Date: November 13 2017 5:35 PM Title: The New Girl
Completey understood. I saw your previous reponse and completely respect it. In that case, would it be possible to have her wear flip flops, where the main character ends up hiding under one of her nail polished toenails. Just and idea.
Date: November 12 2017 11:00 PM Title: Early bird catches the worm (between its feet)
Would it be possible to add some unaware vore? That would be awesome! Thanks!
Author's Response: Sorry, I'm not sure if I mentioned it earlier, but just mouth play is the closest you're gonna get to any vore. It's not my thing at all and I don't enjoy writing about it, which to me would ruin that chapters whole quality.
Date: November 12 2017 9:20 PM Title: Early bird catches the worm (between its feet)
I just read all 5 chapters. At first, I thought it was kinda confusing with all those characters you introduced in the beginning. I thought Joe was going to have some "wild ride" with all of them right there.
Looks like things settled down with Anna once Joe hooked onto her. Once she got home, in my opinion is where the real fun begins. She is in complete control and pretty much nothing can stop her. She can strip naked at any moment and give her tiny observer a show of his dreams.
I also like the choices that you allow us readers to make. I missed the first few, but I'm glad I'm here for this one, becuase it got my attention. Where should Joe end up on Anna's panties...? That's a hot question. Panties are my favorite accessory of a girl and for Joe to be stuck there would be awesome. I'm rooting for the crotch position, since I believe it's the most intimate part of Anna. For Joe to be trapped in the front of her panties while she works her legs down there, I think Joe will sleep well tonight. (Maybe in her panties.)
I was tempted to ask if Anna's mom might show up, but I did some research and that's not your thing. Still, I do love the choices you provided for us, very sexy. Ass and crotch are good. Crotch is the easy choice for me since it's my dream body part.
Let's talk about the unaware part. Unaware is always good. Especially at the beginning of stories, usually before they get "discovered." However, I always been a fan of aware scenes becuase I like to see how a giantess treats her little guy. If Anna was aware of Joe in her panties, it would lead me to think that she wants to keep him down there and that is just sexy.
It's a shame we don't have much in common. I like your writing style and enjoy reading this story. At least we both love some panties and I think I will enjoy the next chapter regardless of which choice wins.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I don't think we have little in common, I've just only had 5 chapters so far. Give me a few, and a few stuff you mentioned (might) make it into the story!
Date: November 12 2017 5:06 PM Title: The New Girl
I'm loving the unaware aspect; I really hope it continues that way for a bit. Your attention to detail is superb, and I love the story so far. For your first story, this is remarkable. I'm hoping that Joe ends up in the back of her panties, and that things don't go very smoothly. Looking forward to seeing where you go with this. :) Good luck.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! Not technically my first story as I've deleted a few I didn't like after a few chapters, but still......!!
Date: November 06 2017 5:37 PM Title: The New Girl
Now the action's begun! A fun chapter, and I'm looking forward to more.
As what what I'm voiting for, I hope he hides in a shoe or a sock or something of the sort. And of course that it remains unaware, as that is my favorite genre.
Keep up the good work my man.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Wasn't expecting to enjoy writing that chapter as much as I did! Maybe it'll make a comeback later on.....
Date: November 06 2017 4:51 PM Title: The New Girl
I forgot to give it a rating last time! >.<
That was a great chapter. I look forward to seeing where the story goes.
As for where he jumps? Hrm.. Trying to think logically, what would be around and why he would go there.
If he's on the floor, coughed out, she might trash him. Then he's never gonna get saved. The bag was a bad idea last time. You know she would put her shoes back on.. Hrm.
I think if it were me, I'd prolly wanna stick close to her without putting myself in immediate danger. Maybe climb to the top of a sock and tuck myself in and hold on. Ride it out til she gets home, maybe, and then climb a desk or something, write a note. Or try to wait til she's asleep, pull at an eyelash, etc etc.
Rambling here. Anyways, plenty of opportunities for things to go awry. I mean, just because you have a plan, doesn't mean you'll pull it off. Besides, some people tend to fidget when they study. >.>
Hope to see more ideas and reviews from other commenters. Keep on doing you.
Author's Response: I do like to think logically, but this isn't my decision so be as creative in these situations as you want. A teenage girl's bedroom floor could have ANYTHING and EVERYTHING on it. The sock/foot idea does seem to be popular at the moment so we'll see.......
Date: November 03 2017 6:41 PM Title: The New Girl
Loving it so far.
I really like the unaware stuff too.
As for things I'd like to see? I really like the close calls. The parts where "Oh my god, she noticed me, hey!" only she didn't at all and things get worse. I like a smidgeon of hope, then a bombardment of not-quite-hopelessness. Close calls and the like.
Also, however you could work it in, a huuuge fan of soft vore. No crunch, no gore, no ending a good story prematurely, but just enough mix of pleasure, pain and fear to be exciting.
Author's Response: No need to worry about the story being completed any time soon, much more to come!
Date: November 03 2017 2:35 AM Title: The New Girl
i'd like to see the hero help out anna with her homework... by being her stress toy. the chapter would involve joe in her bag being grabbed in her tight fist and squeezed, used in every way by her hand while she studies. she might also by one of those girls that rubs stuff, sucks on and gently chews things with her mouth when she is focusing.
what kind of unaware situations or locations are your favourite because i'm full of suggestions.
Author's Response: Personality, I'll take anything related to either mouth, feet, ass, and breasts. Nothing too dirty.... Yet
Date: November 02 2017 7:19 PM Title: The favour
Ch. 1: I couldn't comment after the first chapter, so I decided to do it here and now. I didn't notice any gramatical errors, and the story seems to be well founded.
Ch. 2: You have really gotten into the action quickly... You've got me wondering how he is going to handle two girls, being the way he is? Or even if he is going to have the choice?
Date: October 25 2017 5:46 PM Title: The favour
A nerdy blonde girl, huh? That lets out Peyton. But, a killer headache and a matching pain in his (presumably left) arm? Holmesian logic leads me to deduce...an injection of some kind of super-scientific chemical substance!
Author's Response: We'll see.......
Date: October 21 2017 11:29 PM Title: The New Girl
Intriguing start! I'm guessing that Lia and Galina are brunettes?
Author's Response: Lucky Guess! Yeah I left some details like that out just because I didn't want it to be too detailed and feel like some sort of characteristics file. They will be added into the next few chapters for those who like a detailed character profile.
Date: October 21 2017 9:42 PM Title: The New Girl
I really did enjoy it. My only request is if you could possibly add some unaware vore? Many stories as of lately have been without that, and I truly think with your nice writing style you could really make that flow well.
Author's Response: There won't be any vore I'm afraid as it is not a person favourite of mine. I hope that a bit of mouth play and a lot of unaware will make up for this! Sorry but also thanks for commenting!