It was a lovely story. I hope we see more from you. It's curious that a rabbit would like a fox though it's a fun story nonetheless. I think it's a great

Despite that, I noticed quite a few grammar mistakes. Sometimes I found myself having to re-read sentences because I didn't understand them. This hurts your story.

There are places where the description could be a little mroe detailed too. For example right after when the charcoal fox gets beat up. I felt there could be more more detail here. But instead you quickly switch to Jack eating with out any real description of what happened in between.

I liked the scenes at Emma's house too. But I thought they were rather brief. The nightmare scene was a great piece of character development though. It reinforced how fragile Jack is and showed a maternal side to Emma - which I was half expecting. She's a very nice character.