[Report This]Date: May 21 2018 4:38 AM Title: MAJOR/minor SPECIAL: Arrival and Rival
Thank you for adding another chapter. The Lindsey vs. Sabrina is quite funny I think.
And it also seems that there is finally something that got Izzy scared: Shannon. And thats also understandable, there is probably nothing that can really stop Shannon, she'll probably barge right through the average safety room wall or car where a minor would hide from her in case of anger. Luckily she seems really calm and Izzy should really get to know her and it will be ok.
Also where did Mei go?
Author's Response:
Wher is Mei? That's a good question. Like I mentioned there should be a chapter before this one. I just haven't written it yet, but I was sitting on the meat of thes chapter for weeks. Here's some context though. Even though Izzy ran into Mei at the airport Mei was not invited to New Orleans. On the off chance Mei is in New Orleans it's for her own seperate reasons and she wouldn't be staying at Alejandro's. So there's no justifiable reason for her to be there. This is Mei though. She has a habit of showing up to places she's not expected to be. Like a creepy stalker!
[Report This]Date: May 19 2018 11:28 PM Title: MAJOR/minor SPECIAL: Arrival and Rival
Another great chapter !
In my mind, Alejandro's house wasn't that big, but then again, I guess that Shannon wouldn't really let her lover live in a average house, I guess. Also, she was the one teaching 'Rando how to swim in Dance with Fire... but I guess it can also be that she taught him anew, because he didn't swam more than one or two times at fourteen :p !
Also, great quips between Lindsey and Sabrina! And is it me or Lisa is somehow interested in the Little Lind? At least, i got the impression that she was... or she just wanted to protect her bestie from the unwanted attention of the MAJORS around.
Izzy and Alejandro... so much sexual tension in the air! What will happen? How will Mei react? When will Alejandro drop his prosthesis at home! COme on man, you're better without it, plus you look more vulnerable and cute.
Finally, Shannon. Stop hijacking peoples' plans to have an appartement or a hotel, come on! I know you want to hook up the two main minors together, if only to prove to Alejandro that you're a better fit (or perhaps that he fit better in you, eh?) than Izzellah, but come on! Plus, the excuse was really lousy, you should have done better! Plus you're still making Izzy really afraid, work on that will you ?
Author's Response:
Oh! Shannon did teach him how to swim! Well I can fix that in a few lines. Makes Lindsey a slightly bigger liar but it's fine! Does Alejandro lose his prosthesis at home? When does he feel comfortable without it? I mean I tried to imply he was out with Shannon buying up Izzy's reservation. All Shannon's idea by the way! Then they snuck in when they realized everyone was swimming to change into swimsuits.
Lisa's not really crushing on Lindsey because she's more into guys, she's just being spoiled again by taking the nicest room and maybe she senses the rivalry between of two teen rivals! But I leave Lisa open to anything! Lindsey definitely noticed Lisa but is still crushing pretty hard on Izzy!
Oh Izzy and Al! Will it ever work for them!? That would break Lindsey's heart. Oh so much drama! Where is Shannon on all this?! Is she threatened by Izzy? Excited? She is a MAJOR big enough for two, but Izzy's terrified of her!! Also two minors Shannon? That's selfish!
Well Izzy has time to work things out with Shannon. That is if she can even move or speak when Ms. Matthewson's around. It's your fault. You made her grow even bigger! The shock of that alone is making Izzy question this whole thing.
But you'll have to wait. I'm actually leaving today and it will be awhile before I'm up to writing again. I will go correct that swimming part a bit. Thanks for the review. Looking forward to what you do with the characters!