Reviewer: arselover Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2016 5:02 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 4

As much as I love m/m and especially unaware ass plots + micro/nano shrinking, it's a big hard to read this. You are jumping around tenses all the time which isn't allowed in proper writing. If it's simple past, you arent allowed to change it anymore during the whole story. Also I find the chose of words like "in all it’s glory" actually really unerotic and boring, including someone speaking in just a lustful and "horny" way. The thrill and horror aspect is missing in the plot. Still I will follow this and hope for more.