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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 04 2007 11:57 AM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Waiting

I'm off to the next chapter.

Reviewer: hertinypal Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2007 4:12 PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Waiting

Nice nice chapter. For alot of reasons I enjoyed this one immensely. First off, I love the way he is trying to convince himself that his sister is not a giant. Shes just a little sister. TOO FUNNY! Its a great idea to have him denying his new place in the world and his new place in the lives of the giants! Thats one of my favorite things in stories like these where the now shrunken person still tries to convince himself that he is the same person ( only smaller)  He will in time have to face the reality that they are giants and he is liek a pet to them. It will be a hard pill to swallow for the first born. In the meantime, you keep emphasthizing his denial which is very welldone. it make the humiliation he feels all the more wonderful.

The theres the part about the warmth of her hand. i just love that ced. It would be so true if someone  were that small. Hed want the warmth and the closeness to a giant and yet, it would be totally embarrassing too. Its almost like when al drops him, he comes back to reality. He is able to just vanish into the warmth of her hand and then hes thrown back into reality. I hope when miranda and jenni get tiny jac, they spend long hours holding him in their hands. ( maybe mirnada will place him in other warm places too???) Its embarrassing as hell to be in his sisters hand but it sure must make him feel good  as prose describes it as if  its kinda paradise.The warmth of her hand felt good as it warmed me up!  NICE!

The there is the waiting....LOL He has too much time on his hands! Looking at her brush....her socks, having to contemplate his situation as he waits for her to take him out. Then she comes back home and hes nothing more than an item on her agenda. Hes insignificant which makes him furious! He waits and waits and waits and then she turns on her music and doesnt even want to know what he has to say! JUST NOD lol Nice.

Great story! Great chapter!

Then she drops a shrimp on the shrimp! Can you imagine the embarrasment of being treated that way? I loved in LITTLE AFFECTION when the daughter dropped the crumbs in on her tiny dad in her pocket. Thats what this scene reminded me of. I was hoping that jennie was going to find him though. Ally is so so immature. Poor jac. I have a feeling its going to get worse before it gets better for him. 

HTP

Reviewer: deviant Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 02 2007 11:28 PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Waiting

Keep going man, I'm finding myself checking quite often for updates of this story.

Author's Response: im glad you are enjoying the story deviant.

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