Reviewer: Atrus Signed
Date: November 29 2011
Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: The Morning Of
Wow, you really have a huge amount of this story written already! But you say it's unfinished? This is a silly question, but how much is unwritten, would you say? Although, given your "A Little Blackmail" series, I guess this is still in its early stages...
Anyway, I wanted to highlight a story on Giantess City which I'm reading at the same time as I eagerly await more tales of Julia and friends.
It's "In Fran's Hands" by Micro Ozzy. http://giantesscity.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=60&t=88981
I feel like Julia and Fran are sort of similar in that I get the impression, especially from recent chapters, that Julia really doesn't have a lot of friends, or good social skills with people her own age and size. The school nerdette having a "private hunk" at home is really intriguing.
Micro Ozzy's style is actually rather similar to yours as well. Much less words, but still... certain key phrases that are especially evocative.
The line this chapter: "As Julia reaches for me, her tongue pokes outside her mouth, not in a licking kind of way, but almost in a greedy, thoughtful way."
So good.
Please continue!
Author's Response: I'm not sure how much is unwritten. I have major plotpoints planned in my head, but I'm not sure how long those will end up being in words.