Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: January 04 2018 7:14 AM Title: Chapter 8: MAJOR/perspective

It really felt good to see a character doing research in one of these stories.  So many characters just wander into the world like ...like...”Hi.  I saw the sign out front.  The one that said Serial Killer’s Convention.  I just thought I’d come in here and see what you folks are all about.”

Knowledge is power and it’s great to see Izzy getting some.  Yes, you did a good job of showing how frustrating the internet can be, but she’s actually trying to overcome the conspiracy of silence.  At some point she might look some stupid biggies in the eyes and say “those who don’t learn from the past are condemned to repeat it.  So thanks for making sure this generation knows nothing about the dark age...be looking forward to see how that turns out.”

I gotta say, the Sabby saving kids thing, it seems a little like you’re trying to force us to like her.  She’s really not that great, pretty good for a biggie of this world, but not that great.  The tier 3 is at least trying, but they still all suck.  Except for dad.

Great to see Izzy and dad having a moment.  The have such great chemistry.  Even if dad comes off as a dummy lots of the time.  Izzy should definitely get her mom's gun.

The halfsie’s mom...hahahahahaha...that was awesome.  Panic attack!

Thank you so much for keeping at Izzy’s story.  Great stuff.

Peace and Happy New Year

pix

Author's Response:

Well I just thought it was about time Izzellah tried to be involved in her own agency. I think it's just a result of the slower paced nature of my story. It's only eight chapters deep and it' barely been a week. Now that Izzy at least has an idea (even based off secondhand information) I imagins she'll be looking at NAJORS very differently. 

I mean...I'm not gonna lie. I do want people to like Sabrina. In my mind she's Izzellah's first real friend good or bad. She still has a long way to go and I think I've been pretty good in showing Izzellah has little romantic interest in Sabrina. She's more like an annoying little sister *laughs at own inside joke* . The whole saving thing was just a fun opportunity to show MAJOR strength and describe what happened. It may also setup some conflict for Izzy later. It may seem like it sometimes but Izzy's not the only minor in town and displays of strength and protection really get the little buggers going! Sabrina's a hot ticket item. Oh! And will be seeing trash tier 3 again.

Ignacio's an idiot. He was absent the day MAJORS got their superior minds! I mean!....uuuhhhhh dammit! ...He's trying his best *shrugs*....Seriously his own minor daughter has more power in the house than he does and is arguably smarter in most situations from like a common sense standpoint at least. Pray he doesn't die in a polar bear related accident. MAJORS do dumb things to show off.

Did I mention Ignacio's irresponsible? Without people like Linda in this world minors would be extinct.

Happy however many days into the new year you are when you read this! That goes for everyone reading this response! I see you all! ö_ö

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2017 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 8: MAJOR/perspective

Another awesome chapter ! I can't wait to meet Randalf and his wife, it would be kind of cool to have their vision of how an actual functional couple works between MAJORS and minors. Plus he looks like an awesome character and so does his wife. A MAJOR actually supporting her minor's mate aspirations would be quite interesting, and her experience could make for a great addition. And her age also means that she's bound to know so much about history, first hand... I want to learn more about her !

That musclehead and his girlfriend are sooo annoying... I love it ! It was a damn good piece of propaganda for MAJORS, but hey, at least it's mostly harmless for minors, so... Also, Damn, Sabrina is a lot more stronger than I thought she was. It makes me a litte afraid of what Shannon could do... Well, snaping an arm as if it was nothing is probably already some crazy shit, considering how tough MAJORS are. great use of this character ^^

Poor Ignacio can't catch a breath. Just talking about the Dark Age really hurt him, he clearly care about his daughter. He may not be the most reliable guy out there, but I don't think that Izzy would trade him for any other parent... and not Lisa's mom, that's for sure. For fuck sake, what's the deal with the Watermeine, they're clearly overprotective. threatening to call the cops on Iggy ? That's not how you win Izzy's affection, Madame !

But damn it, now I want to see how Alejandro and Lindsey would fare at Winton High ! I may do a special on that, one day. Operative word being may :p

PS : I shouldn't tell you that, but you may want to follow's Dinner-Kun Deviantart gallery in the coming days/weeks :p

Author's Response:

Randalf and Summer will probably show up briefly since Izzellah made it one of her goals, but they probably won't be focused on. I like adding characters to make the world feel lived in but I also just try to focus on a core few to not overwhelm people. I wouldn't blame people for forgetting most of the names. Only the important ones matter

MAJORS are pretty strong. There's a reason for that you may be able to infer. That being said adrenaline is still a thing. I doubt Sabrina could mimic that feat of strength at will. Shannon?! Who knows? She's terrifying!

Linda Watermiene is just an average concerned MAJOR parent. She's done nothing wrong. Ignacio is a negligent father who should be reported to minor protection services! 

Thanks for the comment. Alejandro and Lindsey at school? I'd read it!