Reviewer: DrManhattan Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06 2009 10:36 PM Title: Run for my life!

It's great to see this story going again.

I really enjoy the pacing of this story. The readers are thrown right into the fray, and just keep getting hit by one development after another. It produces the feeling that I'm going along with the ride, rather than processing what's happening. Lots of fun. I like the scenarios you set up, too.

None of these girls know how to conceal a tiny, which makes a lot of sense given the odds that any of them has ever done such a thing before. Continuing with that theme, it was cool to read about Bobby's less than comfortable accomodations in Brittany's purse. Despite her caring for Bobby, her ignorance of what he is going through causes him to suffer a bit. It also shows Bobby is a class act, since he didn't bring that up when he had the chance.

The first person perspective builds suspense exceptionally well throughout the story so far. I cringe everytime somebody sees Bobby, and his interactions (and attempts to avoid interactions) with giants (Brittany being the exception, of course) adds tension to the appropriate scenes. Bobby's descriptions of both actions and appearances are unique and interesting as well.

Candy finding Bobby was probably the worst possible outcome for him based on what little we know of the girls who hunted for him. She seems just a tad bit off. Oh well, I'm sure he'll be able to console himself with the knowledge that we, the readers, will be most entertained by what is to come.

This is an exciting and fun story. Please keep up the good work.