Reviewer: DrManhattan Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2009 5:18 PM Title: The NEW escape plan

This is a pretty fun story, complete with a healthy dosage of dramatic element.  Every time it seems Bobby has found some form of salvation to cling to, you thoroughly deprive him of that hope and trap him in a worse situation.  It makes for a good rollercoaster ride.

The varying reactions of each of Bobby's three friends to finding him tiny showed the diverse personalities he hangs out with quite well.  From Kim's disbelief and anger, to Ashley's joking and whimsical nature, and even Krista's upbeat encouraging were all unique and well portrayed.

I really like how you've written Brittany.  She's wicked, but not necessarily evil.  She uses what little justification available to her in order to use the shrinking powder, but she's yet to intentionally hurt anybody.  Hell, she's even apologized to both Krista and Samantha for shrinking them.  The only one she's been truly cruel to is Bobby, and her delusional mind tells her that he deserves it.  I think it's wrong, but I can't in good conscience call that evil.

You've done a great job in establishing Bobby's sense of dread pertaining to his new size.  Reading of his exploits throughout the school, an aura of danger and disdain was carried in Bobby's thoughts and words.  His entire time in the band room sounded particularly torturous.

Another good story from you overall.