Reviewer: DrManhattan Signed [Report This]
Date: June 14 2009 5:36 AM Title: Last Hope

A nice resolution to this story.

Ashley asking if anyone had an interesting day yesterday was pretty funny. That seemed to fit her character quite well (based on the admittedly brief encounter we were privillaged). So carefree, so ignorant.

That was a tense concluding scene, the one with Brittany almost killing Bobby. It was going to be a difficult task making Bobby relevant in the resolution, but you pulled it off quite nicely. Kim has really good timing, by the way.

As I said before, I never really considered Brittany to be the evil sort, so I'm glad to see her come around in the end. She really did seem like a good person at heart; she was just frustrated with the ways of the world, and ended up corrupted by the amazing power granted her by the shrinking powder. I think we can all relate.

I also laughed pretty hard when Brittany told Bobby he was only human. After all he went through (and all she put him through), it was brilliant to have her make light of the "Big Mistake".

Nice final line, by the way.

Reviewer: DrManhattan Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2009 5:18 PM Title: The NEW escape plan

This is a pretty fun story, complete with a healthy dosage of dramatic element.  Every time it seems Bobby has found some form of salvation to cling to, you thoroughly deprive him of that hope and trap him in a worse situation.  It makes for a good rollercoaster ride.

The varying reactions of each of Bobby's three friends to finding him tiny showed the diverse personalities he hangs out with quite well.  From Kim's disbelief and anger, to Ashley's joking and whimsical nature, and even Krista's upbeat encouraging were all unique and well portrayed.

I really like how you've written Brittany.  She's wicked, but not necessarily evil.  She uses what little justification available to her in order to use the shrinking powder, but she's yet to intentionally hurt anybody.  Hell, she's even apologized to both Krista and Samantha for shrinking them.  The only one she's been truly cruel to is Bobby, and her delusional mind tells her that he deserves it.  I think it's wrong, but I can't in good conscience call that evil.

You've done a great job in establishing Bobby's sense of dread pertaining to his new size.  Reading of his exploits throughout the school, an aura of danger and disdain was carried in Bobby's thoughts and words.  His entire time in the band room sounded particularly torturous.

Another good story from you overall.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: June 08 2009 7:33 PM Title: The apology

Bobby might have been in the wrong, the first time around. But, Brittany jumped to the wrong conclusion, the second time around. In fact, given the cliff-hanger for this chapter, I'll bet she KNEW he hadn't been taking advantage of his size to be a peeping Tom. She just used that as an excuse to further torment him (which is probably what she had in mind, all along).

So, for my metaphorical money? She owes twice as many apologies as he does!

Reviewer: dietz Signed [Report This]
Date: November 15 2007 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 1: The mistake

I like this story a lot, please continue it ^^

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: November 08 2007 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 5

I'll hold you to those last three words! Because, this story has been real good, so far. And, I'd hate to see it discontinued, for any reason.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: November 08 2007 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 2: Getting Help

Those must have been pretty tight jeans Kim was wearing, to have such shallow pockets.

Reviewer: Asukafan2001 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 06 2007 7:14 PM Title: Chapter 4: This sucks

another good chapter, iliked the vaccuum. it was suspenseful and the injury made him seem more human, it created  abit of sympathy for him where before he was just kind of portrayed as a pig.