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Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26 2015 5:55 PM Title: All's Well That Burps Well

I really cant wait for that anaeversity story. I wonder what will await Simon after Tommy finds out, maybe Tommy uses the shrinkray on him, even by accident or just out in a word fight it shots at Simon without Tommy noticing, and Tommy just thinks Simon left in anger, but unfortunaty he become shrunk. I also saw the shrunk size was 1/4" for the agent here, I wonder if the shrink ray could even shrink smaller like having a knob for the shrinking level, maybe shrinking up to 1/128" which would be the size on an amoeba size. Seeing the movie Ant-Man the idea popped into my mind from the words "going sub-atomic". Even amoeba size of course would be way larger than atomic scale, it still would be so tiny, that the human eye couldnt see it of course. A single rain drop would be like swimming in an large sea. A plot could be awesome where Simon becomes so tiny, that there would be no chance after all Tommy would even see him anymore. And the only chance of communication would be through Simons cell phone and calling Tommy. But Simon would need to come over his own ego calling Tommy, where he hated him right now. A cool idea also would be Tommy not believing Simon on the phone or getting him wrong, or just ignoring him. Or another cool idea Tommy wanted to tease Simon of putting him into a situation where he would be eaten, totally out of anger about the cheating which took place, but it was just planed as a "lesson" and Tommy would save Simon in the last moment, which unfortunatly goes totally wrong. I also loved how Tommy just stood there looking at the micro agent without doing anything to help him, and then just didnt even say anything when Emma took the bottle.

Reviewer: Prodi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2015 11:08 PM Title: All's Well That Burps Well

A nice short story indeed! I just love your writing. You always manage to keep me on edge wondering if everyone's going to survive. Keep it up :)



Author's Response:

Thx! I'll start writing the new sotry this week and have the firsit chapter ready for the anniversary

Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2015 7:37 PM Title: All's Well That Burps Well

OMG what a superb finish!! Loving the Tommy chapters the most, the best part was where he shrank by accident the agent, landing on his butt and having a confused look of where the guy went to, then stepping forward and noticing the tiny guy at the bottle opening. I loved the fact so much how Tommy must have leaned forward with a confused face expression, the tiny screaming for help, and then Emma just taking a gulp, and Tommy standing there dumbfoulded just be like "Uh...", so great! And the ending is great too, leading to very interesting plot twist, I guess Tommy wouldnt be too amazed to find out about what Emma recorded.



Author's Response:

Thx 4 the review! Glad you liked that scene and for how Tommy reacts to the big news, well itll all be revealed in the new one!

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2015 6:43 PM Title: All's Well That Burps Well

You mostly already know I am not a fan of happy endings :3 So I wished either Simon or Jenny wouldnt make it mostly by some foolish reason Tommy did, for example where they were all in the mouth near rescue and then Tommy told Emmy to drink the rest. But anyway the chapter was still awesome and 5 stars worthy :3 Great tiny story loved every single bit of it, I think it's your best work so far, loved just the touch and style, and just everything. Loved the part where Tommy got a boner standing next to Emma haha. I wonder what the one year anniversary has to offer, Im sure it will be awesome. I know you know I would already wish for things to happen, but I also know you dont like plot requests :p Still I loved the Tommy part of the last chapter, he's just my favorite chapter, please never let him die!! I would love it so much if Tommy unknownigly would be the reason to let Simon die actually, in an ironic way, and maybe afterwards Tommy would create another Shrinkray club. Really great plot this was. Youre the best!!



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing! I'll try to include more of Tommy in the next story since SImons been the main character for these past two stories and i think youll like the new story too!

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