Brandon trys to uncover some dirty on one of his victims, but he shoud be careful at what he might find.
I miss your stories so much, especially this one and the other were so good. Hope you're not abandonen and come back. We need you on here :')
A girl wakes up, unsure of where she is or how she got there. However, she soon realizes that she's not as big as she used to be.
would love to see her stick up the "bug" into her ass, great story so far, keep it up
Then you are gonna love the next few chapters.
amazing Halloween story. sadly without an unfortunate ending, ha :)
Because so many people have requested more to this story, I will likely add more! The end is not here yet!
Sammy is bullied in school all the time by the upperclassmen. What kind of revenge will he seek when giving the power to do so?
AH! What a great surprise :] YES!! I was hoping you would write another story like Bully for you and seeing you want to add lots of chapters to this is AWESOME! Loved the first chapter already, especially I am in love already with Sammy, and the intro was bomb with the bullies taking away his clothes and he was just in his underpants. Would love to see the following tags happening: scat, nano, shrinking, vore, of course other body tf like anus would be awesome, other object tf (for example a single leaf of toilet paper) maybe food or animals or insects (tiny bug or fly). And I would love to see Sammy getting over some of his also skinny twink friends and them having no idea about Sammys new power, and Sammy actually having some fun or evenis unaware too, with some bullies "giving" to his unaware friend.
Here are some plot ideas I would love to see:
- some innocent people getting tfed/shrunk by Sammy, maybe without him even knowing about it, like school teachers or random people or kids, who never bullied him. It would be so ironic if some teacher ended as a bug, toilet paper, or food, and then exterminated or used or ate by one of the scools boys.
- Sammy could prepare the school toilet taking away the roll of toilet paper and lay his one leaf or two left on there, one of the leafs is a person he tfed before.
- An insect or more tf would be awesome. I thought of two bullies becoming tiny flys, and even Sammy had no idea about he turned them into flys. Maybe he thought of something like or said something ironic and this turnes them into tiny house flys, mostly happening in front of Sammys house. The two fly boys now need to get help, and they fly into Sammys house and room. Annoyed by some buzzing while making homework, Sammy uses a rolled up newspaper to squish one of the bug while pin pointing it down for a while in his room. The other fly, actually the bug brain turned over, flew into the bathroom, caused by the smell and landed in the toilet. Totally grossed out and screaming in his head, the fly took over and licked away urin and even worse, a shit stain. Then a dorplet of water or urin would stick him in place, can't fly away anymore. And the worst happens when Sammy comes in and takes a shit on him, the gigantic turd slowly hovering over him and PLOP, the wet goo just gently plopping on him.
- Underpants tf, or anus tf would be awesome. Mostly Sammy being unaware about where the guy went to, ahving no idea he became his anus. This could be epic combined with the tf toilet part, also a part of of course telling it from the POV of the "anus".
- Friend being over playing console with Sammy, and him asking for a condom because he had a date later, and the condom was actually one person Sammy turned into. Also he wished one person to become his friends underpants would be cool, or another turned into a single m&m or peanute, being eating by the boys or swallowed whole, having the fun of digested alive and turned into poo.
- Someone becomes a tiny bug on the ground in school or a few people, one being sat on in school classes by a skinny boys ass jeans, one stepped on. Most ironic would be a bully becomes a bug and then being cruely stepped on by his friends in class, or just smeared in half like stepped on his bugs feet and smearing them into a paste, him screaming in nightmarish sounds, the teens above him having no idea a half crushed bug was glued to one of their sneakers on the side, and walking casually through school, the bug fell off in the cafeteria and stepped on again by a shy skinny twink, looking down and be like, poor little guy, let me take you out of your misery, pivoting his shoe even from side to side giving it a twist over the floor then smiling as he did something good and walking to his place to eat.
- I loved the blue goo idea with its being the guys soul. What if Sammy turns someine into a tiny amount of blue goo and gives it to his friend saying it was lube, then being used smearing on the boys anus and inserting a pen in his ass to try how anal feels. The poor guy merges with the boys anus.
- There could be a school party and Sammy turns a bully into a female sex doll and leaves it behind, then being used by the boys during the party.
And so many more ideas :] Thank you for writing another m/m story again, this is already awesome!! Would love to hear back from you again. Keep it up man!!
I think a very cruel ironic idea would be, a math teacher doing a surprise exam, totally pissing of his students, including Sammy. And one of the boys next to Sammy be like after the ringing all standing up, "what an asshole" and one answering him be like "yeah he can suck my ass", and Sammy hearing this triggering a transformaion in his mind, totally unaware though it happened, and the poor math teacher becomes Sammys or the boy who said it asshole. And then later on the boy takes a dump in school toilet or coming home. Then maybe even during the chapters coming back to him at some point too for another dump. Another alteration of this would be, this cocky boy standing in the front talking to the teacher, oh come on you cant be serious! "Mr ..., please go back to your chair, I want to begin", "But this isnt fair, we had no time to prepare!", "You should always be prepared Mr ..., now can I start please?", The boy wearing tight skinny jeans like a skater, turning around and be like "yeah, suck my ass", "MR. ...! That will get you an hour detention", "Whatever..." going to his chair, saying aloud "arse-hole" while smashing his ass down on his chair next to Sammy. And then after the end of the exam, the boy totally pissed spitting out a bubble gum on the floor, speaking to Sammy while standing up, "Geez, what a turd eater, cant believe this", "uhm, what, yeah I know". "Hope he gets sick, that shithole", and then actually while Sammy leaves as the last one, no one notices the Teacher suddenly disappearing, an exam falling to the floor, empty and with "suck my ass" written on it, by the annoyed boy from before sitting next to Sammy. This actually could trigger the transformation the teacher reading it. Maybe the boy even draw on the paper an ass with the teachers head bending inside licking the boys ass.
And then the boys talk about the exam outside on the floor, and them casually talking, eating chips, gulping down soda, one yawning, one popping some flips in his mouth, making fun and all talk in a rude way about the poor teacher, and then be like "what a prick", "told ya he was a douchbag", "yeah, what a shit head", "talking about shit, see ya next class, I need to take a dump". And then maybe they see an "ant" on the floor or step on it without even noticing, it being stuck half squished to one of their wearn out Converse shoes.
I was waiting for this so much, yes!! This is now my new favorite story of yours and I hope it will continue a lot of chapters. I am just in love with Sammy, and how you make him, also his cute same as nice best friend Luke.
The writing style is just perfect, all fits so well, please continue like it. I mean how you make them talk, the thoughts of Sammy and going with him through his day, like classes, going to school, waking up, going home, the bus ride, doing homework, and doing some private tasks ha, all is awesome!
Some may say it was boring reading going throguh his school classes, but please continue like this, it's so good! I love longer and more detailed, but also realistic plots. And I think this is your best work so far compared to these topics of building up a plot and characters.
I absolutely loved the beginning of Sammy totally already forgot about yesterdays events and then even told himself it mostly was all just a dream. This makes such a fantastic unaware plot. I was actually hopinh for a more unaware parts, and please continue like this.
Here comes though two critism I have:
It would had been way more thrilling, if Sammy didn't find out at the end, and just casually jerked off into a tissue, wiping it away, and letting it casually fall to his rooms floor. And the semen just looking normal, not being blue. Hope you wont change directions, I would love to stay Sammy unaware about his powers. It's so much more thrilling, if he accidentially changes people without knowing it, and puts them in horrible nightmares.
The other is, I think it would be way more erotic to think about the transformed people not losing their consciousness, but they just can't move/talk of course. But still they had all their senses and even could see, but from outside no one would see them of course and just see the normal surface they melted into / becoming it.
I loved the bus ride so much of creating this plot, of Sammy be the typical twink who is laughed and bullied through school. Him being so skinny and seens as a wimp from lots of other boys. But there it even shines so much of his best friend Lucas, even wanting to help, I loved that conversation so much!
The bathroom part and later Sammy having "blue balls" was so hot. And how he didn't realize he had shrunk the boy outside who shotued that rude words to him, and then him having that itch during classes, even thought of "please don't let that boy be in my class", all was perfect writing style.
I think you read my previews reviews, and there is nothing more I would wish if you could use my ideas during future chapters, that would be like a dream coming true.
I hope you will let Sammy still stay most of the time unaware about his powers, and him just not really believing in them, or even yet thinking he had them, making it so much more thrilling to think about, he could always turn someone into anything, withouth even knowing.
I also would welcome it if you let some at least stay their consciousness and senses. Especially for turning people into flys, a boys anus, the tiny back area in someones cotton underpants, becoming normal cum and wiped away absorbed by an tissue or boxers, becoming the smelly stain in their while casually wearn again the next day during school and baking during classes under their skinny jeans, the honor or actually nightmare when someone becomes an anus and then having the first experience to vomit out a bowl movement. I would love to see maybe the gym teacher or Sammys math teacher become that, like the ideas I told in my review, with the boys speaking in a rude way about that "asshole" and the surprise exam, and the drawing of sucking the boys ass on the paper.
Would also love to see some boys becoming tiny flys and then try to get help from Sammy in his room, and end as a smear on a rolled up newspaper and the other ending with a turd on him in the bathroom.
Hope so much you will continue in this amazing innocent style. It was so nice to follow Sammy through his days, I can't get enough of this. It's such a thrilling idea of this twink boy going through his school life, and having no idea he turned people into objects or parts of bodys.
You totally deserve 10 out of 10 I wish I could give more. Thank you for writing, you made my day. Maybe if you like add your email or just a spam email on your profile, and if I see it I would love to mail you! You have so many ideas I loved in all your work, so similar to what I enjoy too. It would be awesome to meet a friend having the same fantasies.
Have a great day man!! Looking forward for lots of more chapters in this story.
Hope you liked my reviews and ideas and I hope so much youll maybe use them in umcpoming chapters. Write back if you like, I would love more than anything to talk back and forth some mails with you! You're like my favorite author on here and I never met anyone who seem to have so many things in common. You school m/m tf stories, now Sammy and the one before are one of the most thrilling Ive read on here, seriously. Especially the butt mocking part in the alst one where the boy spread his ass apart and slowly put his anus on the toys mouth. I would love to see some way more darker things happening in he Sammy plot without Samy even knowing he did this to people. Like the fruit fly tf of some poor boys, and of course the teacher turned into asshole idea, and the boys casually talking about him ocking him, while he has to listen to them, where the one skinny skater boy just be like ugh, whatever, I need to take a shit, or them talking about having an itch down there, not wiped properly. And the poor teacher screaming in his mind, not realized yet where he was, and then later vomitting with all the taste a gigantic soft turd out, then not even wiping properly and the boy going back to his friends. Toilet paper tf would be cool too, of course some food tf like a tiny gummybear ot m&m, mixed with lots of normal ones, and the poor guy getting delayed to watch some kid snacking on them, storing them back in his school backpackage, then eating again during playing video games at home, or even seeeing the boy masturbating after school, and then snacking on them. One guy becoming part of a tiny cum stain in a boys boxers, to have the experience to be wahshed away, but just a week later of wearing and ending on the boys rooms floor as dirty pants. Ending as a skid mark in the back rea of a boxers, his senses all still there aka his face making a tiny brand inside the back area, direytly where the asshole would touch it. Ending as a fleshlight, a cumstain on the bed cover. Hope to see so many more to come. You're an incredible author.
Yes, yes yes!!! What a damn epic surprise, I was hoping so much to see a new chapter on this story, and you totally outshined yourself with this. It was the best chapter so far, and please let me say, this is now the best transformatin story on here, ever written. It sky rocked into my heart and is truly now one of my all time favorite stories, I am just in pure love with it.
I hope this story wont end soon and will have lots of more chapters in the future. There is yet so much great stuff which could happen, turning people into objects, and letting them literally go through hell, with no one to know, and no one to find out, ever, even not Sammy.
Please let me say, I hope Sammy will stay unaware through the whole plot, it is sooo much better this way, and adds to much more humiliation for the unfortunate charactrs. It's so much more cruel and unfair, to casually be used, abused, eaten, tortured, by those boys and espscially Sammy having no clue about it.
The idea with the pink pajamas pants and the girly shirt with princess on them... EPIC! I love your ideas you come up so much, you rock man.
Also the whole writing style is just perfect, please don't change it through the story, just THIS, this this this. It's so ironic this new chapter came out today, because I am watching since hours Persona 5, which came out yesterday, and I just love high school plots more than anything.
The first lines of the chapter were already fantastic, with the wet dream Sammy wet, mostly adding some white stains into his cotton boxers.
"He felt his underwear feel a little damp and checked to find out that he had a wet dream last night." this simple line was so hot, and I could give example after example of this hot damn great writing style. I also love the difference of each character, especially Sammy is such a character to fall in love with, with him just being a skinny twink, wearing those skinny clothes.
If I could wish for something in the upcoming chapters, I guess after the next one because it would be around that party mostly ou mentioned. One of the teachers being turned into an "living" anus, of those examples I wrote before in my comments, maybe because of some surprise exam, and I could even see Lucas say those vulgar things like what a shit-head, or how could this asshole get any shittier. I imagine him actually like the character Ryuji Sakamoto from Persona 5 ( http://i.imgur.com/KfJ5XrZ.png ), because he's so open and just uses lots of words like crap, shit, dick, asshole in mostly ever few sentences of him. I could see them having this conversation about the sucking test, and then the poor teacher becoming turned into Sammys anus, then even worse of Sammy having to use the bathroom later in school or after coming home, then doing his homework sitting in his skinny damp boxers, with a rape ass sitting on his PC chair of not wiping properly.
I also would love a boxer tf of someone, especially of that line above, "He felt his underwear feel a little damp and checked to find out that he had a wet dream last night.".
Then that fly tf idea would be awesome too, Sammy smashing some pesky flies in his room or even feeding one of them if its two or three, to his pet goldfish in his room.
Please let me say a few words about the m&m tf, EPIC!! That was one of the most hot tf plots I ever read. I have to say I was a bit worried at first, of it would be over too soon, because you let Sammy crush the m&m, the idea of that one smacking him out of its place "saving him", and how you made peanute goo splash into his "face" was fantastic. But then you made a surprise backfire, of Char being human form and the size of a m & M in Sammys stomach and going through digestion, FANTASTIC!!! I think an even more cruel idea could have been him being sucked / drained, into Sammys small intestine, and meeting the fishy foul digestion in there, melting alive, and part of him becoming gas to pass for Sammy a bit later as an fart.
Hope this will be posted because of the length, but please, I would give you 100 out of 100 points for this. Thank you for updating this story and catapultating it into the best tf stories ever written already in my opinion. And I just hope to lots of more chapters to come in the future. Much love and thank you for making my day <3
I forgot this !! This is how I imagine Sammy look like :
http://i.imgur.com/FkaWOtg.png
A character from Persona. Skinny, twink ("wimp/nerd"), no gram fat on him, flat 6pack tummy, all curved, a full moon butt though, all muscles. I also love those school uniform throusers, they are made from that soft thin fabric, forming around the butt so prfectly, giving them a wedgie, and if it's a humid day it literally glues on them. I could perfectly imagine him in those pink skinny boxers and the shirt, and him masturbating sitting in front of his PC, or just on the toilet.
I think a nice visualization for Sammy is also the character Nai from Karneval:
http://ami.animecharactersdatabase.com/uploads/chars/11498-1667347137.jpg
I also had to think of the boys from idolish7 because of that pink pyjama:
http://i.imgur.com/KPOrfmf.png
and that bunny suit would fit so perfectly to Sammy too :) I love the idea of Sammys nightwear pyjamas were a bit moisture in his crotch and butt area because of sleeping in them, would giving them a good fit.
Ok, I don t know where to start ... a second chapter out so fast? That took me so by surprise, what a great surprise... first, this is the best chapter of them all. Chapter 3 was already on such a high level, but this even topped it.
Longest chapter of them, 3 was already great, I love longer chapters, and you put so much details and love into this, it's IN-SANE!!! I hope I can review about everything which came to me while reading this epic chapter, hope I dont miss anything out, so lets start!
The intro was again really good again, same as in chapter 3 with Sammy waking up with a bit wet underpants. Here, with his mom had bought a package of peanut M&Ms and Sammy froze for a moment, this was a good laugh already. I just love so much, how you developed this story, of things "going wrong" leading to Sammy forget things, think of them as dreams, and in this chapter, you put a new epic one out, more to it later. Please continue in this style, it's soo much better Sammy not being aware about the changes happening around him.
I just love the unfair aspect of it so much, 'Shrugging it off Sammy forgot all about the M&M's and went about his day.', where the remains of Chad and the food which was eatin with him were at this moment mostly in the lower end part of Sammys small intestine, being entering his large intestine mostly. And Sammy literally "didnt give a shit", or will he? ehehe, no, worse, he was totally unaware about the horrors he put those people through. And you make it even better, because of Sammy being such a nice, twink, "gay" character, always polite, smiling, and being literally the "loser" of the school, skinny, no muscles. More about this a bit later.
I have to sum up faster, just talked about the intro, and the story didnt even start and I hve already said a lot. See this is the reason why I am so on love with this, because you put so much details into your work and in between the lines, it's just insane. This story is now already one of the best I ever read on here, especially chapter 3 and 4 added to that.
The idea of the party being a costume party, fantastic... and how the fun part of the chapter begins, and it was... was, so much better than I imagined everything in my mind, which could have happened. I actually thought a lot since chapter 3, what would happen at that party. But you wrote it out so much better, than everything I thought of.
Sammy going as a bunny, AAAAH, epic!! You rock man, bunny ears and tail, I have it so vivid in my mind, fitting so perfectly with the character Sammy in a whole. And also the makeup, whiskers and a bunny nose, I just loved that ideas so much... I could see him actually like this:
http://i.imgur.com/6MWN3vl.pnghttp://i.imgur.com/f1OiTrE.png
but with skinny fitting shorts, would make such a hot outfit.
And then you did it so much better of what I had in mind. I already knew something like this would happen, of the boys at the party, the owner of the house, all those sports dudes, straight of course, all now best buddies with Lucas, and them would never had invited such a loser like Sammy to their cool high school party. And now... Vince opening the door, and... PHAHA! Looking down on this bunny boy. Such a great part.
The best was how Sammy wasnt totally not realizsing before or it didnt came to his mind, this could be a bad idea. It's so realistic, because of he had all butterflies in his tummy because of Lucas invited him, and I actually did something like this before, where I just thought in one direction, not seeing other possibilities.
Best part to this point: "The only way your getting into this party is if you and me, go over there," Vince said pointing toward some bushes. "And I pull my pants down and you suck me off. Then maybe, and just maybe, I'll think about it."
What a fantastic idea!! I never even thought of this, but it fits so perfectly. I love humiliating parts like this so much, and it fits so great. Could see straight teenagers like this actually tell "fags" to suck them off, and make a fun out of it, or even worse, even go through with it. How horrific Sammy must felt at that point, and everything what happened later in the chapters is such a perfect backfire at Vince. This chapter is just so amazing in so many levels, it's just insane...
Loved how Lucas stood for his friend, for a second I was a bit afraid of them leaving, and the party plot was canceled, but you, as before so many times, came to the rescue with a "plan b" and saved the moment. I think I hvent said this before, but you have this fantastic talent, of making surprise parts. Your plot is so interesting, and not just going into one line, always going path a, path a, path a, like so many bad authors do on this site. You have just a damn high level of details, character depth, and intelligent plot. You could be an author selling your stuff.
I was so glad at this point, literally screaming into my computer screen, YES! So glad you made them enter the house, and the party would get started. And then totally such a great idea, of the boys cheering up Lucas, literally leading them away from Sammy, having lost sight of where the boys went, and then Vince kicking Sammy, landing on his bunny butt, and how he felt hurt Lucas didnt notice, but just "swallowed" it. I also loved how it was literally eating on Vince, that this fag and loser was allowed into his home. This would make everything so much even better of what would happen afterwards. It's not just unfair, it's truly mean, of Sammy being such a nice character totally unaware of the horrors of those bullies, who though just deserved everything of it.
You have this great talent of not "just" making one point, no, you do several, and this is the difference in this story to others, making it a 10 out of 10. Here, it is literally a hit in Vinces face, because it was his home where the party happened, and then he ended as this bunny boys .. rectum in the end of this plot, LOL. I am literally dying the whole review already coming to this point.
I try to move fast forward a bit, because of this became already a bit long. The idea of Sammy betting drunk was a perfect twist, and perfect idea. Because of the "mental blackout" later in the plot, adding to the continuous unaware aspect of the plot.
How you made Sammy speak and react, because he mostly never were drunk before in his high school years, was just amazing. It literally reminded me on myself, when I had my first high school party, and it was sooo damn ironic, because mostly everything in this plot happened to me too. Not the shrinking part of course hahaha. But I also got so drunk that I had to throw up, and then waking up the nest day, I didnt remember much anymore from the night before. But I also remember I spoke in such same silly ways like you made Sammy speak, and it was so cute, and fitting at the same time... and, so humiliating and cruel towards Vince.
And making it again follow logic after logic, after drinking so much at a party, it's obvious the teens using the bathroom a lot. Just loved the idea of Sammy not wanting to stand in the line, mostly because of being so drunk, searching for a 2nd toilet in the house... the home, of Vince, who, of course would use his own, private toilet too upstairs. FANTASTIC idea of where the transformation / shrinking happened.
And from here, the plot became god like. It was honestly one of the most thrilling and hot plots I read before on here. I always loved your more cruel tf plots in the past, but this is just a master peice, and I hope this story will have lots more in this same style. Please dont end this story too soon, there are so many things coming to my mind, having lots of future chapters. Also hope you wont "ruin" the story of boring "sex" between Sammy + a girl, that wouldnt really fit in the flow of this story, and there are enough others on this site. This story is literally like a sarcastic, dark ironic Halloween story, like Tales from the crypt or the Goosebumps books, and I always wished to read a story like this. Youre truly my hero and my favorite author.
I just had to cut in half on here, fearing it could become too long and maybe wouldnt go through as a comment. Also making it mostly better to read. I am just in love so much with this plot, and hope I could give some something back as this review.
I just loved the idea of Vince shrinking to the size of an ant, and landing in the toilet, the drunk Sammy using it to take a leak. And you didnt just write it out in a "boring" way, you added punch after punch after punch. First, the humiliation of Vince landing in his own piss. Someone would have to rescue him... oh thx god someone is co... and then the ultimate humiliation... the one person Vince hated in this house right now, suddenly came into view, mostly distorted from down below, the image warped, from the eye point of view of a bug... Sammy, in his shorts, bunny tail, bunny ears, bunny mask... looking into the toilet, not seeing anything, and then.. nooo!! Moving his hand to the front of his pants, lowering them, and his underpants. I died at that point, it was just so good.
But before, things like "Vince chuckled to himself at how drunk the light weight must be." making it so much better, Vince not realized at that part what was about to happen, and laughing like a typical jock about some lower twink... until...
That would have been such a horrible view for Vince to suddenly look up to the boys in his underpants, and then, pulling them down too. And at this part Vince literally going white and in shock nonoNONONOOO- suddenly was hit in his face, with this acrid, yellow, foul, salty HOT liquid.
I just loved everything, of how you made Sammy literally "hit" Vince several times, in the face, when he got up from under water, screaming, getting again a foul mouth full, gagging feeling swallow after swallow going down his stomach, feeling sick... and then, being vacuumed literally to the epicentre, by the stream, like a sucking current, and HIT... the hard stream literalyl hitting him like a truck. I could see how this water stream msut be hard as a wall at this size and at this speed and from that high it fell down, this is what makes your work so good, because of how logic it is.
And from here... the chapter became unforgettable.
I dont really know where to start, there are so many things which I would love to talk about. Sorry sorry sorry, I guess I am so much alike Sammy :x
How you made Sammy speak, in that drunken, cute way, was INSANE and soo fitting, it was so mocking poor Vince, and plausible and just so great. Especially I noticed how you tried to chose the words, in a ironic double meaning, for example here: Sammy pouted, "Butt... it'z fun hear.", butt indeed...
I just love ironic double twists more than anything, and I hope to see this style used again in upcoming chapters.
You totally thought of everything, I had such a good laugh, when Sammy actually meant to get help, but had his shorts and underpants still down, and was walking like this to the bathroom door, Vince calling for him in the... last... WORST moment. I just love thise bad chose of events so much, because if Vince didnt have called after Sammy, nothing of the horrors followed after this would had happened. So indirectly, it was all Vinces own "fault".
I have to say I was a bit worried at first, because you made Sammy aware of Vince. But then again, you showed what an fantastic author you are, coming back with "plan b". And you SAVED the plat in so many ways, making it so much better. The whole idea of the mental blackout, and how it was triggered in the WORST TIMING. And it's sooo logic and plausible again, because those blackouts literally happen when you vomit, which fired and deleted your brains neurons. The body just going "nope", and sending the command to your guts to throw up, and your memory literally gets wiped in that time too. So it was literally the worst timing, for Vinc to shrink and to get noticed, because of Sammy throwing up, the whole thing "didnt happen" and Sammy had no memory of a ant sized Vince and plugging him in his ass. Fantastic...
How you made Vince suffer in this chapter is beyond anything, it's just the best scenario you came up with so far. Not just was he literally "pissed on", no, also pissed in his mouth, how he was also smeared in someones, a twink, a losers, ass.... and... worse was yet to come.
What I loved at this part, where Sammy accidentally let go of Vince and him hitting the surface of the counter top, hard. I just scream literally inside of me, how good this all is, and of how many things you tried to make this perfect. And then even better: Sammy looked hurt, "I'm sworry. You don't have to be sho mean..." ... Sammy even tried to apologize, totally mocking Vince in that perspective though, and instead of Vince getting some kind of "redemption" he would be "spit" and literally "shit" in his face, as a "reward", oh so good. I love these parts the most, it happened before in the other chapters, where Sammy apolizied, but then the shrunken/transformed guy wasnt spared, and got things made out even worse for them, and totally unaware to Sammy.
The play of words at this part is just incredbile, and I hope to see it again in upcoming chapters. And the best is, it was all just a funny joking event, and now it was "Sammys" time to laugh at the jock, without any knowledge though because of being so drunk.
The mirror part of Sammy spreading apart his ass with one hand, oh I loved it. And how he slapped his butt, and taunted the little "bug" in the other hand... "Wooks lik there's a new predator wround here."... so damn good. It was even so ironic, because of the lion costume of Vince, you literally thought of EVEERYTHING in this chapter.
The whole nightmarish concept is just so good, please, I hope it isnt the last ass plot, it's just so damn good <3 Especially what is following, I loved your other scat plots also before so much in your older stories.
Everything was so damn good, of where Vince head and neck nearly poped, because of the simple small pressure of a single finger, pressing from behinds Vince head. So Sammy wouldnt heven have registered kil nearly popping Vince neck in the simple little pressure of his finger. Then where Vince thought Sammy was "finished" and him wanting to scream... things became just hell for him, and the plot became it's highest point.
What was also so good to think about it, was how Sammys anus would mostly be "glued" with this viscosity honey like ass glue, a mix of sweat and anal glands secretion, accelerated by the alcohol, the dancing, the humid air in the party rooms. I could just imagine what kind of hell it would have been for Vince, to get a mouthful of this "honey" into his his mouth. You could have written it out even a bit more, of him feeling bale coming up his throat, him trying to prevent to vomit. Maybe in another upcoming chapteR!!
I just LOVE how you switch positions between the characters, it's such a great writing style, and here comes actually the highlight of the chapter, at least to me, it's just incredible, because of the double irony:
"What Vince landed on was something he didn't want to think about as the odor from it reminded him where he was. Wondering what that was, he heard a muffled noise that sounded like someone throwing up..."
Oh my god! Most readers wouldnt notice the double irony on this part mostly but it'S just insane. Imagine Vince falling face first, into those disgusting smelly filth on the "floor", and him opening his eyes in a shock, his shaking fingers goign to his mouth, trying not to vomit... sh-sh-shh him shking, wha where am - wha- *gag* is *gag* this- and then, PENG, like someone was answering him *throwing up* of Sammy outside. AAAAAAHHH! THIS IS THE BEST PART!! Imagine Vince getting a mouthful of shit in his mouth and someone was standing next to him watching it, and the other person vomitting because of what he saw, mocking, taunting, laughing at Vince indirectly, without even meaning to... THIS IS THE BEST PART!!!!
I didnt plan this becoming so long, but I just had to write on. And had to split it now into three parts.
I just cant describe to you how great this chapter was, and how much fun I fad reading it. Hope you had same as much fun writing it, and lots of more will follow in the same style. You just know how to do it write, and how to make Sammy react, speak, and the bullies around him. Everything is just so good already, I wouldnt need to give you any advise to improve.
I loved how Sammy was in this giggling state, like you would be after throwing up, and then felt better, and was just giggling but also really soon would fell in this dream state and sleepy.
I liked the part where Sammy whispered in falling asleep "I love you Lucas.", and Lucas just walked out of the room in the correct timing. I find the idea so much better, of Lucas not knowing that Sammy mostly was gay. Hope you wont change it in the plot. I find it way more appealing, if Lucas was straight. Also please dont kill Lucas off during the plot, I like him same as much as Sammy already.
The last third of the chapter starting... the dessert, in the form of "chocolate dessert". But before, the second best part of the whole plot (I have three favorite parts, the first mentioned above with the vomitting, now here the second, and the third coming up). Of how you killed Vince. It was the most degrading, humiliting, "meaningless" form imaginable. Making it so damn good. The idea of Vince dying because of a toxic foul fart was suddenly rocked into Sammys rectum, from the horrific depth of Sammys intestines. Filling it like a balloon, then *ppfff*ing it out of the slimy, hard closed wringled anus. Sammy totally blissfully unaware, feeling just good and rubbing himself into the blanket... where at the same time:
All those chose of words like "tunnel of death", the dark gurgles from digestion "defeated as he could only listen to Sammy digest whatever it was he ate last.", which was again such an ironic hint, because of the digested remains, now caked into turds, lurking around those dark tunnels, containing the digested remains of a banana, some M&Ms, chips a sandwich... and Chad.
"Vince felt a rumbling in the distance"... and then the pressure change, the foul fishy toxic gas inflating the "sack" aka Sammys rectum, and Vince literally being gased out in a gas chamber. Missed a bit of things like him vomitting his guts out, maybe even him pissing in the process , spastiically on the "floor", whimpering and screaming for his mommy, and as a contrast, Sammy just feeling good and falling sleeep again. What a way to go, I would love to see more like this in upcoming chapters.
And now the third best part, and I know I should come to an end. I will try my best :) I just love, love, love the idea of Vince becoming the iner layer skin of Sammys rectum. This is just such a damn humiliating and tortures idea. And how you did it...
Vince realizing at first he was "dead", thinking it was over and he could even have some fun of being a "ghost", and then how you made it so much worse, is just so good. How he was like "at least it's all over, it cant get any worse like this"... WRONG!
The idea of a silo sized turd, slowly..., "walking" over you, literally breaking and smearing your body into a thin film, was incredible. I cant think of a more nightmarish concept than this, actually I can ehe, more about it at the end of this. You thought of mostly everything agaon on here, like the mentioning of "solid/semi-solid" hinting that the turd had some soft creamy parts of course too.
One "bummer" though, I would love in upcoming chapters, that the transformed character doesnt lose his conscious, and would literally eternally suffer in "hell". Because of this being a fictional story, like an anime, the characters also wont get older if you dont write out, and they would "always" stay this age, and the characters meant to be suffer, suffering like in an eternal hell place, especially like here. I couldnt imagine some worse place, of becoming the inner skin of a boys rectum, meant to have turds "parked" on top of you every day, and then slowly slide over you, sliding over your "mouth", inside of it, the horrible foul fishy smell, and him "vomitting" everytime, screaming in his mind, and the boy outside, jsut casually taking a dump, withouth the slighest idea of the horrors his bodily functions were doing at that moment to a previous human being.
As a closer, I liked how you made Sammy feel a bit shy and uncomfortable actually using Lucas toilet gor a dump. I always felt the same way when I slept at a friends but also felt beter afterwards and just forgot about, literally the moment when flushed the "problems" away. I feel so connected with this story, it's insane. It's like you make the reader go through high school again, but with a nightmarish scifi twist. Making this story so great, and already unforgettable.
Coming to an end, I hope you liked my "little" review :) Hope to see the story continuing like this, and have lots of more future chapters. I would just LOVE more than anything to see maybe a teacher becoming Sammys or Lucas anus, which was actually the one thing I mentioned which would be even... worse. Of still being alive and feel a turd "vomitting" out of your mouth and throat from your "stomach", how it slowly was pressed over your tongue, your senses, and your mouth had no control anymore, just spastic moving in the contracts of the "owners" body.
Then the idea with some jocks turning into tiny half fly half human hybrids, like in the movie The Fly, fly body, fly size of course, but with their human heads still attached, and theym trying to get help from mostly Sammy and Lucas in school, maybe even following Sammy home, and meeting a horrific end of course, as a smear on a rolled up magazine, or even worse. It could also fit because of insect "blood" not being red but also be blueish sometimes, so it wouldnt even notcied by Sammy at all.
Then I had the idea, of someine turning into a few droplets of "water", maybe a chemistry project homework, in a test tube. Then Sammy accidentally let the rube drop or roll of his desk, the fluid dropping to the desk or floor. Shit! Looking around seeing no tissue to wipe the fluids off, Sammys notics a used boxershorts of his on the ground next to his bed, and used it to wipe off the tiny droplets, there no harm done! The poor liquid boy screaming, of ending in the worst place of the hew "home", in the inner back area of the boxers down where it would touch the asshole, when forming a wedgie. The next day Sammy would also wear this very boxers in a sleepy state stepping into them.
Another idea, there was a bicyclist day at school, of the sports period, making a bicyclist race. The could be a very dramatic and unfortunate event for one of the "cool", of course sport and cocky jocks, ending as a small portable toilet box, something like this:
http://i.imgur.com/AKdlGhJ.png
Which were standing on tables during the race course together with drinks. So the kids wouldnt go into the wild and pollute the enviroment. And as worse as can it get, the cocky kid becoming one of those and used by Sammy, feeling even embarrassed to go "in the wild" and taking a dump. Filling the tube behind a closed curtain, plopping in the stained toilet paper, closing it, coming out, and throwing it in the next standing waste bin, happily feeling better, moving along on his bike.
Thank you for making my day with this chapter, I actually didnt expect so fast to see a new one. Hope you have a nice upcoming Easter time. Hope you liked my review as much as I loved this chapter. Youre my hero. Have a wonderful day!!!
HeY!! Hope you liked my ass long review, ha. And youll have time again soon to continue, just can't wait. This chapter was just so good, hope you liked my ideas and would love so much to see them happening in future chapters. So glad this story changed into scat and watersports, I had wished a lot for it to happen. This is truly by far the best story you wrote so far, and it will stay just a favorite of mine forever.
!!!! :] You made my day, so happy I just read a new chapter of this epic story.
I am not bothering you too much with ass long messages like my previous, I truly hope you liked all the ideas in those and will use them eventually though, that would be AWESOME.
This chapter of course had epic length again, everything written in the same awesome style of yours. So of course I will vote it 5 stars, how could I not!? The chapter though was a bit of a downer for me, I think it had a few logic flaws, which in the past chapters, never happened. Actually the insane flaw of logic in this story is what drives me loving it so much, in combination also with, and which is very important I want to say this: Please... please please my god I am begging you, let Sammy stay unaware!! It's what making this story a jewel out of a sand of ordinary stories. Please dont change it. I saw the first line of you thought of changing it, and my heart dropped. It would totally destroy this story. Please dont change it.
Here are the logic flaws though which were a bit of a downer for my taste:
"Price laughed, "Did you see the kid? I bet he can't even lift 10 pounds. How's he suppose to take down a 200 pound kid and get him out of the school or a party full of kids? No, the kid didn't do it, but he's involved in it. Who ever is behind this has to be close to the kid.""
I think it would had made way more sense, if the police guy said something along after seeing how weak and what a wimp this kid was, like, did you see him, of course he has nothing to do with any of this, and they would totally cut him of the list. Saying he was maybe still connected to it was a bit unrealistic in my oppinion.
The second, and totally unlogic part was with the teacher. This was totally a downer for me, of her suddenly giving Sammy a play and then even a blowjob, as a teacher? It was so... meh. I loved the idea of someone giving Sammy a blowjob though, but a teacher of his class, just doesnt seem right to me. I hope she will disappear too, which maykes sense of Sammy thinking she got worried maybe getting in trouble, fired, or even in jail of what she did to Sammy.
Then I also found the testicle idea a bit of a flaw, it would had made sense maybe if the couch became a spermia, but then he couldnt "ticke the prickle" hahaha.
These parts were like feeling of me giving a bit of a 8 out of 10, but then..., the other parts totally made good for it again, for example the "boner in class" idea, was SOO DAMN GOOD!!
"Sammy felt his penis starting to grow as he did his best to not think about anything sexual."
All these lines around that part, and how it were going soft again, then grow, and everything was so damn written epic. And it fit perfectly into this high school plot. I actually remembered I once got a boner too, or maybe twice, in school class and it was horrible, I felt so embarrsed and tried everything to hide it, LOL!
You could had made it even better of writing out how it would totally form and expose through Sammys skinny streached skater jeans.
I loved the wet spot down there part too.
Then of course everything of the itro, I btw LOVE this soo much. You do it in every chapter, writing out these parts of Sammy going home, making homework, eating, going on the bus, changing clothes, classes, and everything, is SOO interesting to read, seriously, I love it. It fits so perfectly in the high school style, and just makes this story amazing.
Then also how you made Sammy feeling cocnerned and everything, totally having no idea he was "behing" those missings and how he even came up with dont worry, I am sure he just broke his phone, and all this, fantastic. I love how you make Sammy caring so much and literally make him a person who "coudlnt harm a fly" (which actually would be so ironic of those two fly tf ideas I spoke about lol!", maybe thw two cops turn into flys visiting him again). I could also see, maybe one of the flys ends as a smear (still lviing after smashed) on a rolled up comic magazines of Sammys, and the other, half smashed, Sammy feeds to a pet of his, maybe a frog in an aquarium, or a gold fish. Then the first one could maybe be detached, his head falling of, and like in insects, those body parts still live a few moments along, landing on Sammys soft pc chair (maybe he has these really girly ones, with a Mikey Mouse styles Disney child chairs lol), and Sammy plops his moistured boxer ass on it, doing homework, maybe even jerking off. I could see this scenary totally be awesome of Sammy looking through the aquarium in his boxers and tshirt, smiling, and go along pal, I have a snack for you. Maybe even more ironic of them had before in biology class about how digestion works in fish or frogs.
Then of course I would sitll love more than anything the anus tf plot idea. And also maybe not loosing conciousness of this tf, which would literally mean ... hell, for the person, forever.
Please dont change the style from unaware to aware, it would literally kill the plot. I am still giving 10 stars for this because of the great parts in it, and like I said, I loved the blow job idea lol, not that much of it giving by a teacher though. Also the boner in class was epic. And just tha carying nature of Sammy, so sweat and just amazing.
I could also see the police now suspecting the couach and blame him, that he has to behind it, now after his vanishing!! And it would fit so well of Lucas may say like what an asshole, that prick was some kind of perverted freak or something, he must be behind all of their missings.
Go on, this story is my favorite, and I hope to say way more chapters, please dont end it too soon <3 Thanks for this awesome chapter again!!!
I forgot I found another picture how I imagined Sammy look like in that bunny costume:
http://i.imgur.com/CCVmpPz.png
Especially with those tight strech jeans, and it's just so cute, maybe though with a bit of a more twink looking facial expression like Nai from Karneval:
http://i.imgur.com/3CNVTSf.png
http://i.imgur.com/QzDa0CV.png
I also like the skinny bone structure of the neck and throat muscles and adam apple, that would be awesome if you could describe Sammy more like that.
Just found THE PERFECT look of Sammy and wanted to share it too:
http://i.imgur.com/KzK7UWl.png (maybe a bit shorter hair)
http://i.imgur.com/0ii6hQ7.png (I imagine him wearing boxers like though maybe some more girly ones with hearts on them or tiddle teady bears)
What a fantastic surprise to come back home for, Im lovin it, and chapter 6 is now my 2nd favorite chapter, right after 4. I still can hear Vince "scream" every time Sammy goes to the bathroom big, lol. Which actually brings up something amazing in this chapter! You finally did it keeping the transformed characters consciousness, this is soo much better, and adds so much more humiliation to the plot. Please do it again in upcoming chapters!! It was a bit of a down side of the road in the past chapters, that you always killed off the characters, and them driving into "darkness". But here, Joseph kept his consciousness, and mostly kept it forever, until the panties would be burned or destroyed otherwise.
This chapter did a lot of things even better than the past ones, for example Joseph totally being full of fear and desperation, you did such a good job on this one. And compare his screams and desperation, to the joy and unawareness of Sammy is just so good, thats why it's so much better keeping Sammy unaware, please keep it this way, this story is a blast so far, and mostly THE best tf story I ever read anywhere on the web, seriously.
The idea with the pink girly panties was amazing and didn't even come to be before, and reading the plot, I honestly was a bit disappointed. Because I was thinking, oh buh-huh, does he make Joesph become Jessica panties? Lame, would have been much better if he had became Sammys... and than THIS part happened!
" if he had to spend is life being tried on by hot women, that was a sacrifice he was willing to make."
LOL! What a fantastic idea, and it's even better! So much more humiliating of he thought of maybe bad turned into a girly panties, but at least he would spent his rest of his life on a hot girls ass... WRONG. Fantastic idea!! And it's so much fitting for Sammys character, really well done played, amazing idead.
I also loved Joesph saying things like "what a fag...", it's so much more humiliating thinking these straight guys some of them having homophobic ideas and then they literally be used by Sammy in a very gay to them mannar.
The idea of Josephs mouth literally ben penetrated with the hardened boner into his "mouth" was THE BESSST, what a great idea. But then also the back coming, of Joseph thinking it was all over... WRONG! And Sammy picking him up and rub his penis head against the fabric, because of the nice feeling of the soft fabirc, what a good idea!!
The ending was a masterpeice, and I am so in love with it, the idea with Joseph ending as trash, and How you made Sammy do it:
" Joseph looked up and watched in horror as Sammy reached to the sides of the can. Slowly as if to tease him even more, Sammy lifted the sides of the bag."
" He was garbage like everything else left in there..."
"Sammy already forgot about the pair of soiled panties that were left to be picked up with the rest of pathetic trash that no one wanted."
Those sentences are GOLD! What a shocking torture, I can imagine Joseph not even registering what was about to happen there, literally his "eyes" twisting, the smell around him getting to him, maybe the cum dropping over him, making a wet BLOB noise, something of a former waste plopping onto him, and then from outside:
"Hey mom I'm taking out the trash,".
PLOP... silence. EPIC!!! ANd how Sammy even already forgot about the panties, he just jerked into, SOOO GOOD!!
The idea of this jerk, you also called him such before, literally getting a mouth full of Sammys penis and cum, and then just getting "trashed", used, abused, ending as waste, is FANTASTIC!
And the best? him keeping his consciousness!! Please I am begging you, do it again or always from now it is so much better them keeping their consciousness!! But unable to move, or do anything, but they kept thei senses, like taste, smell, can see, listen, but are just objects, or body parts, withouth no one ever to know about.
I would love to see the two annoying police cops maybe ending as two flys, like in my idea mail before. Also another panties tf, but this time the guys face ending in the back area of Sammys underpants, and literally getting a mout full of ass.
And of course the guy becoming a "pain in the arse" idea, of someone ending as Sammys Anus, also keeping his consciousness, senses, taste, smell, everything, of having the honor to experience a soft long turd being pressed out of his "throat" and out of his "mouth", him screaming, choking, and it always feeling like him throwing up, throwing up the most horrible tasting thing you could imagine.
The part of where Sammy also said "lucas" was so humiliating for Josep,
"Was he really thinking of a guy? Joseph couldn't help but get more disgusted as he felt something wet touch him."
Please more of these disgusting parts for these boys turned into objects then used by Sammy, it' the best parts...
"Joseph gagged as he watched that kid... Tammy? Randy? No it was Sammy. Yeah Sammy, that' right. Sammy came walking into the room. " <3
"Joseph watched as Sammy stood over him. He already had his legs in between Joseph. Joseph watched as Sammy's ass and junk hung over him awaiting what was coming next. Sammy bent down and picked up Joseph. Joseph let out one more cry of protest before he started to rise up."
The chapter is just full of these fantastic parts, and it is literally now my 2nd fav chapter. Would have been even better of Joseph getting a mouthfull of ass.
Here is another picture how I imagine Sammy:
http://i.imgur.com/yRaLeeo.png
I love this skinny, "wimp" like concept so much, and I could even se ehim dress like his for Halloween, lol. Can't wait for the next chapter. Hope you liked my ideas with the other tf parts, would love to see them eventually. This story is just the best!!
Another look for Sammy with a annoyed facial expression:
http://i.imgur.com/ZK878LP.jpg
I could also see him wear a hair barrette like this adding to a girly look:
http://i.imgur.com/8LumW9k.png
Look at those hot wedgie pants! maybe turning a guy into bike pants with the face in the crack inside area, and Sammy using them in his free time at home, to sleep in like pyjamas, and to ride bike.
Would also like to see another tiny food tf again like the m&m, maybe a peanute tf adding inside a bag of lots of others, and it been swllowed whole, or a popcorn and literally ending semi half digested as a kernel in a turd.