Reviewer: JDO Signed 
Date: June 06 2021
Title: Chapter 1: Rescue
This story is FANTASTIC. Turnabout and revenge are old tropes but you're managing to knock it out of the park in such a creative way while giving us small little tidbits of Tae's past throughout the story to show us why she feels how she does and how she's able to do what she's doing. All of the size interactions have been super hot and it's been delicious seeing these former bigs getting their comeuppance once they're small. The bartender getting thrown in the toilet was so disgusting and hot. It's hard to say whether or not the punishment fits the crime, but that's part of why Tae is an interesting character, because she's not perfect so we have to flinch at the thought of "does this bartender deserve to get pissed on and flushed just because she looked the other way when Eren was getting tortured?"
I haven't written anything in a while so take my critique with a grain of salt due to how rusty I am, but this last chapter seemed a little confusing with the way you laid it out. I feel like it would have flowed better if you started with Tae going to the airport to get Grace and then once Tae got the text on Sylvia's phone, jumping forward in time to Alice being captured.
It's a small thing but I think it would make it less confusing as to the timeframe.
Also, the scene with Sylvia getting captured and shrunk was so incredibly well-done with Sylvia slowly starting to realize that something wasn't right until the terror at what was happening washed over her. That slow-burn really let us appreciate her fall from grace, so it was disappointing to not get a similar scene with Alice. It felt a little bit rushed to me. I was actually hoping to see a scene where Grace worked with Tae to get that job done!
Either way I'm loving this story and can't wait to see where else you take it. Cheers and thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: I greatly appreciate your response!
I definitely agree that revenge can be overdone in fiction, I am elated to hear that I am keeping the tale original, and of course sprinkling in the size scenes which does beg the question if Tae is going too far or not with her actions, and the mystery why she cares so much.
Regardless of how much you write I think that's really good criticism which after reviewing the chapter I wholeheartedly agree with. Since I know where the story/chapter is going I can forget that the reader doesn't have all the information I do or my thought process which can make it confusing. Since time/flashbacks will happen at certain points in future chapters I wanted to introduce the concept, but think I missed the mark here.
Between Alice and Sylvia, I had not thought to include Alice's capture since Tae and Grace were not the ones to do it (at least directly), and thought the scene would be too similar to Sylvia's capture but would lack any surprise factor since by that point the reader would be aware of what was happening, whereas with Sylvia she and the reader learn what is going on at the same time. However I concur, it would have been really cool to see how that went and perhaps it will be explained more later! I definitely appreciate how much thought you put into the review and will make efforts to prove how the reader is able to interpret the passage of time in the story!
