Just your average reader that enjoys good reads of simple yet inovatively stimulating stories and such.
I pretty much made this account here so I can read/fav/review however there is a part of me that wouldn't mind giving contribution a try once I buck-up enough confidence & time as well as pick up on some useful techniques and skill development :)
When shrinking is finally possible, you volunteer to be your sisters toy for the holiday
Absolutely epic all of it :)
I pretty much ended up reading this story from start to finish all in one night, I couldn't stop after one chapter it was just that good : D
Needless to say, I'm on the edge of my seat to read the next update when it finally arrives. And I know it took a fair number of chapters for any shrinking activities to actually arise and start in this story, I didn't even mind, whatever your writing style is,
'Build-up style'? It pretty much made the wait that much more exciting and compelling to read through. All the stuff that has happened and the events eluded to probably happen in the future of this story I enjoyed it all. Its great man :)
I know this is a lengthy and excessively possitive reveiw, I'm sorry about that. I'm pretty much trying to sum-up my oppinions for all 9 chapters that I just read through.
Hopefully my future reviews will be much shorter and more pleasant to read ^_^
Thanks for taking the time to review! Due to work, updates will come less frequently, but the next chapter should be up in one or two days.
Holy geez! That school is crazy!!!! :O
I love it! >:D Seriously, I like how instead of shrinking at school is a one-time sorta thing with one or a few students, it is instead a student wide passtime.
Thats an amazing twist there ;)
Vanessa Falls in love, how ever Marcus Doesn't feel the same way, later he has a change of heart and so has she and shrinks him to mere inches
Geez mate! That story was epic 0_0
Seriously, never before has a stories end caught me by such shocking surprise. I seriously did not expect her to crush him at the end, I felt that they'd bonded and everything and that they'd settled into a pretty sweet life together ^_^;
Sure the whole panties thing would have caused some heated glares, but surely that would have smoothed out? XD
So yeah, I just wanna say this story really got me good. So Kudos to you, mate :)
thank you kindly
I can't help but feel that Ron worry's way too much.
'Ignorance is bliss' would be a pretty fine philosophy for him to follow right now. Jack is shrunk and in a similar situation to Ron, yes that is true and ergo the empathy. But frankly, considering all of Jack's past actions from being an abusive/unattentive father to flat-out brawling and attempting to torture and kill Ron... I'd take them past wrongs as sufficient reasoning to throw that empathy into the wind and leave Jack to his deserved fate.
No way he should cure him, that's insane considering the moment he grows back he'd be fully capable of taking out Alison and Erica, having them arrested etc and all other things a full grown man having experienced hell will be capable of doing.
Ah well, I'm sure next chapter will be loads of fun and loaded with another set of bad idea's from Ron once again XD
love this series ;)
This Jack issue seems to be polarizing readers, which i guess is much better than I expected! Before, I was certain Jack deserved it, then people began to wonder if he really did. Now, I'm having trouble figuring it out too, as will Ron. it's hard to determine whether being a tiny slave is a harsh punishment or not, i suppose it depends on one's preferences.
you're VERY right when you recall what Jack has done. because in reality, he'll easily put himself over others, even if it means they could die. This happened with Ron.
Curing him is a VERY bad idea, and I'm not sure how Ron's gonna figure that one out. I suppose Ron thinks he SHOULD free him, and yet he's worried what Jack will do. that right there is an indicator that he simply CANNOT be free. but we will see!
thanks for the review and for reading! Check back soon, Alman. I really enjoyed your detailed insight.
hm...
you know what would be kinda nice? If all of this was somehow genuine : d
That Jessica had truely changed or was on the fast-track path to recovery and now has the reward of getting to spend time with her father.
Her father, who has also truely learned and understood the error of his ways and unlike Ron, has come to contently accept his new place in life at 3inches tall. Being full of remorse he now wishes to be a better person.
As for Erica, perhaps seeing her daughter and father finally connect, possibly lets her evil-side towards Jack disperse/mellow-out to the point where the 3 of them become 1 bizarre happy familly. :)
It's weird, but despite what each of them has done in this story, I can kinda feel for each of them even Jessica. I guess I'd like to see a win for Erica's family finally arise. No more Ron having to glare daggers at/tread thin-ice around Jessica. And no need to worry about Jack and his new life...
It is crazy how your chapters can do this to my mind-set as I know last review I was barking for Jack's torment to continue forever XD But now, I genuinely wanna believe the 3 of them have or will change for a comfortable better :)
I know there's no way thats likely to happen, not imediately anyway. After all, Ron still has a good number of inches to go before a conclusion is in sight. But hey, dare to dream right? XD
Epic updates as ussual, maybe your next chapters will get me ranting for the exact oposite scenario to come about next time. I shall wait and see XD
hm...
you know what would be kinda nice? If all of this was somehow genuine : d
That Jessica had truely changed or was on the fast-track path to recovery and now has the reward of getting to spend time with her father.
Her father, who has also truely learned and understood the error of his ways and unlike Ron, has come to contently accept his new place in life at 3inches tall. Being full of remorse he now wishes to be a better person.
As for Erica, perhaps seeing her daughter and father finally connect, possibly lets her evil-side towards Jack disperse/mellow-out to the point where the 3 of them become 1 bizarre happy familly. :)
It's weird, but despite what each of them has done in this story, I can kinda feel for each of them even Jessica. I guess I'd like to see a win for Erica's family finally arise. No more Ron having to glare daggers at/tread thin-ice around Jessica. And no need to worry about Jack and his new life...
It is crazy how your chapters can do this to my mind-set as I know last review I was barking for Jack's torment to continue forever XD But now, I genuinely wanna believe the 3 of them have or will change for a comfortable better :)
I know there's no way thats likely to happen, not imediately anyway. After all, Ron still has a good number of inches to go before a conclusion is in sight. But hey, dare to dream right? XD
Epic updates as ussual, maybe your next chapters will get me ranting for the exact oposite scenario to come about next time. I shall wait and see XD
This is a great perspective on Jack. He seems to want to become a better person now, but Jessica really takes after him, because Ron might not be so sure if he wants to be better, or just wants to save himself, so he can be free again.
Things have gotten shaky since this review, but I'll admit there is still hope things can work out for them! A family with a tiny dad, it could work.
That's awesome that your perspectives have changed! my intention in this story is to make readers wonder what's right and wrong, who's bad and who's good. I'm glad you've told me this :)
If my chapters continue to change your outlook in the future, then my job is done. keep questioning, my friend!
An 18 year old girl inevitably finds herself shrunk and in the hands of her torturous and cruel younger 15 year old sister. But when she's given the chance to pay back each and every wrong, what could possibly happen?
Hmmm...
That was pretty good for fleshing out the character's backstories a bit more. Or at the very least, Katie's...
Considering that Katie apparently doesn't live with her sister and is now the bigger of the two I'm going to guess she's gonna take her new little sister along with her to her home-away from home yeah? ^_^;
After swiping any convenient wadds of cash lying about the house first of course ;)
Who knows what'll happen now that the tables are turned and the situation in another's favor? Kate could possibly NOT be the cold-hearted bitch everyone's making her out to be. I guess you'll just have to wait until chapter 5.
This is the story of a young man who hates his current situation in life but finds a way to turn it around and live a life of adventure and new beginnings. All characters in this story are completely original and any likeness to anyone living or dead is merely coincidental.
Well I have to say, I was surprised to see this come back, Not that I'm complaining or anything, but after a long length of inactivity, one tends to assume story abandonment etc. ^_^;
But yeah, after reskimming a few chapters to remind myself the plot of this story, I'd say I'm still charged and raring to find out whats gonna happen next still :)
So yeah, it's good to have you back, buddy :)
Thanks. I'm not going to lie, I myself had to skim it to make sure I had all the details correct. Thanks for reading and it's good to be back
Ben gets in trouble and serves his punishment with his teacher.
I gotta say, the writing styles a little rough and a bit hard to follow at times.
But overall I'd say this is an interesting story with some unique themes mixed in. Like that whole mouthwash playfulness :) That was something different.
I just think some parts could maybe be a bit more descriptive maybe? :)
Yep I agree, :) The more descriptive you can be in a scene the larger your chapters will become and scenes will become longer making it easier to cap that 500word minimum and thus make chapters/scenes longer and easilly crush that feeling that you're moving too fast in your stories :D
I'm not much of a writer myself, (technically) but a tip from GTSwriter (who is an amazing Macrophile writer, if you haven't seen his work alreayd ^_^) is that the best way to enhance a story is to add points describing 5 senses around a character, what they can see, what they can feel (how it feels), descriptin of the sounds or noises they can hear from another large/small person or object, even focusing on smell and taste can be good methods to bump up your descriptive quota and possibly give readers a greater sense of immersion ^_^
That's the general tip he gave me anyway. I do find it makes writing some paragraphs easier when focusing on some of those points, so it could be worth a shot for you if you're willing to try out some different writing styles :)
Regardless, I look forward to your next update ^_^
She took gentle care of him, and they were in love.
But she was starting to wonder just what the limits were.
Awesome chapter update mate :)
I really am enjoying this story more than many others primarilly as it is a good shrunken-man scenario story writen from the perspective of the giantess rather than the little guy :)
It's bizarre how few of those stories I am able to find ya know? ^_^
Personally I adore insertion above all other scenarios :) Not to say that other situations i.e analy, breast/foot play aren't good too. But needless to say I do enjoy the rather consistent use of that specific theme in your chapters so far mate :D
As for scenario suggestions, a bath scene wouldn't be too off topic :) plenty of options for interaction there :D
Accidental panty entrapment could also be a troublesome scenario which could come up, say for when the giantess is conversing with her boss, the little guy perched above her waistline (for variable reasons within/outside his control) is jostled from some outside force causing him to tumble down right into a sensitive spot on the giantess's person.
Of course the time and the place for it would hardly be ideal ^_^;
just some suggestions of the top of my head there mate :) Hope they're usable.
Also your thing with the description and additional words to describe body parts, I wouldn't worry so much and just pick what words work best for you, or try investigating other writer's examples for some terms or words you may not have thought to try? :)
Damn! Another hot and awesome chapter! XD I only wish it were longer, but that's probably just me being greedy XD
And the one before with the secret Cinema trip, that was a good one too :) Chapters where the two take days out to events or scenic locations could be good chapter choices too :) A day at the beach, make sand castles big enough for the little guy to tour and decorate with intracate details normally impossible for craftsmen to create without precise tools. Or visiting parks/funfairs anything fun like that could be twice as fun with a little guy onboard ^_^
In response to your confession though, I can awnser for myself anyway, that I find female masturbation incredibly sexy. Though personally I can't really understand as to why male masturbation would be as appealing to women. It doesn't surprise me that women would/could find it sexy, I just don't really see the appeal myself. is that sorta the same for you when trying to understand what guys see in female masturbation? : d
-Gotta say this is probably my most bizarre review/response yet on this site XD
After the success of Season One, the mysterious studio that runs the Shrinking Show commissions a new season with eight new contestants! One again, eight contestants arrive at the set of this secretive reality show, only learning upon arrival that they will be shrunk down bit by bit, taking part in various competitions along the way. When a contestant shrinks to 1/16th of their normal size they are eliminated--usually. Things are a bit more complicated this time around.
Season Two is longer, raunchier, and all-around better than Season One. As it is a new cast of contestants, it is its own story and you do not need to read Season One to understand what is going on, but it wouldn't hurt.
I'd kinda think that they are, mostly on the basis of 'how do they know it won't work if you don't try it?' But likewise maybe they're right and it wouldn't workout....
I just thought that maybe a couple with hundereds of thousands worth of dollars could surely afford to come up witha way to try and keep seeing each other for a little longer afterwards before calling it quits. Jerry could have found a way to keep visiting maybe, Become a supplier/delivery guy for equipment or maintenance of the flat for future seasons? Some sort of business that'd ensure potential frequent contact, I don't know. I clearly became just too attached with the chemistry built up during their fling in the 2nd season ^_^;
Alright, looking good :D
Having Carla elliminated wasn't so bad after all, hell if anything it worked out great for both her and Andy, so that was a neat conselation prize. Good for them! ^_^
Sherri making a surprise visit for Jerry is kinda sweet too, though surely it's a little cheating for him to get outside help with his stress and nerves? ;)
Not that I'll complain, I am simply loving the contestant shipping that just seems to be going on in this chapter xD
Can't wait for the finale! :D
Sherri visiting Jerry might be seen as cheating, but as we know the Shrinking Show is not the most honestly run program!
Alright, very nice end chapter there :)
I do believe that's nearly all loose ends tied up quite handilly ^_^
i'm a little bummed about Jerry and Sherri not becoming a long term item in the end. It would have been sweet if he could have used his thousands to set up shop nearby her place of work too but alas, pen-pals is still something :)
And Andy, that looky tiny fiend, real glad he got his wish there. Clearly he and Carla are the ones going home the true winners of this contest xD
Sometimes flings are just flings, and sometimes they are more. Jerry and Sherri don't think they'd be compatable outside the show, but maybe they're wrong?
Alright, I'll admit that I wasn't expecting to enjoy this chapter as much, what with the winner possibly including a giant-Dale in the mix for the obligatory sex-capade...But I have to say, the way you handled every character and the consequences of their respective actions in this last bit really made it an enjoyable read and a good way to wrap up the show :)
Seriously, the results of Dale's immunity was by far the best surprise in this chapter. Bravo sir. xD
(On a side note, incase you're unaware and wanted a heads up, you have a little typo near the end of Betty's scene, where I think you meant to write 'Tom' instead of 'Jerry' )
Thank you sir! I thought that was a fitting way to end the competition for Dale as well. And yes, sadly the story has many typos I never got to fixing.
Jerry! I'm rooting for Jerry, character wise ^_^
Though the winner doesn't get shrunken down for the final orgy (assuming it ends the same way for the last victor...) still then again, Sheri does have control over his size anyways so maybe that won't be a problem.... XD
so on that logic I guess I'm biased in wanting the winner to be Vera if not Jerry XD
It's great to see you're still live and kicking btw :)
I'm glad to be here. Anything is possible for the ending!
Dangit that means giant Dale next chapter >_>;
Ah well, gg to Vera and a good try on Jerry's part, he was such a nice guy it's so sad T_T
But he'll hopefully get his happy ending with Sherri at least, there's the silver-lining ^_^;
It's really interesting to see the divided response on the winner!
Dang this is one intense looking finale :)
I honestly can't tell who I think it might be as it could go either way thanks to Vera's short-cut ^_^
Although I'm probably still rooting for Jerry, even more so now if it means that Dale won't be immune from the final night's events etc. I was partially on Vera's side to begin with (while equally conflicted with rooting for Jerry) but the moment her assistant was revealed to be Dale, that pretty much sealed my rooting support for Jerry xD
Out of all the male contestants that'd deserve to be full sized over the others, it's definitely him. So I'm really hoping that Jerry's headstart was sufficient to give him enough of a boost to counter Vera's shortcut :D
The two of them are in about equal position at this moment so it could go either way!
Rick, a young and jaded NYC lawyer, becomes fed up with life. Things take an interesting twist though when he meets a woman with magical powers at a bar.
Damn that's an awesome chapter start mate :D
The dialogues well writen and nothing's too cliche or off-putting at all here :)