Date: April 01 2018 8:59 PM Title: Dying Naked Vomit Girl
Omg my second review if you please? :) I loved the story the first time I read it... and loved the same even more the second time. I must say... alas... your description of complete digestive journey... all the way from tongue to toilet... was truly my favourite part of this tail. Not to mention... the unaware aspect on top of everything else... was something I particularly found orgasmicly exquisite.
Glad I stumbled on this one again.💭👍🏾
Date: May 06 2017 9:41 AM Title: Dying Naked Vomit Girl
Damn, you had to knock Ed Sheeran, didn't you. Why couldn't have knocked Train's Play that Song lol jk. Another great short but I just have one critism for you but please please please don't take it the wrong way. How come you didn't describe Thalia's or Anna's appearance? You know like hair color, hair style, body shape (*Cough* Ed Sheeran is awesome. *Cough), clothing (although Anna was naked). Other than that, I like the unusual and unique way you displayed the unaware gts vore scene along with being really desciptive without sounding too complicating for the readers. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
Author's Response: I don't mind Ed Sheeran, it's just part of the story. I sometimes neglect to describe my giantesses because their appearance doesn't come up. I described Thalia as caramel-skinned, I imagine her as south Asian. Probably Tamil or Sinhalese. I think Anna is Caucasian.
Date: May 05 2017 2:13 AM Title: Dying Naked Vomit Girl
Not my cup of tea but that's okay. I dug it! Problems: First, several times there is an "x" where, apparently there should be the word "against" or something similar. You say the tiny hits the ground, drops to the ground, something something against the ground... but the poor thing is on a hot dog the entire time- not the ground. Sure, whatever enormous, nightmarish surface beneath her is *her* ground. But... not the ground. These are just quibbles. "before she stepped away to build with her SO." Took me a bit, SO is S.O.- significant other? Okay. Got it. What is build? I'm old, ancient, in fact. Is it slang? A typo? Don't know. But it doesn't matter. You went "Wham!" and laid out a compelling story in 2164 words. That's a great job.
P.S. I am assuming the mucus surrounding poor Anna was the result of Thalia's body rejecting digesting her wholesale. It would have been nice to mention that either Thalia felt indigestion, or to have Anna completely digested except perhaps her almost microscopic teeth and the hard, enamelled ends of her largest bones, much like what happens in a cremation. JMHO. I hope to read more form you in the future!
Author's Response: 'x' means across. 'Building' is slang for having a deep, insightful or creative conversation.