Reviews For The Big Mistake
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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: November 08 2007 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 5

I'll hold you to those last three words! Because, this story has been real good, so far. And, I'd hate to see it discontinued, for any reason.

Reviewer: Asukafan2001 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 07 2007 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 5

Another very enjoyable chapter. I am enjoying how you are really bringing some humanity into him, and making this  brittany kaplan out to be evil one.

The other thing i think you are doing well, is the pacing. The excitement has really been increasing each step of the way, building up.

The only real complaint i have, is how many people have found him, and then lost him moments later. I think the story may be better served if he is struggling to gain the attention of his friends. However, thats really up to you, and what you are doing now is working more then fine. I for one can't wait for the next chapter.

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