Date: October 21 2017 3:41 PM Title: 21: Dropped Soap
Not how I imagined Max getting back to Dianne, but I guess it works out, since now she has him in her clutches.
I think Dianne would be too curious to know what's in her butt so she would likely go the bathroom in private and check it out. Then she ties Max much tighter than when she tied him before the workout. Last time, only the yoga pants were holding him. I think another layer of tight underwear would keep him with her. In addition, she could tie him up again.
Basically, I expect some improvements to how Dianne handles Max since she can lose him so easily and she already lost one boy. She knows she can't lose another. Better keep him tightly secured to her at all times. :)
This soap scene wasn't as strong as last chapter and I think that was becuase of it being only one other character who felt like a stranger. However, Dianne saved the moment by landing on that bar of soap.
I never knew there were so many ways Dianne could interact with Max even though it's just simple daily activities. The way she treats him is just amazing. Love it when she gains pleasure from Max.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: October 13 2017 8:16 PM Title: 20: Sharing Soap
I wonder how Dianne realized that Max was missing. She seemed pretty satisfied with that piece of thread. Maybe it slipped out and she checked on herself.
I love how Dianne didn't want anyone to help her find Max. The earring part was funny. Clever how she played that off. In addition, by wanting no one to help her shows how determined Dianne wants Max to herself and that's the perfect thinking that I want Dianne to have. Just her and Max. Bliss.
Max getting a good laugh at Dianne. He kinda needed to have some humor once in a while. Then again, I bet he is happy that she is desperate to have him back. Shows that she has not forgetting him. Imagine thinking that a string satisfied Dianne better than you. That would make me a little mad. Max must feel good knowing that Dianne was missing out on his presence.
Great descriptions of Max trying to escape Zoey. Her tight walls making it difficult and kept him inside as long as possible.
As soon as Zoey mentioned the soap, I knew it was a classic shower scene. One thing that surprised me was how many women got to use the soap, and it's not even over for Max! There could be more women/girls next chapter! Interesting that he was embedded into the soap so they wouldn't even feel him. I wonder if they ever saw him though.
Who washes their genitals first with soap? I thought the face is first. Maybe Zoey is still learning. I bet Max was thinking "maybe I can alert Zoey at her face", but then Zoey goes straight for her pussy. Lol.
Lucky Max, got intimate with Dianne and now his sexy teacher. This guy gets so much action and I am jealous. Probably going to be used by all the ladies as soap and Dianne will use it last and find Max on it. Imagine, Dianne using the soap and when she is done, she finally realizes that Max was on the soap the whole time. Dianne might also give Max a questionable look, imagining what just went through. Well, that's how I would imagine it.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: October 13 2017 5:23 PM Title: 20: Sharing Soap
Creative use of the soap.
Wished there was more time with the teacher.
Shy girl could be interesting.
Maybe Dianne will use the soap after they are all done.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: October 08 2017 10:53 AM Title: 1: The Beginning
Yeah go back to Dianne. She is WAY better. I want more Dianne booty 😛🍑. Also your balance of FM/m is perfect!!!!
Thank you for your awesome review! The story will be going back to Dianne and I hope you like the booty to come :)
Date: October 08 2017 3:45 AM Title: 19: Unaware Traveler
Zoey seems just like all the other girls in the beginning of the story. They are all alright. Nothing spectacular like Dianne the goddess.
Zoeys age wasn't a big deal for me, but it did feel weird for Max to end up in her pussy and she doesn't even realize it lol. I thought she would be super sensitive since her hole is tight and is young so her brain responds to sensations better.
In addition, Max unloading in Zoey. Does that count toward sex, a tiny and a giantess? Well, I'm sure it counts for Max, but does it count for Zoey since Max was barely even there to her? Also, it feels kinda awkward that Max kinda got turned on by Zoey. Sure, she may be pretty, but I think if that was me, my mind would be messed up if I realized I was in a 12 yr old pussy. If this happened with Dianne, I would melt and evaporate to heaven. Such an erotic chapter, but I'm not sure if it was a good choice to have this girl get the sex scene.
Then again, I didn't pick her, so maybe the other readers may enjoy this scene. It was ok for me, I'm still excited to get back to Dianne. If I was her pet.... it would be too good to be true.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
I did find the chapter a little strange but I knew the other readers wanted something like this so I added it.
Zoey is new to feelings down there so she is sensitive but also unaware to what its supposed to feel like. I haven't said she feels Max down there but she does, she just thinks its a feeling you have after masturbating.
Also the age does bother Max but not as much as you are thinking, Max is only 4 years older, and just turned 16, so really only 3 years difference. He finds it weird and bad but not enough to turn his perverted mind away.
Hopefully the next chapter will be better! :)
Date: October 07 2017 9:44 PM Title: 19: Unaware Traveler
Another well written chapter. Not a huge fan of the Zoey stuff because of her age tbh, but more people asked for it than didn't. I wouldn't mind Max meeting the older sister she mentioned though ;) Any way, can't wait for the next one
Sorry you didn't like it, was hoping for a better review but thanks anyway for leaving a comment.
Date: October 02 2017 6:23 PM Title: 1: The Beginning
I am guessing that he is going to have an arquard conversation with Zoey.
I thought about doing that but decided to make it an unaware scene! Thank you for your comment and hopefully you continue following the story and writing reviews! :)
Date: October 01 2017 6:37 PM Title: 18: Zoey
This chapter wasn't that bad as I thought. I just blocked out all detail of her age and imagined her as a sexy workout girl and it worked.
Hmm. A tear. I was wondering how Max would be free and also have Dianne not notice. Her pussy was ready to eat anything and that ball of thread was an interesting susbstitute.
That's so hot. Doing the splits, with all her weight focused on her pussy and that is all pressing Max into her. Not to mention that Max was facing her that time which makes it super sexy.
I like the frequent uploads. It helps me believe that Max's reunion with Dianne is closer than I think. Hopefully going to be sooner than 2 weeks.
Yeah, Zoey seems like a fun girl. Not sure how sexual her, but so far it's interesting.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
I'm glad you aren't hating the story with the switch of characters! I thought the way Max slips out was quite clever and I'm glad you liked the splits scene, I added that and him turning around just for you! I was pretty busy the last few days but I managed to get another chapter in today. Hopefully this chapter is pretty decent and I hope you continue supporting the story :)
Date: September 29 2017 10:46 AM Title: 15: Goodnight Max
I actually loved how this turned out. Both how she manovered him into her husband and how the husband turned the tables on her.
Thank you for the great feedback and I'm glad you loved it :)
Date: September 28 2017 11:53 PM Title: 17: Off to Work
Wow. Where did all these reviews come from? And why is everyone into the 12 year old? I had to check if people didn't have alternate accounts just to make sure.
My pick would be to stay with Dianne becuase all the other choices have a word or two that are turn offs for me.
First girl is 12. Second mom is a "bigger" lady. 3rd woman is buff. The teacher has "big librarian glasses". The next girl sounds like a bully. The last girl was shy.
Most of these descriptions seemed kinda negative and for the 12 year old, you included "tight bright clothing" which makes us think of those sexy gym girls and then the "kind innocent smile" which gives me a schoolgirl vibe. I think that's why people chose her.
If Dianne wasn't a choice, I would go with the teacher, but why is her name Mrs. Little. If the name was sexier, that could've helped.
I was expecting some tempting choices and would have juggle the Dianne option, but this time it was clear to choose Diane.
Back to the chapter:
The dialogue was 11/10! I loved it. The way Dianne was teasing Max and wishing she could keep him forever was perfect! Also the way she asked about his sleep was great! It sounded like she was going to put him in there for future sleep sessions.
I'm glad she kept the restraints on him and also placed him in her yoga pants. At first, I was kinda disappointed about the lack of panties. I thought panties would make it a more snug fit, but I guess the yoga pants are tight enough and since he was tied to it, it was good.
"Nope, you're going to stay with me". I love the authority Dianne has. So sexy.
The one thing that I would've changed if I was writing it was to make Max face her crotch instead of facing her yoga pants. That way he is forced into those lucious lips of hers and his face would be kissed all day by them. In addition, he would never be able to see these other women so that would have been a bonus, haha! If I was Dianne, I would make Max think only of me and not of the other girls.
("Comfortable? This is going to be fun. You're like a tasty treat dangling in front of my hungry pussy. You fit perfectly, all cozy and snug up against my lips. Mhmm I just want to keep you there forever.” Dianne said while checking herself out.) This was my favorite sequence in the entire chapter. Loved that first line about being tasty for her hungry pussy. Dianne, you are naughty and I like that.
Max must have a nice view of her toned legs from that angle. When Dianne is driving, I bet she loves the vibration of the engine while Max is vibrating within her lips. Probably why he got wedged up in there too. I agree, I would give up my life to be in Max's position too. Dianne is such a goddess. I would love to be her sex toy forever.
My pick is still Dianne. Since I think we all know what the next chapter or two will be about, I guess I can't wait for the chapter after that. Darn, 3 weeks to wait. Well, maybe the 12 year old won't be so bad.
I can't wait for the next chapter (with Dianne!)
Lol I guess I have many readers just none that actively comments (besides yourself). But I have to keep in mind that there are many readers that I want to write for. I will go back to Dianne and I know you are a big fan of her so I'm planning on keeping her as a big part of the story. However, I need to explore and introduce new characters and new obstacles for Max.
I purposely added negative traits for each one because I dont want to have a perfect character and I wanted to see what the readers were into. Apparently its young girls, but thats okay. I'll write to this and try to make it good. I apologize in advance if its not your thing, I'll try to write it quicker so I can get you back to Dianne. But also remember Amy hasn't seen her brother in a couple days so eventually something will have to happen... Thats what the whole story was about until Dianne lol
I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter and liked Dianne's dialogue so much! I will try to keep that up with her. The young girl may not say stuff like that but I'll make it up to you in later chapters with stuff like my last chapter!
Thanks for the review and I hope you continue enjoying the story!
Date: September 28 2017 6:24 PM Title: 17: Off to Work
Unaware/aware with twelve year. Uses him as a doll and the mother ends up using him as a sex toy thinking he is a action figure. That should be 2/3 chapters. Love the story though glad we are out of the sex
Max is too small to be mistaken as in action figure but I will try to write a great unaware with the girl! Thanks for the review!
Date: September 28 2017 12:20 PM Title: 17: Off to Work
First off, love the story. Second, I agree with the past two comments for 12 year old pigtails girl. Personally I think it would be great to see both unaware and aware action with her, but you do what feels right to you. Lastly, will the story be returning to Amy and Steph? I mean that is kind of what the title mainly refers to...
I'm glad you love the story! And thank you for the great review :)
The 12 year old girl won the vote so I'll be starting that chapter today. And as for Amy... The story was supposed to go back to her but all my readers loved Dianne too much so I kept him with her. Amy is still in the story tho so Max will eventually return. Just haven't decided how or when...
But I hope you keep reading and enjoying the story!!
Date: September 28 2017 11:53 AM Title: 17: Off to Work
I say the 12 year old girl wearing tight bright clothing, with a pigtail and a kind innocent smile, though I also say it should be an unaware arc the entire time with her.
The 12 year old girl won the vote of the readers and I agree with it being unaware. Thank you for your comment and I hope you enjoy the next chapters and leave a rating :)
Date: September 22 2017 9:08 PM Title: 16: Born Again
Hmm. This chapter felt the shortest to me. Maybe it was becuase it was kind of a blur to me, or maybe it was becuase you wrote it out so smoothly that it was easy to read. Either way, it left me wanting more.
I was thinking this unbirth stuff was weird and thought it was real until Amy showed up. She was the one who made me realize was a dream. It was out of character to be with Dianne like that seeing her brother being born and agreeing to Dianne keeping a sex slave and all that.
How tf do you dream about a birth? Really Max? Just because you are in a vagina, you think about birth. Then he goes back in for sex. Crazy turnaround, but I thought it was funny.
Once again, loving the dialogue of Dianne thinking about keeping Max as "a living sex toy." Man, that sounds hot every time.
I admit, this is the funniest chapter so far becuase of how strange it is. Then Max is like "you are no queen, I'm in control, blah blah blah" and then he dives into her and all she could do was moan.
One more thing, Max is all tied up and he was able to come? Wait...did he use her vaginal walls to rub it out? Ok, that's creative.
We learn that Max likes Dianne, but he wants control. In reality though, Dianne is in control and I love it when she uses him against his will than Max choosing it himself.
Next week is Dianne's fitness/yoga job. Ooh, this is good. Imagine Dianne putting Max in her cleavage as she jumps up and down. I'm not exactly a boob guy, but I bet other people might like soemthing like that.
What I want, well I think that's predictable: Dianne then puts Max in her panties, not in her pussy, but in the front of her panties, and then she puts on some tight leggings or yoga pants which press Max into her. Then imagine Dianne doing the splits and her weight is resting on Max, her pussy lips smothering him. Even an excercise bike would be nice.
I hope before they leave to work, Dianne says something sexy like "Hey Max, wake up!" "Today, I'm taking you to work. That way you won't escape and I can keep you nice and close". "I got a special place for you to stay". She points. Max has a fearful look. "Don't worry Max. It's going to be nice and tight for you so you want fall out". "You are going to spend all day in here. mhmm, doesn't that sound good. Being all cozy with me".
After more teasing, "I'm going to enjoy this. In you go". Then some more teasing. "Ooohhh Max, that feels great. I should keep you forever." Dianne walks to her mirror. "My my, no one would be able to notice you Max. You fit inside nicely."
Ok, you don't need all that. I just went overboard into fantasy.
Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter!
The unbirth thing is a little weird to me too but I'm glad you found it comical. I try to get each chapter over 1000 words which this chapter was exactly, but some chapters can go to 1300.
I appreciate your thoughts on each chapter, you've got everything down to the point you could probably take over as the author and very few would notice lol
I'll add in some of your dialogue too because you've given me continuous good reviews and ratings! :)