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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: November 21 2017 9:49 PM Title: Giving some ass istance.

Good news and bad news.

The former? You posted five very riveting chapters. Ones I couldn't bear to stop reading even long enough to leave individual reviews!

The latter? You have to do some massive re-editing in chapters 2, 3, and 4. By that I mean, space the dialogue and the narrative text much farther apart for better legibility.

Author's Response:

Thank you.  I went back through and tried to fix some things.  

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