Yes, must agree this chapter took a dark turn although I was expecting it from the teasing in the previous chapters. And this gives us a better understanding of what is to come in future chapters. 

It is very interesting learning about the characters in each of the chapters. I really admire how you keep the victims human although they are not necessarily treated as such. Understanding their life prior to shrinking and their hopes and dreams thwarted by these evil individuals who either purchased or gifted them is very important for the reader to have empathy for the victim and I personally feel is what helps set the story apart and makes it more relatable. I feel it is important as a reader to relate in some small way with the characters even if it is just their hopes and dreams and life throwing roadblocks their way. Some in Alicia's case and others I assuming in upcoming chapters the roadblocks were more crashes that ended their life. 

The nightmare Jacob seems to have definitely is teasing us to his ability of see what his victims fate has become. If I'm correct we were also teased as to possibly finding out how and who cursed him with these powers. With the mass shrinking of individuals it would be hard for Jacob to actually dream about each of his victims so not sure how that would flush out in a story setting. I'm sure it would actually drive a person crazy or in this case more crazy than he already is. I'm wondering if it is only characters he relates to more closely that he would dream about their fate and if this is the case then that would help with the hundreds and potencial thousands that will become victims of this human tracking world we find ourselves in.

I'm interested to see who will be more of a forgiving and caring owner of the victim in future chapters. I'm assuming there has to be at least one that will show sympathy toward their shrunken person.

I could go on and on with how this story brings multiple emotions into play that keeps the reader engaged and looking forward to the next chapter. 

What a great chapter, I enjoyed learning about Jinshin’s past.

I was at first thinking Ben, why are you going to try and run? Then it occurred to me that he needed to at least try once. I also got the feeling she was prepared and expecting him to run at least once. This gave her the opportunity to show mercy and earn just a little trust from Ben. She is a smart woman and understands that even though she may not know what she will do with him now, but she knows that there will be a time she can use him to her advantage in the future.  

I got shivers when I was reading the portion of his discovery on the floor and how she circled him with her legs as she sat down enlightening him with a glimpse of her past. I am immensely enjoying the way the chapters in this story are flowing such as harshness coupled with bouts of calming. This seems to not overwhelm the reader with constant harsh behavior.

I am catching myself wanting to know more about each character. This I know is because of how you are interspersing each character’s story into the chapters.

The transition to Deita and Liz was one of those moments where while reading the author changes tone and you are taken to another world altogether. This is a great experience for the reader as you are left with wanting more from Jinshin and Ben I recall many great books and or movies that do that as well, you are like wait a minute I want to know more about their story and then you get wrapped up in Deita and Liz’s story quickly. This, I must say, is a great feature in your story writing as the reader doesn’t get wrapped up in just one aspect of the story and forget or lose interest in the other characters. It keeps you focused on the greater story rather than just the individual characters.

You can see how Liz is blaming herself for the situation she has been thrown into. This is a sad mechanism, a victim trying to understand why they are in the situation they are in. It seems people first blame themselves thinking that it must have been something they did or something they should have done differently that got them here. We all know that there is evil in this world, and it isn’t necessarily the victim the one to blame.  

Although we already knew Deita was perverted and sadistic this chapter shows the reader the stark difference between Deita and Jinshin. How callous and uncaring she is with Liz shows her true feelings toward the victims she is dealing with.

This is a great set up for the next time we read about Deita and Liz as neither knows that they are destined to be together however long Deita determines.

Great chapter to this story, I like the soft then stark difference between characters it keeps the reader wanting more.

I personally am satisfied so far you have brought a story that is very intriguing and can keep me interested for the next chapter. Great job with doing this as it is a great story with vore and sadistic tendencies intertwined within. There are some writers that only get to the vore without the build up which there is a place for those in our community there is also a place for writers such as yourself that brings a story. Don't get discouraged as you are one of the great writers we have here.

Hello, It's me again with my little review. 

It is very interesting delving into the psyche of Jacobs mind. The horrors throughout his young life and the indignation he has for mankind. There are some deep ceded issues which could surface in the future, possibly harming those around him including Blaire.

The lies Jacob is telling Blaire will soon haunt him as you can never walk your way out of lies, they will soon find you no matter how far you move from the first lie. You seem to end up losing track of which lie you told, and they are soon discovered.

The banter between Deita and Jinshin is always enlightening. It seems Deita has been kept in the dark on some key intel. Not sure if she has picked up on Jinshin has more knowledge of what is going on in the organization than her. This may be something that has always been and nothing new, but I picked up on this right away.

This new organization O’Dias Karn is ominous and is interesting as who they are. Maybe it’s just me but I’m waiting for how Blaire’s family will intertwine into this underworld in the upcoming chapters. We may hear more from them in the second episode. The tease for the motivations of Jacob is intriguing, looking forward to learning more about those.

I guess I didn’t realize the facility would be that far away, makes since though. You wouldn’t want such a facility to be near anyone.

The shroud was lifted from Avaramix giving us a glimpse into is appearance. It also seems everyone so far in this story has a dark history of some sort. I would suppose this is the same in all life experiences. Our history will dictate who we become as an individual and how we live our lives and interact with those around us. Learning more about the motivations of Avaramix and the experiments that will be performed is haunting and could only be horrific for those test subjects.

The conversation between Avaramix and Jacob was enlightening. It seems the murder of Charles was unnecessary as the Blairs family were notified already we should have seen that coming. A very interesting turn with the proposal from Avaramix to Jacob. This is becoming a great cliff hanger for the next episode and how we move forward into this story. There seems to be a lot that will be written in the last chapter for this volume. You are great at leaving cliffhangers to keep the audience anticipating the next move. Great job on this chapter, I’m looking forward to where we go from here. There has been a lot written about and will have a lot to write in upcoming volumes in the future. You have created a great cast of characters that allow the audience to pick their favorite. So far mine is Jinshin and Ben, I am feeling sorry for Liz and hoping there could be a saving for her but understand if she will not follow us into the next volume outside of Deita’s body. You have created a dynamic between the major characters that leave a lot of room to explore.

Well, what can I say great recap and overview for the next volume and what we should expect to see. I really like the idea for the bonus chapters and how we will be able to read about the victims and their fate. This is a great idea that will not interfere with the plotline of the story. 

Looking forward to the next chapters in volume II and seeing where we are going.

Great read so far!

I am just now able to catch up on reading chapter 2-5 of volume II. I wanted to leave a review breaking down my thoughts on each chapter for what it’s worth.

Chapter-2

The start of this chapter caught me off guard, I was not expecting Ben to take this to the level he did. He obviously had been trying this for awhile albeit to no success. Jinshin seems to come out of nowhere to keep him from succeeding in his endeavor. I was happy to see we were enlightened a bit on her feeling for Ben although she still doesn’t understand the depth yet. I would suspect we will be seeing this as we move through the chapters. Although Ben has made strong arguments toward Jinshin I get the feeling Ben’s resolve will soon be broken with his imprisonment. It is interesting how Jinshin has searched for ways to justify her actions in her life and landing on Ben’s predicament as his bias outlook not taking responsibility in her role in these atrocities. Looking forward to reading and learning more about Jinshin’s emotional attachment with Ben and how far she will go to protect him. Jinshin and Ben have become my favorite characters in this drama. My personal humble opinion now is that you have a dynamic between these two that surpasses the others. A spinoff of these two characters lives together and the drama that unfolds with them could easily happen.

As the chapter progressed, we learned more of Jacobs ability. After what happened in the container, I can see Deita creating an enormous amount of drama between her Jacob and Blair. Deita and her deviousness through her newfound feelings toward Jacob. I am getting the feeling she will go to devilish lengths to get what she wants. I would not put it past her to take measures to eliminate all possible roadblocks standing in her way to get what she wants even if it is to remove what she perceives as her competition now that she knows Jacob can shrink multiple people at the same time by them just touching each other. It was sad to see the response from Jacob in this chapter regarding Liz’s fate.

Chapter 3

 Okay I must say the start of this chapter gave me hope that there may be possible hope for Liz. It is interesting to learn some of the details of Deita’s room, shedding some light on her persona. My first impression of her was not the neat and organized but rather mor chaotic in nature. This was interesting how through the previous chapters you seem to create an internal image of a person’s personality and they are not exactly the way to perceived them to be. This was a fresh breath of air as these little details strewn throughout the story will keep you interested.

The interaction between Liz and Jacob was heart wrenching to say the least then the WOW factor occurred. I was NOT expecting Deita to appear. There is a lot to unpack with Deita and Jacob’s interaction. This interaction was very intriguing and opened a lot of possibilities. Deita has a lot of soul searching that will gage how she moves forward with how she interacts with Jacob.

My earlier thoughts of what she may do from the previous chapter stand but the reason she will go about it is due to vindictiveness rather than eliminating what she may perceive as competition. WOW this was a great chapter and had some unexpected plot twists.

Chapter 4

This chapter is a great analytical approach to learning how Annie (Gullivette) and Jacob received their powers. We learn how Annie escapes the facility leaving Jacob behind. She didn’t even try and find out if he was still alive but rather just ran away.  

The similarities between Annie and Deita are striking. This may be one of the reasons Jacob hates Deita as she may subconsciously remind him of Annie. There could be some suppressed feelings toward Annie he is not aware of due to the nature of her leaving him behind. It is interesting how all these characters intertwine with each other.

Chapter 5

So now we get a glimpse into the research that Avaramix and his goons are performing. More intriguing drama is sure to come. The infatuation Deita has for Jacob may interfere with her ability to help in the future if Avaramix determines it is time to collect DNA from Jacob.

Again, Jinshin shows up out of nowhere and collects Ben. There is an uncanny ability that Jinshin seems to have for finding Ben. Again the dialog between Jinshin and Ben is amazing.  I must say their chemistry together is the reason I have grown to love these two characters the most.

I hope my review is helpful or interesting in some way. Looking forward to reading more chapters.

This is very interesting to read into Blaire’s family and her actions when she left. Although she tries to come across as innocent, she most definitely has a past she is hiding. I’m sure we will be reading more about her family and their enterprise. I can just imagine who their connections are and if they intertwine with Avaramix and his dark organization.

Although Jacob is an evil character in his own right, he does show a little humanity for Blaire. Normally individuals with a narcissistic personality such as Jacob would not show empathy toward anyone. I can understand he may also have a protective attribute toward Blaire that is hard for him to overcome.

During their initial argument between Blaire and Charles at the food wagon I sensed Jacob would utilize his ability to eliminate the threat Charles made about contacting her family. I just wonder what he would do with the Charles after, maybe give him to Blaire without her knowledge. Maybe place him in her food or something that would have her eating him. There could be some ramifications for doing something like that though as there has to be some form of paper trail of him being in Valdez and none of him leaving.

It will be interesting to see how he plans to handle the situation.

Although in a perverse sort of way it is nice to see Jinshin and Deita making amends.

Ben’s request totally caught me off guard, I was not expecting this. Now I am intrigued as to how Jinshin handles this dilemma, will she hold to her promise earlier and kill him or will she find a way to keep him? Interesting turn of events to say the least. I guess we will see how she really feels about him as it seems she has been put on the spot.

As always you have brought another great chapter that keeps the reader on edge.

Looking forward to the next chapter and where this journey takes us.

Great story and I'm anticipating the next chapter. I love the dialog and how protective Allura is of Steven.

Okay now the implications are coming around it seems we are going to be taken on a journey through this new world with monstrously large predators with a fascination for tickling. Interesting concept and I haven't read any other stories out there like this. It has peaked my interest though. This could be an interesting ride.

Great story concept looking forward to the next chapter.