[Report This]Date: January 29 2018 12:20 AM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
Hi! I'm now a bit earlier than the last time. Hope to be able to keep the free time for reading...
So, starting with another flashback. I wonder what triggers them? I tried figuring out the monster's identity in Abby's dream but seem like I can't pinpoint it yet. At first, I thought it might be some kind of elf because of the ears but it might be something more demon-like.
Moving on, pretty cute and informative session with Abby and Eve. Too bad for them that it was more informative than sexy. I wonder about Enya's identity but not a clue now. So far I can only think of a Lamia because it was mentioned before but really is just a vague guess. It should be a strong kind though, I suppose. Also makes me wonder about her past since she might have human blood running through her?
Poppy smelling earthly is just Eve way of saying she's sweaty...? lol
Anyway, lavender and lemon on the scene, somehow I found them even more adorable this time! And their first encounter with Eve was somehow cute, even in that scary situation. Glad to hear Eve isn't too pained about Abby losing her clothes one way or another. Rather sad to see such a hard work wasted all the time.
I think I know who the next girl is but will wait to confirm my theories in the next one. Nice chapter.
See ya~
Author's Response: Glad you were able to review at all Kenta. Sorry if life’s keeping you busy. It’s annoying sometimes. >,< In regards to Enya, I already put enough hints in this chapter to cover what she is with what I’ve said so no more will be revealed... For now. I also wanted a more calming chapter here to make room for what's to come next. It's hard to find moments of peace in a story like this but they are needed none the less. I expect most everyone to know who the next girl is as well but font worry, you'll meet her soon enough. I'm glad you liked the scents bits I added in. It has a purpose though, I assure you. See you around Kenta. I hope you can find time to review again whenever I post next time. :D
[Report This]Date: January 22 2018 3:39 PM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
Geez, I'm starting to think that you love us suffering, you literally left it in the most interesting part! And also, I'm guessing that she is Amy (I think she was called like that in the photos), since she us like half-crow and she did say 'Shiny'.
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And lets no forget the question that I ask in every comment. When are you going to update? I really hope it's soon, because you have left me very curious.
Author's Response: You'll just have to wait and see Lucia, she'll be revealing herself shortly. :P I'll try to have another chapter up by the end of the week but no promises. A lot is going on right now for me to update as regularly as I used to. :( Also yes. I take sick pleasure in leaving cliffhangers. >:3
[Report This]Date: January 22 2018 9:43 AM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
I love the caring nature of Eve in this chapter as she reads Abby's mind and shows concern for her wellbeing. You do an excellent job of portraying it.
I too so badly wanted Abby to become Eve's mate, and the interruptions were frustrating. I suppose mating would close off a major plot thread and thus it's delay has value in drawing out the story, but it's still frustrating.
I like how we're out of the flashback zone. While I loved the writing in the flashbacks, the technique in general is not my favorite. I find myself wanting to get back to the main timeline. Now that we're back, looking forward to seeing what happens next!
Author's Response: I’m glad you understand the necessity or delaying the mating factor. It holds a very significant role in the story I assure you and I can’t reveal nor explain how yet sadly. Either way, I’m glad you’re still enjoying my chapters none the less and I appreciate your input as always SpookyTaco. :3
[Report This]Date: January 22 2018 3:53 AM Title: The Hardest Goodbyes,
This is really a very special story, with the fantasy and human vs monster element. Very good idea and well written and developed with all the different characters and very much depth, really great.
Only thing i notice a very little bit negative is the very slow progress since Abby arrived in the cave. How often was she already taken to eve´s cave without any real progress and Naija still in coma, many things seem to delay almost to timestop speed awaiting to finally happen. Ok you use the time to improve the developement of the world around Abby in all directions every now and then a little bit while no real full steps in any direction ever happen... almost a sneaking progress in a cirle all around abby in snail speed.
Everytime i hope now happens something like yeah eve and abby mate.. nope abby pulls the parachute cord in the very last moment basicly nothing happend again after all that chaptor.
But its like that in many stories here as of lately, i am seriously consiering to do a giantessworld vacation and return in a few month to hopefully find some progress in my favorite stories, similar to wait till a few more tv series episodes got aired before continue watching.
Sorry for behing honest.
Author's Response:
Simpson3k, there is nothing wrong with honesty. It's a fundamental principle that is needed in development be it in life or simply in the work of writers. We use honesty to learn where we are right, or where we are wrong. Your comment is appreciated and accepted. In the past, its helped point out mistakes as well which were addressed and fixed too.
As for the progress of the story, there are two main reasons for this. The first being that there was some rework that I had to do. A lot of the plot was shifter around after the chapter 10 mark but it was done in a way I thought best of the story. I still believe it to be the right choice however so I'm going to stick with it steadfastly. And as for the other reason, this whole story is just that. A story. It's Abby's story. It's a journey, not something that can happen in an instant but an experience to be discovered both by the reader and by her. She doesn't understand whats going on either and that's the basic premise of her character.
When you say there isn't progression I counter and say there is, however, its at a real-life pace. Understanding, healing, acceptance, love, these are things that don't happen overnight. They take time to build up and work out. It may seem prolonged and in a way, they were stalled over the last few chapters but there is a necessity to them too. You reference nothing happening between Eve and Abby on the last chapter, yet I did see something. A newfound understanding between them. It may not be love yet, but its a step in the direction that needs to be made. Not all stories start at a sprint. And I believe a crawl is needed to reach this story's destination.
If you want to take a break, I won't judge you. I won't hold it against you. I've seen you waiting here patiently since this story first emerged and after 200k words later were still only past halfway done. This story was always going to be a long one, and to that, I can only say please endure. The pay off will be worth it in the end.
Please never feel pressured not to tell me what you think. I enjoy reviews that point things such as this out. And I also enjoy addressing them with people who take their time to find them and tell me them back. :)
So thank you.