[Report This]Date: August 24 2021 5:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
"Wait, she's not going to actually eat me right? Sayaka thought, suddenly worried. That's gotta cost extra, and besides, that's totally illegal!" -- Spoken like someone who definitely doesn't have any interest in getting eaten! Lol.
"Touko giggled, then bit her lip. 'If you did, I might be tempted to keep you in there and take you home with me.'" -- I know that she's probably just being a good, flirtatious host for the sake of her client, but damn I want to see that kind of relationship blossom between these two! So tantalizingly sensual!
Anyway. My review isn't just gonna be copy-pasting your writing and reacting to it. I read this story a week or so ago and have been meaning to give it some feedback, but those two lines in particular stood out in my memory. This story was very fun. Well-written and a wonderfully simple yet engaging setup allowed you to give us just enough world and character establishment for the subsequent interactions to feel meaningful, while not taking too long to get to in what's a very steamy, well-paced, sultry smut story. I seriously dig the whole thing.
As someone constantly slacking on writing his own sequels and subsequent chapters to stories I know folks are waiting on, I'm still going to be a hypocrite and beg you to continue this story. It's positively bursting with untapped potential that I just know you established on purpose. I don't want to even list the ideas you inspired because it's obvious that you have your own. (Though I will say that there's a decided lack of my favorite content, willing/gentle vore, in this community and it really seems like you've set up the main character to be amiable to such activities).
Anyway. Loved this story. 10/10. Please write more! But if you don't, thanks for writing this!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for your kind review! To be honest, I basically wrote this as a worldbuilding exercise so I was worried that I got a little too into the weeds with the worldbuillding, so I'm glad that it didn't bog down the story. I tried to approach it as a plot first and porn second story, to kinda let the smut kinda evolve organically so I'm glad the buildup felt natural. I'm also a fan of consensual gentle vore as well, and that's definitely one of the ideas I have a for a sequel.