An exploration of a marginalized woman's life and circumstances that includes a sizechanging machine.
I have enjoyed this story so much, and your ending here was just about perfect. Very few stories have touched on the feminist perspective inherent in an empowered giant woman, and you have done so masterfully here. It's been fascinating watching your story title gradually become more and more true as Lauren descended deeper into madness. You really did a great job making her a three dimensional human, to the point that you can almost sympathize with her monstrous actions. Very well done, thank you for a great story.
She took gentle care of him, and they were in love.
But she was starting to wonder just what the limits were.
Haha, I enjoy that in less than twelve hours you went from being sure you had nothing to write to putting out a full fledged and incredibly hot story. :-) So happy to see you posting here and can't wait to see what happens next to your little man. ;-)
You are far, far too kind. Seriously, you have such a bright and inventive mind, I'm just happy to be able to have the opportunity to give you a little nudge (some pun intended) now and then in your writing. Thank you for the lovely shout out -- and another amazing chapter! Keep up the great work.
"Get the butter off him" -- incredibly clever pun whether it was intended or not!
Another great and fun chapter, and not completely smut free as I was promised in your intro. ;-) Thanks for another chapter. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Yeah, I hadn't intended for the pun. Ahaha.
I am biased, but I absolutely love this story. :-)
I know you're not planning on adding to this, but I do wish you'd reconsider. This is some of the hottest giantess fiction I've ever read. It would be a shame to never add to it again and let your talent lay fallow. Just my opinion, anyway, and you know what they say about those. ;-)
Sasha has watched attack of the fifty foot woman one too many times.
Nice! Very well paced with great descriptions, very enjoyable. The ending was magnificent. Thank you for this.
When Scott wins the state championships, his friend photographer Matt hopes to help them both out with a photoshoot with some 'interesting' and 'unqiue' shots. Matt's housemate Brian has his own, home made, Boson Ray which can change the size of things. How will Scott deal with the shoot, and what happens when his girlfriend Mary finds out...?
I think you mean "coitus" but it autocorrected to something very different. But seriously awesome chapter. Your descriptions are excellent.
Ellie and Aaron have an unusual arrangement with a shrink ray that allows them to live out secret desires and, ultimately, brings them closer in ways neither could’ve anticipated.
Absolutely beautiful chapter in a very good love story. The character interactions are very true and exciting in the way that budding love is when just beginning.
Author's Response:
Thanks very much! I'm glad the characters had that vibe for you.
The story will be about a girl (Francesca) that has been shrunk down in an accident with some medication she had got online from a strange website no one had really heard of.
Without anyone else knowing about what had happened, this is a story about her fight for survival, also her fight to try to get the attention of people around her to hopefully save her life or end up being her worst nightmare.
Poor Frankie. Who would have thought Chloe could have been so careless! Pretty hot chapter, loved the descriptions. Might have been nice to have more details from Frankie's point of view after she was knocked off into Chloe's fingers, but that's only a suggestion. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thank you for the reveiw :) yeah I wanted to make it a really long chapter with a PoV of frankie to but didnt have the time. IT will be made up for in the next chapter hopefully :)
Fun start. Can't wait to see where you take it.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! It will be taken to as many places as I can think off, the possibilitys are almost endless!
A young woman's home is invaded by a tribe of miniature religious fanatics. Individually they seem rather fragile and harmless, but as she will soon learn, they have a far more neferious purpose for her than she might've imagined...
The extreme gore is not my usual cup of tea, but I find the Virgin character very compelling. Also enjoy your writing style. Thanks for posting an update!
Author's Response:
Yeah, this is def my first rodeo concerning gore. Thank you for the review! I quite like the Virgin character myself. I'll keep pushing for updates (probably not as long a wait though ;) )
Great stuff. I very much enjoy the level of realism and detail you put into your writing. Also interested in your use of a trans character and how that will affect the story development. Please keep writing, I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm trying to stick to a chapter (roughly 3000 words) per day, so keep tuning in!
I'm quickly growing jealous of your ability to crank out these chapters, but I am really enjoying the story that's unfolding. You give us just enough information to keep us wanting more, a skill that most amateur writers lack. The psychological complexity of Amber's past and continuing abuse, as well as the issues surrounding her being a trans girl, feel very real and add a nice depth to the story. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
Sure thing! I appreciate your enthusiasm in reading a lot. Reviews are always a good thing, even if they're bad (though thankfully they're not).
This chapter was such a heartbreaker. I was so certain that Amber was going to make it, only to find herself in the clutches of someone else who couldn't properly take care of her, but at least with the promise of something more hopeful. Still, I can't tear myself away from the fascinating story that you're telling. I've found myself fully invested in your tragic heroine and have been enjoying all of her struggles. Even if you're not able to continue at the pace you started with please do continue.
Also enjoyed the Bechdel reference -- was that a meta-dig at your own portrayal of those characters? :-)
Author's Response:
It was. I view one of the most pressing concerns with the lives of these women is that they invest their happiness in the men they're married to rather than working on themselves. That's why Cathy is such a nice contrast, because she talks about Nick often, but mostly to complain that he's in some indirect way hampering her freedom (even if that's good for her).
I'd love to read Fear and Loathing In Las Putas someday. ;-)
Poor Amber. I have to say that I'm really enjoying the way you've been able to keep both narratives moving forward while teasing out parallels and matching themes. I thought that chapter 22 was especially masterful. Thanks for popping into my reviews and leaving such great comments. It reminded me that I needed to catch up on your wonderful story. Really looking forward to seeing where you take it.
Author's Response:
Ah, thanks! Hey, good writers gotta support each other. :)
And yeah... being able to see the fruition of my planning for how the two stories relate to each other thematically is so fucking nice. And we're only about a quarter of the way in.
I had come here to review the original chapter 25, but I understand why you made the edit where you did. As exciting as it was, the ending did feel rushed. Hopefully the rest will show up in chapter 27, and won't just be a secret chord. Still very good and very dark. If this isn't Amber hitting rock bottom then I'm scared for her future. Also wanted to point out that I enjoyed the earlier subtle reference to Amber's dad's flirtation with being orthodox. Makes me wonder how that also might have affected her psychologically, especially coming from a character who's so far mostly been defined by his absence. Thanks for the updates! Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Yes, this is certainly rock bottom. Seriously, I should have mentioned that Megan's ass is actually sandstone and she commanded Amber to slap it, but I figured it was implied.
At least it's rock bottom of Act I. Amber's about to get some time to breathe and recuperate from the past handful of days, but to say that her adventure isn't quite over would be an understatement.
In fact, we've only gotten to see eight days of her life as a tiny so far.
MUAHAHAHA >:)
Ugh! Grim! If Megan's ass is sandstone then Jeanne must be like magma or a nickel core. Nice job on the breaking the fourth wall stream of consciousness in 26. Shades of Jonathan Safran Foer, there, but in a good way. :-) You've got me hooked.
Author's Response:
:D
I'm really proud of how the arcs of Act I ended up playing out. I had a fun time planning out the "evidence" for a nonexistent crime that Amber and Megan collectively left behind.
Chapter 27 is actually the original plan for how I wanted Chapter 25 to go, but I was too excited to hold back the big reveal and threw in the dog screwing things up as quick tie, but it was sloppy and I'm glad I returned to making sure it got fully fleshed out. I also made sure to do some research on Traumatic Brain Injury, because Megan still has a lot of screentime left.
And I'm glad you liked the fourth wall stuff in 26. I was taking kind of a risk with that, but I'm planning on making breaking the fourth wall a plot point and not just a trope, so the end of Act I was as good a time as any to bring it to the forefront. Plus, with Amber returning to her Mom, it's important that we get some background info, I think.
Thanks for the reviews!
You know, I don’t really think taking the road less traveled really made a difference at all.
Almost like both roads led to the same place. But I'm sure you knew that already. :-) Wow. I think this is one of the more powerful (if you'll excuse the unintended pun) chapters that you've written, if only because its silences speak volumes. Eliot's gentle exploration of Amber, and the emotions it invokes really touched me to my core. After all of the dehumanizing treatment she has faced (a lot of it self-inflicted, sure) it was actually moving to see her go from worrying about not resting her balls on Eliot's palm to kissing his forehead in gratitude. It was, and has been quite a journey.
And your portrayal of county-level mental health programs betrays some personal connection to the system. Brilliantly portrayed.
I'm sure Amber's reprieve will, as with nearly every good thing that's happened to her so far, likely be brief. But now you've grounded her and the story, so we're better able to deal with what has to come next. Can't wait to read more of act II.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review!
I'm probably going to be taking a couple of weeks off, as writing at such a grueling pace has taken something out of me. But yeah, I'm super proud of this chapter. I think it's the first one, aside from the penultimate Megan chapter of Act I, that's one continuous scene. I think Eliot and Amber deserve their respective dues.
On the other end, I was worried that the hospital chapter didn't stay in one place for long enough, but I didn't want to dote too much on it. I'm really trying to keep the plot from spinning too far away from the interaction between Amber, her mom, her therapist, and Cathy. I'm trying hard to make this as dark as possible without falling out of the grey area of human experience.
