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Reviewer: BB9909 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 30 2024 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Captured

I like the way this story is going. I hope you would post  pictures of all your characters too. just to have a mental image of how the character look like. you can maybe choose a celebrity image and also could mention a movie or Tv show  of them to know how they act and talk and all. I might be wrong but I think when a writer write a story they kind of having people in real life to helpe shaping the characters in their stories.  

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! There's only a few stories on here typically that post images of characters. Personally, I'd rather just leave it up to the reader's imagination. I definitely did have some faces in mind for most characters but that might not be how readers want to imagine them. :)

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 24 2024 2:08 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Captured

After reading ch. 12 and 13 someone could ask: Why would Jordan risk his life for strangers who kidnaped him? This stark contrast between what one would expect from a human are often regarded as flaws, as naivety and folishness, but here that kind of assessment is mistaken since Jordan’s later actions fall in line with what we learned about his character before - It’s no wonder Alice feels more safe around Jordan – but also because it works in this context, translating and boosting this sense of wonder into action. Oh he is a fool for puting himself in danger like that, but a endearing one. We got to learn more about Leila situation while seeing how empathetic and carrying the protagonist can be. Instead of a flashback or Alice’s thoughts on him, we actually see Jordan into action.

I like how even with all that fantastic magic at their disposal, the Fey folk is still fascinated by plain humans. Humans whose sons and daughters alone are as imposing as skyscrappers - that was a good comparison. How a mother, a full grown adult, doesn’t look now? That might as well be magic to beings smaller than a beetle - and maybe it’s, but on the reverse: a lack of magic in exchange for a more suitable size to rule the planet.

Or maybe it isn’t (or it's a bit of both) and we will find out what happens when magic is used to change how nature made are – yes, I am talking about Leila changing Jordan. We know now that she did it in a moment of desperation. So... does she really understand everything that happened at that momment? Can she really just reverse things like that? I think even her is not sure and is trying hard not to think about it since it was unexpected for her and her sister to ever bound with him… he was human. Was.

I am not just thinking he will be stuck like that forever. More on the lines that he will be stuck and will die in one week if they don’t find a way to reverse things because Jordan's body won't be able to handle the magic/curse cast on him.

PS.: As soon as I posted my comment on ch. 12 and 13, ch. 14 was out! I just loved the part with Jordan right at Maria’s feet and being captured!! How Maria is kind and feels that Jordan is human… but can't fully  accept it... She is human and she is so much bigger and fairies can’t really exist… all the cruel “facts” and cold logic… from a loving mother. It really sent home how humans can spell terror to fey even when they don’t want to – what Leila herself experienced in Jordan’s hand.

And now I think I understand why Maria looks familiar to Jordan! She must be Emily’s mother! That’s my guess. Simply perfect! 10 out of 10. I am fully enjoying how everything is developing!

As always, thanks for writing and sharing with us! Stay safe!



Author's Response:

Thanks for your thoughts on the chapter! I wanted him to do something he knew himself was absolutely stupid and risky, but with a logical reason behind it from the previous chapter, which was Elsie's situation.

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