Date: March 14 2017 10:03 PM Title: The Tower of Joy
I sort of feel bad for the Kingsguard. They were in an impossible position. Their prince, Rhaegar, commanded them to protect Lyanna and her child and declared that child his heir. Legally, they should have declared for Aegon once Rhaegar was dead but they were trying to honor his final wish. Well, at least Elia sentenced them to the Night's Watch rather than kill them.
Minor thing but the grammatical issues are still bugging me a bit (I'm an editor in my day job. Sorry). Word of advice: Plurals don't need an apostrophe. It would be Starks and Baratheons, not Stark's and Baratheon's.
Other than issues like that, this is a pretty cool story. I'm enjoying this alternate timeline and the fact that Elia is doing her best to be a gentle giantess.
Author's Response:
Hey thanks for the review and advice. Grammar is not my strongest technique so all advice is greatly welcomed.
I agree that the Kingsguard's were in an impossible situation and that they took their vows seriously and would not yield to anyone, no matter how futile their resistance would be.
I have tried to show Rhaegar as an idealist who wanted to do the right thing but not understanding or caring about how it is perceived by others. Rhaegar running off with Lyanna falls under that category and I could see Rhaegar naming Lyanna's child as his heir due to his belief in the power of the union of Ice and Fire.
Elia's beserk button is someone harming her children, and any ambiguity over who is King could be potentially hazardous for Aegon. Elia's tolerance for Ashara's and Stannis' defiance stems from her knowing it came from a duty to their loved ones as well as not harming Elia or other people in the long term. I love writing Elia as a gentle Giantess who consciously wants to do the right thing, as well as trying to be a hands on loving mother and exploring her repressed desires at the same time.
I am glad you are enjoying this story, I have cool ideas in my head for future chapters.