Date: October 12 2017 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
I loved this so much. I'm a sucker for basically every element involved here, so this almost felt tailored to me, which is really rare.
Alana is an awesome character. She had a form of kindness not usually seen in stories within fantasy settings, which is appreciated.
Thanks, glad you liked it.
Date: October 12 2017 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is an EXCELLENT short story, probably one of my favorites in that regard. I got a really good sense of the characters in such a short time including the central character Alana. She's a nice person but not afraid to get her hands dirty for her own sake, I wonder if there are other ways to support her lifestyle that don't involve hurting people?
There was even a bit of world building here, I got a sense for the world and the race relations of it and again in such a short story! I hope you revisit these characters or this world again!
Date: October 12 2017 4:44 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this was incredibly hot and I love the fantasy setting. Great stuff, very well done!
I notice that the redhead was named Sonia. Was that a Red Sonja reference or just coincidence?
Oh, that was a coincidence actually. She's named after Berserk actually. Just needed a name.
Date: October 12 2017 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great stuff here. The action and descriptions are fun and it’s always pleasant to see consistency in the characters where the end doesn’t turn into a surprise torture fest. Nice variety of activity packed into a relatively short span.
That means a lot coming from you, thanks.