Reviewer: kbDArt Signed [Report This]
Date: February 13 2023 9:13 PM Title: A Disappointed Fiancée's Hunger

Great little erotic story. Of course, those who have read a bit of vore know exactly who Dr. Cooper is, so that adds greatly to the pretext of the story. Well written. If I were writing the story, I’d only change a couple minor things. I’d tamp down the insertion to just gentle play to get him lubricated and her engines going, and I would have some playful dialogue between the two as she encouraged him into her mouth, then his realization of just what the Dr had prescribed at the moment he was being swallowed (in about 3 gulps at his 5 inch size - he would have had time to come to the realization as he was being eaten).

Reviewer: Sovereign Signed [Report This]
Date: February 25 2021 12:48 PM Title: A Disappointed Fiancée's Hunger

A good story! I really enjoyed it. Would also be cool to see a ch 2 from the poor financesperspective.

Author's Response:

I considered it! I decided that I wanted to test the waters with a pred POV story this time. I generally prefer to relate to the prey so I can sympathize with your suggestion. If you want, you can check out my other story - it has a lot more focus on the prey.