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Reviewer: Dolphinslash Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25 2018 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 6 Say something (part 1)

I'm really liking these characters and where you're taking them. Good stuff, can't wait to see more!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like my story! For now I am going to update it day by day although unfortunately I can not assure a specific time :( And if you allow me a question, what is your favorite character?


I hope to see you here! See you!

Reviewer: Link Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2018 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 6 Say something (part 1)

Hanna seems like a nice girl. It's too bad she gets picked on a lot by the other kids.

Unfortunately, I think some concepts are lost in translation. The dialog tags help, but it's still challenging to read and follow. I know some folks write giantess stories on language-specific boards. That might be a good idea to get more reviewers. Just a thought.

Author's Response:

For reviews do not worry! I have plenty of reviews in real life (all the people I've written / adapted stories and scripts for theater), also not find a forum or a page for stories of giantess in Spanish is quite difficult :( 

On the part of Hannah, she has not changed since she was little, still a girl who is quiet but with a good heart. Here the problem is the feeling of herd / clan. Sofia made the decision with 12 years to have to mess with Hannah and everyone decided it was the right thing to do. At the end of the day, Sofia is the lion, the king of the jungle and the words of a lion is the law.

Reviewer: SirDarkvid Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21 2018 1:22 PM Title: Chapter 1: Defcons and you

As a curiosity, all my life I have been taught and I have read that the dialogues between several people open with -, and you can not even imagine what it is costing me to open them alone "(although now after reading it I am pretty much prettier and less as if it were theater, which was what I had previously written)

Reviewer: Link Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21 2018 12:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: Defcons and you

I liked some of your phrases, e.g., smile of a lottery winner.

Phrases like that are what make foreign writers interesting to me. They're unique in the way they construct the English words into sentences.

That being said, I'd advise taking steps for more readable content. You can begin by familiarizing with dialog tags. It's probably the easist thing you can do at first to improve readability.

Writing is a lifelong process of improvement. Just starting writing can be the most exciting since the changes you make often have the biggest effect.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the support Link! (and thanks also for the link XD)

These first two chapters have been a little less worked because I was not used to write and handle the options on this page, (God, I still do not know how to put several heights in the menu)

Now that I have become accustomed more or less to how it works everything I will try to write again without using the dialogues and more like in the link that you have passed me.Thank you very much for everything and I hope this story entertains you half of what your story entertains me!

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