[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 11:03 PM Title: An Unexpected Trip
I don't see what you were worried about. This was more like PG than R...which I don't mind at all.
Author's Response:
The only thing I was worried about was too much fan service taking away from the story, but seeing that isn't a problem, glad you enjoyed!
[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 10:28 PM Title: An Unexpected Trip
Yeah this chapter is fine. The chapter was really good. I would like to read more about butts, boobs, etc. But there is a line somewhere though. As long as it continues to be a gentle story. Then you will have my review.
One of the things I find odd is how weak the telepath is. You think Michelle would be a strong witch to cast the spell range more than two feet. And I know your trying to write unaware parts.
But I doubt she would forget where she put him. But it did lead to a good chapter.
Author's Response:
Earlier in chapter 3 the weakness of the telepathic link was explained by Michelle only had one alchemy stone. I really made the telepathic link weak to allow for unaware situations like I'm chapter six. I figured since most of the unaware scenes were unwanted by Iaaac, he could have just warned her if it had a larger range. As always, thanks for the reviews!
[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 10:20 PM Title: Date Night
That's great I lost my review before I could submit it. So first, awesome chapter. Secondly, are we going to see more of the magic side to this story. Like spells or other magical things. I feel like you have a element that can help this story.
Author's Response:
Yep! The next three Chapters I believe are focused around that. After that I didn't use it as much, but I'll put some more in. Thanks for the reviews!
[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 10:09 PM Title: Her Secret
Thanks for taking my review into consideration. It was alot easier to read this time. I can tell things are going to get more exciting.
Now that some of the back story is out of the way.
[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 5:08 PM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
I love the butt part of the story and you've just barely scratched the surface of that category. So I hope there is MORE booty to come!! Chapters being a little longer wouldn't hurt but other than that this is a great story!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!
Author's Response:
Oh yeah that's in the next chapter. It might be the biggest fan service chapter in the story. I appreciate the feedback!
[Report This]Date: June 09 2015 9:43 AM Title: Her Secret
A refreshingly cute story, so far. With a teen couple who are refreshingly good friends. As opposed to stereotypically dysfunctional (he's initially domineering; she's initially submissive; then--wham!--vice-versa).
Author's Response:
Thanks! I appreciate the feedback! I thought making the main character someone who wasn't into gts stuff would add to the realism of the character.
Date: June 09 2015 6:14 AM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
Also i liked the feet scenes so far
Date: June 09 2015 6:12 AM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
great story!!
however it seems like everytime i say that the author stops writing around ch6
so please... dont be like the other authors... PLEASE finish this story all the way
also.. to Flaming_Heart please keep on reviewing...
Author's Response:
I have twelve chapters already written :), I'll go ahead and post the next one now. Thanks for the feedback!
[Report This]Date: June 08 2015 9:28 PM Title: Michelle's House
Ok, how small is he? I would think she would have noticed him by now. Don't you think?
Anyways nice chapter. Just need a bit more information to clear up these questions. And maybe make the chapters a bit longer then leave a jaw dropping cliffhanger at the end.
Hopefully others will leave a review. Because if I have to I will leave 10 reviews:)
Author's Response:
Posting next chapter now! This is the info chapter, where his condition is explained. He is about an inch and a half tall, and I had Michelle wearing headphones and preoccupied with other tasks to make the unaware scenes not too realistic, I just wanted to write some good unawre haha. Feedback is much appreciated, posting the next chapter now.
[Report This]Date: June 08 2015 9:19 PM Title: Escaping the Library
Wow i just cringed at the part where he hit the librarians sweaty feet. Another good chapter, but the same things I said in my other review.
Author's Response:
^^unrealistic
I had her wearing headphones to make the unaware scenes not unrealistic.
[Report This]Date: June 08 2015 9:04 PM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
Good start to the story. You should space out your paragraphs a little more. So it's not just blocks of text.
Date: June 08 2015 4:09 PM Title: Just a Simple Trip to the Library
Really like this story, especially the feet parts. ;)
Author's Response:
Thanks! There is more of that to come!