Reviewer: Hansuke Signed
Date: August 18 2011
Title: Chapter 1: It Begins
I like the story but I think it would cool if you played it in two ways. One on the prospective of the main shrunken character. Then have a prospective of the giantess. i am not a huge fan of the dairy type enteries. I think you'd make a kickass piece of playing out the scenes instead of telling them. Draws the readers in more that way,
Author's Response: Well, I'm trying to give the perspective from both accounts in a unique way. Everyone often just writes out the story from the tiny person's perspective, and rarely from the giantess' perspective, and if they do it's usually either sloppily switched between the two, or they put titles above the text to inform us of who's perspective they're following and it never looks professional, or very clean. Which is why most people only write things from the smaller person's prospective. And the diary eneteries are my way of allowing the reader to see things from both perspectives. Showing not only the usual humilation and overall degrading of the smaller character, but also how it's effecting the larger character.
I wanted to give my story a unique twist, and the diary enteries just seems to be something different, I've only ever seen it done once, but it was souly from the giantess prospective, which is all fine and dandy, but we don't get to often see how the events effect the character's in parrallel with each other, and I felt the diary enteries helped give us some insite into the mind of the bigger person.
