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Reviewer: voreReader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 12 2026 11:10 PM Title: A Silent Mansion

Hi! I just finished reading your story, and wow your writing is so rich in detail and emotion. I really enjoyed it! You have such a creative mind, and I think your story would make an amazing comic. Would you be interested in discussing that idea? I'm a paid artist with friendly rates, and I love bringing stories to life through visuals. I'd be excited to take your story to the next level! Feel free to reach out to me via Discord (my username is avablaise_98 ) or by email (avablaise9@gmail.com). Hope to hear from you soon

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2020 6:39 PM Title: A Silent Mansion

Your story's premise has a lot to offer.  Unfortunately your story is hard to follow for a few reasons.

You should break it up into paragraphs, which apparently you did but it did not come across in your posting.

You seem to be confusing the term "victims" with "suspects, which makes it hard to understand who is who.

A little clean up from a grammar perspective would make your story much easier to read.

Please do continue.

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