Date: May 21 2018 3:27 AM Title: Epilogue
Thanks for this! I loved the slow development of powers and will to exploit it!
Personally, I do not think any human could gain that kind of power and remain "gentle". Power corrupts.
Shame to see it end! I look forward to your next one!
Thanks! And I do agree: power corrupts, so it's impossible for someone to be as powerful as Laura and not to use it to do "as she sees fit"
I have some other stories in the pipeline... I hope you will like the next one as much!
Date: May 07 2018 10:28 PM Title: Prologue
I've read a couple of your other stories, most notably "Side Effects" and as per usual you do a great job delving into the psyche of Laura as she enjoys the several perks of her growth. Compared to the mental gymnastics that was done by Kelly in "Side Effects" to justify her actions, it's interesting to watch Laura who has clearly fantasized about being in this position quickly disassociate with regular people, accept that many will die, many of which by accident, etc.
Some of the problems though I have is some of the characterization suffering. Mayor Strauss for instance, was a case of needing more show and not tell. If you hadn't told me that he was trying to drive out the liberal crowd, was possibly homophobic, etc. I wouldn't have known. I think if more was done to establish the kind of vile person he was, it'd make Laura feel all the more justified that she was the one who needed to be in charge. Though it was nice touch that he practically sent the police force on a death mission to confront Laura to display his cowardly nature.
As for Laura she early is developed as a pretty opinionated person, liberal, eco-friendly, etc. It would be interesting to see more of that side of her such as when she crushed the man with the oversized SUV, rather than the whimsical abuses of her power that get a bit too repetitive at points in my opinion.
I also found Staci's death premature considering they just reunited. It would've made for an interesting dynamic if you took longer to explore how Staci responds to seeing first hand the atrocities Laura commits, or if Laura makes more of an effort to avoid killing the masses to appease Staci, or will Laura deem Staci no different from the rest of the 'tinies' and that it should be Staci's job to adapt to her not the other way around, etc.
Most interesting to me though is that I look forward later on what other type of abilities Laura will discover. Immense strength and capability of destruction are no brainers considering her size; however her uncovering that her brain is much more efficient at processing information, she can influence the emotions of others, etc. Reinforce her belief of goddesshood
First of all, thanks for the comprehensive feedback. I'm glad to meet another reader of my stories and I'm very happy to see The Plan counterposed to Side Effects. I have to say that I found myself agreeing to basically all your feedback. Let me try to provide some comments on how I see it or what I see as the reason behind some of the strengths and shortcomings of this story.
First, I still consider Side Effects as my best work so far (I think, from your comment, that you agree too?). I'm quite happy with The Plan, but even if I thought the story was good enough for posting, I also realized that the materialization of the outline I had created had some limitations that were hard to easily overcome. One of the main characteristics of The Plan is that it was written with input/inspiration. A female reader of Side Effects that had always fantasized with being a mega-giantess loved Kelly's character so much that she started providing me feedback and giving me insights on how she saw some aspects of being a giantess or how she would have acted in some situations. She is the inspiration of Laura and while I wrote the story and outlined the plot and character development, the story was very influenced by her. This ended up having the effect that I focused entirely on developing her and "forgot" about developing other characters like Strauss or Stacy properly. I could have done it, but given the way I focused the story, it was not natural.
I also acknowledge that I did not develop Laura's social activist side or the potential for her relationship with Stacy. In the first case I think it was driven by the evolution in the feedback/conversations I had with the lady that inspired the story. In the second, I decided that extending the story with a new arch (Laura's relationship with Stacy) might be counterproductive since it would have represented a change of tone. I thought it would be best to drive the story to its ending (which will happen soon) and set the grounds for a sequel (which I'm not sure at all will ever happen, since the universe I created for Laura is not that reusable and I have other stories that might work best for this).
So, while I think the story works well enough for what it is (an extended and evolutive ramage in the city novella), it's true that there was some potential in there that might now have been used as much as it could. Part of it might have been driven by the fact that in my attempt not to make Laura too similar to Kelly, I think I ended up boxing the character too much and removing part of the appeal Kelly had.
As for her extended powers, there will be plenty of it in the final chapters of the story.
Thanks again for your feedback. I would love to read your thoughts about this and the story ending!
Date: May 05 2018 9:18 PM Title: Chapter 20
What a twist at the end. Overall another solid story. I do always feel a little bit wanting more at the end of your stories. They. Never end the same, but all kind of take a hard twist somewhere. So you know something is coming just not what. Would love to see more world building and actual ruling of goddess in your stories.
Like I said another solid entry. Can't wait for your next one!
Well, I like plot twists... I guess it's one of my signatures...
As for The Plan, the story is not finished yet. There is still one more chapter and an epilogue. Not sure if it will include what you are looking for, but please let me know your thoughts once it's done.
Hope you will like my next projects too!
Date: May 05 2018 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 20
Kinda funny this story is called "the plan", im like what plan? Laura just seems like your typical dumb, horny, gts bimbo, not that its a bad thing mind you. Even before her friend died her plan was basically, "im big, your small so you listen to me and maybe I dont kill you", is there anything in that empty head of hers, lol. I like the story tho, just the title is ironic to me.
I'm glad that you are enjoying the story. The Plan refers to the aliens' plan, not so much Laura's...
Date: May 05 2018 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 20
I love this story so much! It’s great to see things from Kendra’s point of view, and I’d love to read more scenes such as that one.
Keep it up! :)
Thanks! I'm glad that you are enjoying it. Kendra's scene was interesting to write too. The Plan is coming to its conclusion, so there won't be that many more scenes like Kendra's, but it's a resource I typically use in my stories ;)
Please, keep letting me know what you think as new chapters come out!
Date: May 05 2018 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 19
Yeah, thats what you get for needlessy bullying defenceless citizens instead of wiping out the army first. You loose your love!
Now I hope that the world doens't have to pay too much for this. Especially due to what happened at the end of the chapter.
Thank you for always faithfully updating this story. I'm usually too lazy to write a review and I maybe should do it more, your story deserves it!
Reading your review I'm not sure if you are complaining about her killing innocent people or not having her priorities clear ;
I'm afraid the world will have to pay its fair share for what happened... and then a bit more. For all her talk, Laura is far from a nice person and now she is really pissed. I'm glad that you are enjoying the story and that you decided to start reviewing. It's never late! There are three more chapters coming before the story concludes, so it would be great if you could let me know what you think about them when they come out (the first one in a few minutes).
Date: April 22 2018 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 18
Very interesting chapter. This has been a fun story so far. Wonder if the end of the chapter was what I think it was lol
Thanks! I'm happy to see that you have enjoyed it. I think the end of the chapter is obvious... but we'll see in a week from now... ;)
Date: March 27 2018 10:00 AM Title: Chapter 14
Was so curious for this meeting.
In theory, Stacy seemed to be quite receptive to the idea of a 1000' tall, world ruler, lover. Wonder how is she reacting to the reality of this now. Hope she will stay on Laura's side.
Well, Laura is going to take a detour, but she will end up meeting Stacy, so you'll get your answer. Let's not forget that Stacy was supportive of the Laura that wanted to become 1000' to rule wisely over the world. The Laura she will now find has killed tens of thousands of people already, some just to satisfy herself sexually...
Date: March 05 2018 11:11 PM Title: Prologue
A page turner for sure, with the motivations for many characters laid plain to see. But that is the story's biggest strengths, and a critical weakness.
Laura's thoughts, goals and dreams are all quite apparent from the start, as is her transition from well-intentioned extremist, to extremist. With that being said, what has been said, does not need to be said again. This, in my opinion, makes the alien perspective unneccessary, and I was quite tempted to skip their parts.
Which is a shame, because they are the most interesting characters in the story. True, almost no giggity-giggity from them, but it is fun to see the interactions between the two scientists. I am particularly interested in the "fail-safe".
I also am interested in a human-driven victory, even in the face of defeat. Perhaps it's my human pride or whatever, but it does get tiring to see people act incredibly stupid, or incredibly idiotic. But, since this story seems to be stretching for a lot longer, I'm still invested in what you have planned.
So far so good. You're excellent in illustrating a scene, and it is quite easy to imagine Lauren among the denizens of the doomed city. Lauren's general character, while not likeable per say, does give her life. I look forward for what you have in store.
I wanted to thank you for the constructive criticism, letting me know the parts that you like and think that work and the ones that do not do so well. I found myself agreeing with a lot of what you said.
It's true that while Laura is not a plain character, her evolution is kind of predictable. She is certainly not likable. I had not realized (but I do now) that one of the additions to the story I thought would be original (the aliens' dialogue at the end of each chapter) was a bit redundant by the fact that Laura is easy enough to read. I guess I had Kelly (from my previous story Side Effects) in mind when I thought about adding this extra layer of interpretation, but while Laura and Kelly share a lot, I believe Kelly's inner thinking and evolution was better suited for this type of resource. I still think that the aliens work well enough, but it's true that they could have worked better in a different setup.
As for the idiotic response from the population, it is my interpretation on how masses would react if they were suddenly faced with such an awe-inspiring situation as the presence of a 1000-foot-tall young woman that immediately starts acting like she is in charge (and does not seem to mind killing thousands of them). Humans are smart, but masses tend to become less smart the greater the numbers are. It is arguable, in any case.
I hope that you will like what's coming, which will be different from what many readers might have thought at the beginning of the story precisely because of the transition you described so well as "from well-intentioned extremist to extremist". I had not thought on this definition, but it's very fitting, I think.
I hope that you will continue letting me know what you think.
Date: March 05 2018 3:54 AM Title: Prologue
This story is amazing so far! You’re one of the the few writers who manages to get me hooked to giantess stories, props for that :)
Thanks! I'm glad that you are enjoying it. So, do you normally like something else than giantesses?
Date: March 03 2018 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 11
This story is going in an interesting direction. With all this buildup, I'm hoping to eventually get a moment where Laura's hypocrasy/consequences of her actions produce a result opposite of what she wanted or come back to haunt her somehow. That possible moment of clarity when a self rightous person realizes they've screwed up is just so irresistable to me.
On the other hand, I'm loving the imagery on how she affects the city and the people with her gigantic body.
Thanks! I like how you describe Laura's character/attitude. There's definitely hypocrisy and a false self-righteousness in how she interacts with the city and its people. There will be moments for reflection on this, although we should not forget that people tend to display mental self-defense mechanisms in front of situations they cannot control. I hope the process will be interesting enough!
I'm happy that you like the descriptions. I hope that you will enjoy what's coming in this story.
Date: February 10 2018 9:34 AM Title: Chapter 8
Yet again, this story is amazing!! I’m still waiting on when Laura starts to get hungry ;)
Always looking forward to the next chapter!
Thank you! It's encouraging to read this type of feedback! I hope that you will enjoy what's comic as much if not more. Pleae, keep letting me know what you think!
Date: January 27 2018 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 6
Ooh, interesting. Laura sure seems to be taking to her new role well, and I can't help but enjoy it. Solid chapter as usual, mate.
Thanks! Laura was especially prepared to take her new role, since she had been fantasizing on it for a long time. Still, one thing is fantasizing and the other is exercising, of course. I'm glad that you keep enjoying the story. Hopefully it will continue being like this :)
Date: January 27 2018 9:00 AM Title: Chapter 6
Love so much your awareness of size difference. One addition that I enjoyed a lot was having super strength even on top of an already natural power due to the size.
One thing I can't help but to be curious. If Laura's girlfriend/lover Stacy will return to the story. Wonder how will both will react to each other.
Stacy will be back in the story, although it will still be a long while before she reappears.
Thanks for the kind words on the story and my ability to reflect the size difference. I'm glad that you like it:)
I hope that you'll enjoy what's coming. Please, keep letting me know what you think of the new chapters!
Date: January 23 2018 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 5
I'm really liking this story and Laura's character in general. I hope she and her girlfriend meet up somehow. The scenes that are done from a tiny's perspective are great.
Her walking in the ankle deep river was great I just kinda wish you had thrown in how somebody fishing on the bank or just standing near it could have been severely jostled by the waves she created. However, her playing with the boats/yachts was excellent. Especially her interaction with Margot. I liked how you described her toes sticking up several yards above the water.
I honestly don't know how to take the aliens discussing her progress at the ends. I am enjoying them simplifying things though. But just to get it straight about them, them have four arms and I think all females or predominantly female. When I hear of four arms I immediately think of Goro from Mortal Kombat.
At any rate, fantastic story and I can't wait to see what happens next with Laura or the bridge.
PS has it only been a couple hours since she grew or less?
I'm happy to see that you are enjoying the story and that you seem to like Laura's scale and how I describe it.
Your suggestion on the fact that I could have added the perspective of a tiny in the riverbank is excellent. Wish I had had it in the first place! I can always add it after the fact in case I end up doing a polished version of the story, I guess!
The aliens are four arms but not related to Goro/Kintaro/Sheeva. They should look a bit more refined. And it's true that they are predominantly female (in their race, men are just for breeding, almost like with bees, even if they are not a hive-mind race). Their purpose is, as you mention, to simplify and explain Laura's actions from an external perspective.
I hope that you will enjoy what's coming. Please, keep letting me know what you think.
BTW, it has been a short time since she grew, probably in the neighborhood of a couple hours, as you estimate. The "good" thing about Laura is that she had always dreamed about this, so while the story can discuss her adaptation period, it's also easy to make it much faster than for a woman that had never expected to see herself a thousand foot tall. This is part of what makes writing Laura fun!
Date: January 20 2018 5:26 PM Title: Chapter 5
Hmm, interesting. There is a great mix of slight erotica and actual storytelling that makes it so darn attractive. Great job on this chapter too!
Thanks! I'm glad that you are enjoying it. To me, there needs to be a story that allows me to describe the giantess action, rather than just a concatenation of cut scenes. As you'll see, the story in The Plan will keep escalating, so Laura's actions will do too ;)
I hope that you will enjoy what's coming!
Date: January 20 2018 1:34 PM Title: Chapter 5
Man, this story is one of the most well written stories on here! I’m loving Laura’s slow shift into a true goddess, with her more and more cruel views towards human life. I can’t wait til she starts to get hungry and realizes she’s surrounded by people sized pieces of meat 😉 can’t wait for the next chapter!
Thanks! I'm glad that you are enjoying it so much. The Plan will be a long story, precisely to be able to describe Laura's evolution slowly, as well as have her escalate as she goes. I hope that you will like what's coming. Please, keep letting me know what you think!
Date: January 13 2018 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 4
Another great chapter as always! Her taking to her new goddess powers is quite the scene, isn't it? I devoutly await the next installment!
Thanks! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Yes, Laura will gradually escalate things, taking more and more on her new possibilities while trying to rationalize that what she is doing is fine and aligned with her objectives. I hope that the plot development will flow smoothly ;)
Next installment will be available next week. Things will continue progressing this way. Let me know what you think once you read it!