[Report This]Date: November 14 2019 1:35 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
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[Report This]Date: January 09 2017 1:40 AM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
Sorry I forgot to rate! No problem! & thank you, I do have a story I've recently started on this site, however, I find it hard to enjoy my own writing when reading it rather than others. It removes the unknown that your story holds as I already know what'll happen in mine.
Date: January 08 2017 5:08 AM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
Very interesting story! Has me on the ropes at times with what is going to happen to some characters, poor school commitment leads to shrinking with the potential for a death sentence by a teacher or any student if they choose to do so? Quite scary, one of the hardest things to do is create fear within writing, it's hard to visualise. Yet using an inspired theme, you've managed to show the kinds of dread characters experience and fear some characters can inspire much like the girl in the most recent chapter! well writen! i envy your skills!
Author's Response: Oh gosh that means a lot to me ;U; thank you so much! You could do it too with a little effort, I think. I'm barely a writer, I just read a lot of good ones!
[Report This]Date: January 04 2017 8:56 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
Jon Striker also approves :)
[Report This]Date: January 04 2017 12:32 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
Well written with such realistic dialogue from the characters. Keep up the good work. ;)
Date: December 10 2016 7:02 AM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
That was really, truly, very good. Your descriptors and conveyance of imagery is spot-on. I liked your use of tildes to convey the upward inflection in Michelle's voice. Do you mind if I make use of your characters in my own CoG works? Lily herself is of particular interest to me because one of my stories is told from Dr. Northend's perspective.
Author's Response: I can't believe I missed this review. Please! By all means use my characters, I'd like nothing more than for you all to use my characters, especially Lily! I'm super happy you like my writing? And I hope you enjoy it more from now on!
Date: November 26 2016 7:58 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
What a great short read, I really like the depiction of the characters involved.
Date: November 25 2016 12:19 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
You add multiple size roles by holding the "command" key as you select them. That's how it works on my computer, at least.
Also, about Michelle using her body in creative ways. I was thinking of doing a short where during freetime, Michelle captures Jeremy and uses him as part of a demonstration for Lily. Using her cocky, sadistic, and teasing personality, she'd be showing off to Lily how great of a giantess she is by toying with Jeremy while Lily watches. Lily will be wishing she was in Jeremy's place (probably) while Jeremy is wishing he was literally anywhere else. That, or she'd be trying to bully his english homework out of him.
Do either of those seem characteristic of Michelle or would something else work better?
Anyways, enjoy your Holidays!
Author's Response: Michelle would definitely not hide her sadistic tendencies from Lily, but she's totally clueless when it comes to people's feelings. She would tease and torture him in front of Lily, who'd flush a little and be a little jealous (secretly), then toy with him more violently herself. Lily has experience in ballet and loves crushing with e v e r y part of her body, potentially being more violent than Michelle when her own sadism kicks in, kicking, Licking, biting, crushing between lips pits breasts tummy and butt, so I can imagine her being a little vindictive. Thanks for help on the size roles I'll fix those soon!
[Report This]Date: November 24 2016 8:53 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
I don't know, I liked it. It was good at introducing us to a character. I'd like to see more.
Author's Response: And there will be more, when I whip out my phone at midnight and am a rare mix of bored and horny (oops). More to come for sure.
[Report This]Date: November 23 2016 10:30 AM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
For a first story, its amazing! For a story that could have been one of many, its just as good. Keep up the good work little sis~
That being said literally the premise of just. Everything being tied to grades really can set in that intense fear of failure.
The pacing was perfect for a story of this length, the detailing was great, and overall, I loved it~
Author's Response: Thanks sis! The fear is real~I'll try to keep writing like this!
[Report This]Date: November 22 2016 10:21 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
This is really good for a first. Kept it interesting and fresh throughout and it never felt like things got stale. Short, sweet and gave us good glimpses at the characters. The use of dialogue throught helps a lot and good creative humilation. I don't have anything bad to say about this one. I'm excited to see what you write next!
Also, almost finished up with part 2 of my short. Your very own Michelle plays a very big role in it just like in part 1 so i'd like to see what you think of how I wrote her when I put it up.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Awww thank you! I'm happy you think my work is so good! I didn't even pace myself I just wrote stuff out lol. Michelle is best~ and speaking of Michelle, thanks for using her! She's a cutie~ don't be afraid to let her use her body in creative ways: she's fully aware she's attractive.
Date: November 22 2016 9:43 PM Title: 1: Heart-to-heart
Very nice, very nice. I've been waiting on your take, and honestly I like what you've made. Bravo!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I liked what you did in your last chapter as well, it's just that, Lily seemed so openly masochistic and lesbian, I would imagine Lily would be really shy and almost never admit these things out loud. And anyway wait till you see her sadistic streak~ I'll dabble in other characters, and I'll probably pinch Madeline. Hope things go well!