
[Report This]Date: April 20 2022 2:28 AM Title: A Mysterious Gun Lookin' Thing
I really enjoyed this last chapter. I have no real criticisms just personally preference, I was hoping the sister to have accidentally crushed one of them, maybe just partially. I do like it when someone getting crushed is a bit prolonged, like instead of turning into paste immediately he might just get stuck on her sole like one of the crumbs and be smashed to bits slowly over a few steps, having his arms and legs snapped and then his core compressed and so on.
Loving it all so far, can't wait for the next chapter
Author's Response:
Thanks. I debated whether or not to take the violent route this chapter but went the quick death end. Be on the lookout for a later tale that goes down that route.
[Report This]Date: April 17 2022 7:35 PM Title: A Mysterious Gun Lookin' Thing
Really excited for this series. Simple but filled with a ton of potential. Looking forward to seeing where you go with it!
Author's Response:
Thanks! My one weakness when it comes to story telling is lacking in details to paint the picture. I hope to work on that as I continue on