Date: October 22 2017 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nobody joked about "beta reader" vs "Beta reader"? wtf happened?
Anyway this story was pretty good, or simply great considering it's your first.
Is there anything we can do to persuade you to write a second story?
LOL I didn't even catch onto that, so good eye.
And thank you very much! No need for persuasion, I started a second story but life's been so crazy for me this past year, I haven't found any time to sit down and finish! I know this reply is late, but hopefully when I get the chance to upload it, the interest will still be there.
Date: March 30 2017 1:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
Cool story :) Some good detail and some fun action scenes, very enjoyable POV descriptions and Alpha's attitude though I think attention to size comparison needs some fine tuning. Some of the comparisons seemed to make the Tiny appear to change sizes (not assuming she did, just some of the items she was compared to seemed disproportionate).
Over-all though, very enjoyable, as someone else said looking forward to some more and perhaps some of the butt-punishment you teased haha :P
She did change sizes throughout, actually! Though I take it I need to be more obvious/explicit when I write similar subtle size changes in my narratives in the future. Thank you for the tip! Unfortunately, this is the end for this story. Though in the one I'm a fan of ass play, my next story will most likely have some of that :P this reply is super late (nearly a year lol) so I apologize for that, but your words were kindly received! Thanks!
Date: March 27 2017 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's annoying to read without proper paragraphs.
I shy away from doing big paragraphs. I can try to make them a couple more lines thicker in the future, but if you're expecting big blocks, just avoid any works with my penname attached if it's so annoying for you.
Date: March 21 2017 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
Welcome to the party Stella.
I have to admit, I'm not a big fan of feet, but I love F/f. That said, I found myself kind of sqirming along with Diana. Poor little thing.
These are some great characters, and that really matters to me as a reader.
Please keep writing and enjoy your time here.
I'm mega late with my reply to this, but thank you for the welcome! This past year was too crazy for me to actually get into writing for the community here like I wanted, I'm hoping this year I can contribute more because I'm a big F/f fan and wish there was more of it on here :P
Also, I'm glad the characters resonated with you well! Thanks for the comment!