Reviewer: someguyaround Signed
Date: April 26 2017
Title: Chapter 1: First Day
The characters interactions and development all felt real enough and the motivations were believable. I particularly liked that little dudes hopes of equalizing through robotic suits, as I've always personally thought that would be an ideal option in these types of stories set in these types of worlds. The lewdness at the end was well earned and built up to, and everything before it was enjoyable enough to read to get to that point. I'm also a huge sucker for gentle stories and ones where the tiny is treated as an equal, and I liked the dialogue that went on a bit regarding that point. Overall I very much enjoyed reading this and would read more written by you or set in this universe.
Author's Response: The robotic suit idea is something I've seen around, but never seen explored in depth. I thought it would make a good motivation for Jake to brave a normal-sized high school, and it could be used in future stories within the setting. I think the reason other people avoid it is because it kind of defeats the purpose of having tiny people in the first place, but I think if you're clever there's still plenty of ways to write interaction around the ubiquitous use of suits.
That sort of moralizing or "morality play" that comprises a lot of the early dialogue is one of my favorite things to see in a gentle story, so I'm glad you liked how I handled it.
