[Report This]Date: January 19 2023 5:57 AM Title: Pre-game
Hard to believe all the 5-star reviews. I think the story has some potential and some variety of good ideas are employed. Just speaking for my opinion - and I'm a lover of vore stories - but to me, the story lacks any emotional punch. And suspense buildup is minimal. Having different characters eat or squash tiny persons who are completely unknown to me doesn't really do anything for me. We should know something about the tiny's being eaten and it should be more than their looks, their name and their gender. Also, how were they invited to the party? We need to see what treachery was involved to coerce these guys to go to the party. Were any of them aware of any rumors by this particular sorority? There is so much that can be added, but it could be made into a great story. Anyway, I mean everything here as constructive criticism, not as mockery or to discourage you in any way.
[Report This]Date: November 01 2019 4:20 PM Title: Pre-game
I must admit that I was not entirely awake for that last sentence. But now that I think about it, maybe that would be good. Let's see if you would still call Fulda perfectly balanced :P
Also thx for writing a response to all of my reviews
Author's Response:
I think I'd like that, really get a chance to evaluate how well-made my creation is! Maybe she'd have mercy on her creator :P
Not a problem! It's a joy talking with my fans.
[Report This]Date: November 01 2019 3:04 PM Title: Pre-game
Great job my dude. The story definitely got me in the Halloween spirit.
And good idea with having Lana be the unaware focused character, since she doesn't seem as keen to go into the crueler side of things like everyone else.
Good luck on your next story project.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Yeah, Lana's just their sexy librarian friend who hangs out now and then, she's not really into the whole "shrink and torment people for the fun of it" thing.
Good luck on yours too!
Date: November 01 2019 9:35 AM Title: Pre-game
All these little men, and so little time for the giant ladies.
This is a good first chapter, dialogue is mostly natural and the paragraphs flow rather smoothly so you get a good introduction to the whole story.
Author's Response:
One of these days they'll get a chance to just sit down, relax, and talk with their shrunken men. They'll probably still destroy them afterward, but it'll be a fun time.
Thanks, i'm glad you enjoyed it!
[Report This]Date: October 31 2019 1:04 AM Title: Pre-game
Ooh, 8 chapters posted at once. Now I have a lot of reviewing to do. It seems this sorority still exists and people still come to their parties despite veryone just dissapearing there including investigative police officers. You would think the national guard would be at their doorstep by now. Or are they afraid of what they might find ;)
Author's Response:
They just keep disappearing because they know their lives have peked afterward and went off the grid, of course. I don't think there'll be any more interlopers for a bit, regardless of agency.