Reviewer: tinyman91 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2011 4:07 PM Title: Chapter 3: Sisterly toture

I could understand the first chapter being a bit short, but I do have to critic these last two, and I have to say they weren't bad, but they weren't good either, you need more details and you need to relay to the reader how the main character is reacting to the situation.

Author's Response:

ok thanks