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Reviewer: SafetyPin Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 24 2013 11:15 PM Title: Chapter 5: Breakfast time is not for fighting

Very good, short story.

Could have used a little more description of both action and feelings.

But overall, it's well done.

 

Reviewer: unknown1 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24 2013 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 5: Breakfast time is not for fighting

That was erotic alright the same way a twister is a little wind!

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