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Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24 2013 5:32 PM Title: Chapter IV: Language

I see you are trying to make this story very believable. Not many people think about language barriers. In fact, not many people on here think about a lot of things. Oh well. This is turning out to be a very nice read, which I think I may have already said in a previous review but it's been a long time as you say in the chapter notes - and I can't be bothered to check my reviews to previous chapters.



Author's Response:

You're right, I am trying to make this believable. Gee, how did you figure that one out? (Lol)

And lol to the "Not many people here think about a lot of things" comment. Most of us are just a bunch of giantess ravers, am I right?

It makes me sleep better at night, knowing you are really enjoying this story Stub.

Reviewer: wildcatman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2013 4:07 PM Title: Chapter IV: Language

The tallest lady in Actipol. " It seemed she could feel my fear, and smiled softly..."

I like that.  "She looked at me and I flinched in fear."   Just adds enough, to give the reader a sense of the impression of her incredable appearance, without too-much  discription to be concidered 'Over-Kill'.  

Malaki will have his hands full with this "Student", Ha! Great Job, DUDE!



Author's Response:

Thanks Cat! I knew you would like it!

 

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