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Reviewer: Randomer000 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 06 2021 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 1: The mistake

Brilliant start to things so far!

The characterisation of both Levi and Luna is excellent, and the scenario itself is the perfect facilitator for a great many unpleasant situations - from Levi’s perspective, of course.

Out of interest, what sort of things are you expecting to include in this as things go on, mate? I know for myself, the tease about inshoe entrapment for a 10km run peaked my interest, but I assume you’ve got a broader sense of the things Luna wants to do?



Author's Response:

Thanks! 

Well, I want Luna to have a great vacation and just go with the flow to casual dominate her brother. So yeah, the inshoe entraptment will propbably happen :) If you have any ideas, let me know :) 

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 06 2021 5:03 AM Title: Chapter 1: The mistake

Can't wait for more.

Author's Response:

Thanks! 

Reviewer: Dawger2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 06 2021 3:41 AM Title: Chapter 1: The mistake

Great stuff, mate! Will be there a next chapter for this?

Author's Response:

Thanks! I plan on multiple chapters

Reviewer: frankstergirl Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 06 2021 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 1: The mistake

Great story so far, looking forward to more :) 



Author's Response:

Thanks :)

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