Reviewer: TitanTheia Signed
Date: January 31 2019
Title: Chapter 1: Ultraxia's New Sky & Festive Tributes
I've only recently discovered this story, but god, do I love it! I went through almost everything in less than a day.
I really enjoyed the impressive displays of divine power and the cruelty only added to the overall experience. And you're really good at describing the brutality in high detail, especially in interactions with individuals, however destruction scenes don't seem to enjoy the same amount of detail. Not that this is really bad - I just thought of them lacking, but that might be my odd preference.
I feel you'd also like to hear a bit about your writing style, but I'm not good enough to give you proper feedback; all I can say is that it was easy to read, and you describe scenes very well.
Either way, are you still looking for suggestions? I'd be curious how you'd write something closer to a horror story/chapter... Generally I'd be happy with anything that actually terrifies the reader (but if you'd need a more specific suggestion, I'd go with some really devoted believer doing something that rubs the Goddess the wrong way, but that doesn't quite warrant death [idk, a renowned artist designing a misrepresenting mural of the Goddess to be chiseled into a mountain range, maybe?], and to teach them a lesson, the Goddess joins their dream and turns it into a nightmare? ... Though if that's not really fitting for this story, maybe it'd make for an alright chapter in the maid side-story? You'll know better.)
In any case, I just hope that you carry on writing in general - I've loved everything you've uploaded here so far, and I'm looking forward to more, no matter what it looks like.
Author's Response: Hello TitanTheia! :)
Many thanks for your critical review! I appreciate you taking the time to leave such great feedback!
I will take your feedback in regards to destruction scenes into consideration next time I write about it, see if I can bring more life to them!
I am always lookin for suggestions :) I'll admit to not being too good with Horror but I gave it a go for you.
Thanks for the kind words, The new chapter "The Architect" was writting in honour of this review :D I really hopr you enjoy it!