[Report This]Date: June 22 2023 1:41 PM Title: Good Morning
I wish Luna's mom grows even bigger and hotter.
We need huge sexy moms in the new world, much bigger than young girls!
[Report This]Date: October 03 2015 10:05 AM Title: Good Morning
Wow! One of my favorite stories of all time has been given new breath. You've done an absolutely superb job of maintaining the voice of the original series, and you clearly nailed the personalities through your coordination with SpookyTaco. I really hope you decide to keep going with this. You've done exceptional justice to the original work, and I'm just as spellbound by your words as I was by those of SpookyTaco.
I was suprised at how powerful you've made the glimmer effect on men. It seems to steal even their mental coherence and ability to maintain their own desires, let alone actions. They are truly powerless if their own desires can be subverted by the women around them. Very titillating stuff. Also, and perhaps its just too early to see, but given her misgivings in the first series, I expected to see a bit more reservation on Luna's part regarding the use of her new "powers". Instead, it seemed to only bolster her enjoyment of her new position of superiority.
Also, with Luna's recognition that sharing her man is only right and fair, I feel it's changed his role somewhat. Maybe this is by design to undermine his control even more, but something about her statement about not sharing him now seeming illogical and selfish seems to shift him from a soulmate and lover to a sort of pet that should be shared to bring enjoyment to other women. I'd be very curious to see if her new feelings on the matter drive her to compel him to service other women, perhaps even against his wishes. So far, he's appeared to prefer manogamy.
Of course, as a (very amateur) writer myself, I understand that you really need to write the story you envision. I hope I haven't offended you; I'm just trying to communicate what I was thinking as I read.
Your continuation of this story has truly grabbed me and you can be sure I'll be devouring any future chapters you put out. Fantastic work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comments! It's always great to hear how readers interpret the story.
The main thing I'll take credit for with the glimmer is naming it, since in the original story it had no name. The final Luna/Ash kissing moment in the original story already showed Luna's kiss glimmer forcing Ash into an immediate need for sex. I did heighten that a little with stammering and potential loss of conciousness.
I agree Luna hasn't expressed much reservation about her new ascended 'power'. Part of this is natural (her entire experience of life has changed), and part of this is writer's impatience, growing her into her new self too quickly. Hopefully future chapters will give me the chance to show small amounts of the original Luna peeking through, and show us that compared to other ascended women, Luna is already acting with great restraint.
As for Ash, it's impossible for Luna's ascension not to change his situation. The questions are how fast? and how much? I have many future chapters planned and outlined. Enjoy them as I post them.
Date: September 30 2015 10:06 AM Title: Good Morning
Beautiful, just plain beautiful and honestly I believe it is great seeing little Luna now fully ascended and going through an awakening of sorts for seeing her husband Ash for how wonderful he is and also how beautiful she has become.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 5:35 PM Title: Good Morning
Even if this wasn't a continuation of my story, I'd want to read this. You're a skilled writer, and you bring the characters to life in a unique way. The jump from first person to third person omniscient works quite well, as it highlights the shift between authors, and provides new perspective. I enjoyed the movement from Luna's to Ash's mind toward the end of this chapter. Normally I find such transitions jarring, but the intimacy allowed a natural transition. You almost perfectly matched the Ash and Luna in my mind, especially Ash. And Luna was tricky because she's Ascended and should behave a bit different. I liked how you portrayed her new intellectual gift, as something available but perhaps not always 'on' unless she chooses to access it. Please continue. :)
Author's Response:
I'm glad I matched your mental image of Ash and Luna. That's high praise, coming from the original author.
I find writing Luna the hardest, since she should remember the way she treated Ash before, and the way she treats Ash should change -- but not too fast. It's a tough balance. I mostly worry she's changing too fast, so I try to slow it down as much as I can. - Thanks for the feedback!
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 2:12 PM Title: Good Morning
I liked the 3rd chapter as well, Luna is definitely enjoying herself as an ascended. I feel like it's going to be difficult for her to take her husband seriously and treat him as an equal like she did before now that she's ascended. I get the impression that ascended women have ascended ego's too, if that makes any sense...It comes with the package. Anyway, I too agree with Nostory, this chapter was hard to read in it's current state, the first chapter had the perfect format!
Date: September 21 2015 2:02 PM Title: Good Morning
I support Nostroy's request for more space paragraphs to make easy the reading. However good 1st chapter.
Date: September 20 2015 7:41 PM Title: Good Morning
I read some of the stories on your website, I think some of them should be released here, they're good enough for that.
Author's Response:
I don't resist posting here because I don't think my stories are good enough. I'm exclusively interested in amazon/minigts stories, and I find the UI here cumbersome to hunt these down and ignore the rest. (I have to use advanced search, and exclude filters, it takes quite some time) I primarily post on Giantess City forums, because there we just use subject tags like "minigts" and I find it easier to pick out the stories I like this way.
I've also had problems here with the story submission forms eating my effort a few times, and that's really annoying and time consuming. It happens because in an incognito window, the login cookie seems to only last ten minutes or so, and when it times out before I submit the form, the site eats my form submission and tells me to login again.
That said, I'm also not opposed to posting more stories here. I'll try to find some time to put more stuff up soon.
Date: September 20 2015 8:19 AM Title: Good Morning
Great to see this story here, I love what you've written. You should start a series called Ascended with Spooky. Group Luna's Ascension and this under that banner.