Reviews For The First Born
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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 04 2007 11:46 AM Title: Chapter Ten: The Death of my Brother

Can't wait to see how you explain this one!

Reviewer: hertinypal Signed [Report This]
Date: January 18 2007 11:02 PM Title: Chapter Ten: The Death of my Brother

another great chapter Ced. I love the way allyson seems to be handling this change in jacen. She seems to really be a little girl about it! Heh heh.  I think shes going to figure out its best for everyone to keep her little secret to herself for awhile. Her parents dont need to know. I think shes going to enjoy keeping him as her own!

I just hope she shares her news with jennie and maybe her friends too. That way jacen can get alot of girls picking him up and keeping him warm.

 

Great great story ced. I cant wait for the next chapter! I am so hooked.

HTP



Author's Response: Thanks HTP, i have worked hard to try to add a degree of realism to the characters. I didn't want alyson to just oh look my brother shrunk, awesome, begin powertrip mode which you see in alot of stories. THere is nothing wrong with that don't get me wrong i just wanted to do something different and it seems to be paying off so far.

Reviewer: billyevil Signed [Report This]
Date: January 18 2007 9:39 PM Title: Chapter Ten: The Death of my Brother

This story just keeps getting better and better.. I love what you're doing here.. I can't wait to read more.. :)

Author's Response: thanks, imhoping to get another chapter out this weekend.

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