[Report This]Date: July 25 2015 1:41 PM Title: Tummy Trouble
what a great story, loving it, love unaware vore the most also when the micros become nano size around dust particle or ant size. keep up the amazing work. also I like fun plots like this with some touch if irony, how the two ended in that bitch belly lierally was amazing.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for the 5-star and for reviewing! Glad you like the story
Date: July 22 2015 1:29 PM Title: Tummy Trouble
Hey welcometothejungle, I think I've read all your stories (the majority at least). I just finished reading the first two chapters of this one recently and I'm liking it immensely. I love vore and naturally like the setup you got going on in this story. I think it would be awesome if Mr Lawrence had a bigger role in this story. Oh, and I also think it would be awesome if Emma discovered she had two people in her stomach, clinging to life. I think it would match her personality if she decided to ensure her former classmates meet their fates within her digestive tract. This is all, like, just my opinion. I can't wait to see where this story goes.
Author's Response:
Hey thanks for reviewing! Dont worry, mr. Lawrence isn't done yet and I hope u like how everything ends!
[Report This]Date: July 18 2015 10:09 PM Title: Tummy Trouble
cant wait to see how its continuing, enjoyed this a lot so far, especially how the girl is a total bitch, would be so badass to see tommy not making it in time or messing things up. one litle plot hole I think though was the time window from the detention to the girl meeting her friends. shouldnt the two be digested by that already, dont know it seemed like there was some hours in between that. but still great work keep it goin dude
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! As for the plot hole, i guess it didn't make it clear enough that it was only a few minutes when Emma walked over to her friends because the evil teacher let her out early now that his job was done. and Simon and Jenny are supposed to be floating on something she ate earlier to prevent them from being digested, but yeah i could probably work on my details better
[Report This]Date: July 18 2015 8:08 PM Title: Tummy Trouble
Fantastic chapter, loving every bit of it. The idea with the cell phone was awesome!! Again such a cliffhanger at the end. Not much to say, but 10 out of 10 points, and it makes me sad the last part is just next week, ha :-) Totally this story had the right style again of action, some other parts before were a bit "boring" some may say. Too bad though Tommy is aware about it now, I would had liked it much more if he had stayed unaware. I know you dont take ideas, and I will just say it for myself, I imagine a scene where Tommy is trying to flirt with Emma, maybe even getting intimate, and the rescue plan didnt really play out as hoped. An ironic twist could be that just one of the two gets burped out and the other stays behind, and if it's Simon to get into a tiny burp bubble, wouldnt have short joy about it, and the tiny gas bubble gets inhalated by Tommy without noticing it and caughting and swallowing it. or the tiny spit bubble lands on the floor and Tommy stepps on it. Loving the story mostly the most of yours so far, really great ! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing again zol and for the 5-stars ! as for how it ends, youll have to wait for the weekend but i hope u guys like what ive got planed! I've been really hard at work this week trying 2 write it but i think itll set up the next major story nicely