[Report This]Date: November 18 2017 5:30 AM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
You two have poured your hearts into the writing, and it shows! At first, when presented with the cast of characters, I assumed there would be no way to meaningfully incoprorate all of them.
But somehow you've managed to do just that, each with their own personality and motivations.
This is the kind of story you don't want to end and it's sad when it does because the characters and community really grows on you. I hope there's still much more to come!
Author's Response: I’m glad you see it the same way as I feel SpookyTaco. :) All things must come to an end, but, the end is far off for now. So enjoy what’s to come, and thank you for your words. I’ll have something to show everyone soon enough. Well, me and F.W that is. ;P
[Report This]Date: October 31 2017 11:52 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
I've been wanting to read the chapter since it was uploaded but it was a really tough week ;_;
Have to say, I didn't really feel much for Caitriona in the previous chapter so I didn't expect to feel so bad for her now. The poor lady might've been Eve's biggest ally and got it really bad. It was so satisfying to see her trying to get her master to see Eve, yet it was so sad... At least she's safe, I suppose. By the way, I have a bit of trouble picturing her, I wonder how old she's supposed to be.
As for Ventris, seeing him acting so shaken... The who guy stood up to a vampire with almost total composure was acting nervous. That gets to show how much he actually felt for her daughter, and that the fear and hate towards vampires took priority, making killing her the only viable option. At least that's what I want to think, that even if she was an heiress for the most part, some love as there. It could've been the frustration of losing his heiress but, that's even sadder... I wonder if he was looking for any other alternatives all this time or just stalling the inevitable...
Is really a world without any intention of communication within species. Seeing Eve's wonderful recuperation, it makes you wonder how much more could be done if all species worked together. I also think of how much everything could've changed if the vampire had managed to take Eve under his wings.
And of course, Eveline is the one that had it the worst. Left in the dark about her current condition. Gradually being separated from other human's contact. Every day being treated more like a best instead of a human. And finally being betrayed by her own family... Man, why did it have to be so sad ;_; And depending on how much Naija knew about vampires, the poor girl might have had to learn the down of her conditions by painful tray an error, just as when trying to enter that building in this chapter.
And seeing Naija in action is nice, she strikes as someone with a big heart from the start. Also, must feel nice to be embraced by a fluffy tail.
As some other have pointed, I was curious about Eve's past length. It's been great of course but having these much screen time feels as if she's on a protagonist level higher than the other girls. Not that there's anything wrong with that if that's the aim. N-not that I'm saying I want some more insight on Casey or anything...
Excellent chapter.
See ya.
Author's Response:
*Smirks*
So you think I'm done with the other girls, even if they've already been shown? Think again! >:3
There will be more to come, don't you worry. I suppose the reason for so much focus on Eve is because F.W put her whole world together before creating her character. I'm pretty sure I did that backwards... I will be showing more on the others as time goes on don't worry. But, I think this needs to happen regardless. It gives a good context into how Najia comes into play. I didn't plan on revealing that till the end, but I think this is definitely needed.
I'll be back in a couple weeks time so I can take over if he can't finish the next chapter. He doesn't know when he's going to start it at least. I'm glad you're enjoying the chapters, and I'm glad that you're still reviewing them too. :)
Date: October 30 2017 3:14 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
Hi Sterben. I know it's been really long since I left a review. I hope you and F.W. are well. I've been REALLY busy with life but at least I could owe you a review now lol.
Last time I read, it was about Poppy telling her tragic past to Abby. (You did a great job with her dialogue as well btw.) Poor girl, at least Abby was there to comfort her.
Eve's past was a an emotionally rollercoaster. I knew her father was going to abandon her but I held on to some false hope it wouldn't go down that way. He was definitively an asshole from the minute he was introduced so I wasn't too surprised by his cruelty.
It was interesting seeing Eve's feral side in her backstory during her first few days into vampirehood, especially with how refine and sophisticated she is now but her past was no doubt horrible. I'm also glad we got a glimpse of Naija too! :)
You guys keep up the good work as always.
Author's Response:
I get it, life gets in the way lol. :P
I'm glad you liked the chapter too!
I knew a bit about what he planned for Eve but I have to agree, it certainly caught me by surprise to see her in a Feral state. I guess that's why he added weeks instead of days to show time. I'm eager to know how she'll act now that she's been fed though. :3
[Report This]Date: October 28 2017 12:51 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
So... When is the next chapter going to be updated?
Author's Response:
I honestly couldn't say. F.W doesn't keep up the posts like I do but I can't blame him. He has his own stuff to manage to. xD
If I had to guess though sometime in November, probably before I get back. He's told me that he plans to work more on the next chapter after Halloween. I can't wait either. :3
Date: October 26 2017 3:56 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
Eve's had it rough. It's not bad at all to get the scoop on how she wound up the way she did though, so these chapters are enjoyable.
Like i've said before though, I have been keeping up with all of your updates since PLD, so you don't need to worry about my enjoyment lol!
Also, i'm with Sirk, seeing Ebon's backstory is a definite want lol
Author's Response: Oh don’t worry, it’s coming. And I plan on it being a good one. >;) W-Well... good might not be the right word... Thank you for your review Hatter it makes me really happy to hear that. :D
[Report This]Date: October 26 2017 11:10 AM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
POOR EVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Sobs in the corner T-T
Author's Response: I’m not going to lie... I felt my heart ache to... her stories really hitting me in the feels! T~T
Date: October 24 2017 9:35 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 2
Well this chapter was excellent. Eve has such a rich backstory that subtly hints at the present character. That's oone of the positives of this story or any of your stories. Every character has a story and feels fully fleshed out. Precious Little Demons was literally structured on that and it made the story better. The only gripe I have is that everyone hasn't gotten the same amount of attention yet. Waiting for Ebon's story most of all!
Author's Response: I assure you, Ebon does indeed have a story to tell, and don’t think all the girls have given up their pasts just yet. Layers are best discovered, one at a time. ;3 Thank you so much for the review NotSirk, I promise you more will be revealed when I return. :P