[Report This]Date: August 01 2018 9:09 PM Title: Deicide
I thought I had already posted a review, but it appears to have errored. Wow, what an unexpectedly quick resolution. I saw that there's a final chapter to go so now is as good a time as any to congratulate you on a story well told! I love reading your work, so thanks for writing this.
I didn't expect our intrepid heroes to prevail, but perhaps I should have. After all, it's a rare day when Fulda is on the losing side. She even let Akane be the biggest, so gracious of her. In fact, I think I like this new, fit Fulda more than any other, long may she reign!
Author's Response:
I could have drawn the climax out longer, but I didn't see much need. Plus, with the POV character's recurring anxiety that Gina was going to dispose of him "any day now," it followed that she would want to celebrate her sister coming home by smashing some special tinies with her, and Fulda would have become rapidly less sympathetic if she let her sister keep tormening him while she had the power to stop it. So I moved it up to "I'm going to get you out of here right now" rather than "I'm going to wait until it feels good for me." There probably could have been a chapter with the stuff I montaged at the start of this one but it would have been incredibly dialogue-heavy, with Roni getting involved and brushed off, but now it'll also be a nice, round 20 chapters, and I cut out a lot of exposition.
Thank you for being a consistent reader! If you like my stuff, please don't hesitte to leave a review on it, or even send me an e-mail with your thoughts (the e-mail I used for this site actually goes to an address I check regularly). And I'll talk about it more when I post the final chapter, but that won't be the last we've seen of Fulda, Akane, or even Gina.
[Report This]Date: July 31 2018 6:36 PM Title: Deicide
I really Gina would've pulled that off, nice sweve.
Author's Response:
Never underestimate the power of perseverence, or for a villain to get sidetracked and undone during the finale.