Oh wow, 3 new chapters all at once was a very welcome surprise.

Good setup/anticipation in this one (and technically the chapters before it). Typically in stories like this, characters that get squished don't last longer than the chapter they're introduced. That's fine, but it's nice having some variety to keep the tension up, as you never know who's gonna make it out unscathed.

Unfortunately I don't have any suggestions for improvements for these last chapters. They're all paced well and paint good mental pictures. I think the only thing that stood out was the repeated use of "maracas" to describe something shaking or being tossed about. Some more in-depth similes could help describe the scene with greater impact to the reader. You could describe the same scene with the simile "-like a shred of paper in a hurricane", or a simpler one, "-like a jello in an earthquake". Obviously these aren't hard and fast rules, they're just something to keep in the back of your mind when editing.

Thanks for the new chapters.

Short, simple, effective, nice.

Also with the ban from Patreon, have you considered an alternative, like subscribestar? I'm pretty sure they're less restrictive than Patreon when it comes to smut. Patreon seems to ban things at random, as they don't really apply their rules evenly.

Excellent so far, looking forward to the next few parts.

Promising start! I've always enjoyed your little holiday novelettes, all of them have been great so far.