Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: April 15 2014 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Spaghetti War

Chapter 4 was fantastic. Love that Erica is starting to take more control. You make everything realistic. I like how you show things from the Giantess point of view and the little peoples point of view. I am really enjoying the ideas of this story. It works very well. I like the idea that Erica has 2 friends that will eventually help her out. The family will not like it but it has to be done. Was Erica joking when she called her father little man and moved her face in front of him? I think this is only the beginning of Erica getting her way and doing things her way. This is one of the best stories that I have ever read. Keep up the fantastic work.

Later,

         Diesel

Author's Response:

Thanks so much.  I spent a lot of time trying to keep chapter 4 from just being a bunch of people whining.

When Erica made her move to intimidate her father (calling him little man, looming over him) she wasn't joking, she was more making a conscious decision to make sure that he understood that she was the boss and would accept nothing but total submission.  The time has come where she has to put her family in their place, for their own good.  Half power trip, half  tactical decision.  I assure you, as thrilling as it was she also felt super guilty.

Reviewer: MrSirk Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14 2014 6:41 AM Title: Chapter 4: The Spaghetti War

I know Harry shrunk but I still fell awful for Brittany. She's fighting this with everything she has and I respect that. When she does shrink I wouldn't be surprised if she tried to run away and make it on her own.

I like the hard conversations with her this chapter Erica's becoming more confident and it's probably most important that her parents understand she has the authority more than her siblings.

Nothing much else keep it up....OH! And we're all comment whores. The first step is acceptance.

Author's Response:

I'm glad to hear that Brittany's fight is coming across, since she's not actually in the story that much.  She definitely is taking a different road from the rest of the family.

Now, according to previous trends, since I've published a new chapter of ERICA'S HOUSE you owe us 4 new chapters of TALES OF THE NEW WORLD

Reviewer: pkong Signed [Report This]
Date: April 13 2014 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Spaghetti War

Whoo! I had almost forgotten this story existed its been so long! And this chapter was huge! I would love to give you some suggestions or criticism but I honestly can't think of anything. This story is pretty mush exactly what I could have asked for from this premise.

I love the slow build up that creates tension and shows how characters develop. I like how Erica doesn't start off with the dominent personality we see in chapter 1 but grows into it. All of the characters have interesting changing personalities as they come to grips with the new reality, but Erica's is the best.  

But my real favorite part of this story is Danielles POV. You have a lot of attention to detail when describing how overwhelmed she is by the world, how significant her giant families every action is. Even how she refers to them as giants, as though they are a different species shows her mentality. To me this is the heart of the story, and I hope we only get more of these POV changes as more of the family shrinks.

There is one thing I want to see later, maybe after the whole family shrinks. i want to see them interact with a giant who isn't Erica, who isn't quite so careful and loving. Maybe a friend of hers. No need for her to be cruel, maybe just a little careless or playful. If Erica, who really does care for them, is this intemidating how much worse would someone else be? I like it when the giants are scary or awe inspireing just being themselves doing ordinary things.

Anyway great story! If I could make any request it would be that you write faster because i can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks for taking the time to leave such a detailed response.  Really helps and I'm very appreciative of the specific commentary.  

I totally agree on Danielle's POV.  She's quickly become my favorite character and often threatens to take chapters over.  I heavily considered rewriting chapter 4 to be 100% from her POV, but I didn't want to delay publication.  It was also very useful to get through some of the borign parts.  There was originally a very long heart to heart between Erica and Marjorie on Erica's bed, but it bored me to death and was one too many "I love you, we'll get through this together" conversations.  But Danielle's POV let me just skip the whole thing and come back in at the end.

I'm excited as well to introduce some non-Erica giants.  I've been so slow in getting the family actually shrunk down, I'm really pumped for the fun to start once it's really Erica's house.