I am not a native speaker of English but I have a degree in English literature. I also have been a student of clinical psychology. I write a variety of genres but my favorite is F/m with a touch of cruelty 3:)
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I liked this story. you have a solid narrative here,
Make sure you put at least one blank line between your paragraphs to make it easier for the reader.
I admit I thought the story would go on a bit farther,
But hey, U'm satisfied, and so is the author
so who cares!~
Thanks for the story ;)
A boy is subjected to torture in a all girl school while alone and three popular girls of the high school decided to increase the torture of poor teenager by very high.
Character names-
Tyson,shrunken and enslaved teenager,main victim of the story basically.
Jessica=Main antagonist in the story.
Jennie=Friend of jessica,later in the story dies from a unexpected reason.
Jennifer=Buddie of jessica.They are best friends compared to jennie.
This story focuses highly on emotions and thought of the shrunken boy called tyson.
It also focuses on humiliation of the shrunken boy and cruelty of the giant girls.
It also focuses on feet mainly,100% feet.
I dont really expect reviews anymore,it would be cool to get them though,to see what kind of shape the story is in.
I write this story for my enjoyment mainly
That's it,have a good day now.
want to see more. keep going...
-RE-WRITING STORY: http://giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=6238-
This is a story about the future, where there had been a war between man and woman which them women won. There is one Vault that has been able to keep it´s dwellers alive for one and a half century, but because of certain events they send a small squad into the open world to find a sample of the FEV virus that enables it´s host to grow and become stronger.
Can't believe this hasn't got a rating 5 chapters through.
Okay, pros:
1. The connections to fallout series was a welcome change. 2. Nice scenes, nice narration. 3. I personally like the violent giantesses more than the gentle one.
Cons: 1. YOur paragraphs got shorter in the later chapters, which is very good. But I think you're having problems copy/pasting the text from your computer to the website. Most of the sentences and paragraphs are cut from the middle, and are continued in the next line instead. Frankly, it gives you a headache eventually, preventing you from appreciating the story.
I like to see more, thanks.
Thanks for the feeback, and I'll be sure to check the copy/paste problem the next times I post a story.
[Reviews - 5] Dylan dreams of becoming a hero, but when two aliens named Lord Osiris (Oh·s·ee·r·ih·s) and Lady Universe get their revenge by shrinking all males on Earth, he'll get the chance to become a hero no one ever imagined with the help of his friends, family, and his giantess crush.
First of all, allow me to congradulate you on your decision to actually write something. It is a very time-consuming endevour, and requires a lot of guts.
Now down to your story,
Advantages: 1. You have good ideas, meaning you have good imagination. 2. you introduce all the characters at the beggining of the story, kinda like in plays. I like that a lot.
Possible improvement: 1. YOu can put more time into developing your characters, at least the major ones. This way, people will care about them and your story more. 2. avoid using 3$$ etc. to divide your paragraphs/chapters. People get confused by that. 3. Advance your story at a slower, more detailed pace.
Last tip: none of us is perfect here, even the ones who think they are! Keep that in mind, and keep trying.
Thanks I'll try that.
Thanks I'll try that.
Thanks I'll try that.
Interesting concept, the blind giantess.
I'm looking forward to how it develops. Wish I had read the series by which this story (apparantly) is influenced.
A tiny man is subjected to the sadistic whims of two young women.
I enjoed it. Looking forward to longer chapters. Thanks.
