[Report This]Date: September 15 2024 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Interaction
There is just something about unaware, be it when people shrink or grow… maybe it’s the feeling of confusion in either perspective (where am I? How did I get here?) mixtured with the tension, the build up, the possibility this person will be the one to destroy everything she holds dear despite having so much power (Where is everyone?!).
Upon shrinking, the people and the world we once knew become instantly aliens. But we too become like a alien to them. This spin you added transmits this kind of deep anguish efficiently in the story: light in tone but impactful at the same time.
Yes, I too love unaware scenarios. Have you heard of “Babysitter Trouble” by Shrinker 82? It’s one of the best stories here on the site and I must say no one writes unaware scenarios like him. God tier stuff. Just a reading suggestion for your enjoyment and for inspiration if you ever need it.
Now, the next part is a comment as well as a theory about how things might unfold in the next chapter. I just can’t help it. Often when I find a story I like I start making scenarios. Feel free to use it if you want.
Oh Jordan… little itty bit Jordan… some would say love is all about lying until you reach some truth. Maybe the truth is Alice will not be as gentle when you try to go away… after all, Jordan is not back yet and she has to show… you to him. Ah... the truth. Isn’t it all about knowing yourself? Kkkkkkk.
And not much is needed for one to talk. A moment of true fear. Jordan runs to escape and Alice quickly gets up to chase after, but loses him. Frustrated, she kicks her flip-flops and keep franticaly searching… On the ground, Jordan tries to hide but soon a shadow… “Alice, don’t! I am down here!!”
“Jordan?!”
All is not lost, but she listened to his voice, the magic rule was broken. What will be the consequences for Leila and Jordan? Will Jordan be stuck in the park... forever? But Jordan might be even more worried about something else entirely... Alice sole above him were so… so…
Well, that’s it. Hope my comment is useful in some way.
Thanks for writing and sharing with us! Stay safe and until the next chapter!